Study— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，建议简化句子并注意时态和介词的使用，使表达更自然流畅。

Ví dụ: I am currently a college student majoring in finance. I chose this field because my father works in investments, and I want to gain a deep understanding of the financial market.

Gợi ý: 回答内容不清晰，语法错误较多，建议使用简单明了的句子直接回答问题，并用连接词组织句子，使表达更连贯。

Ví dụ: I study at college, but I usually prefer to study at home. Because I am introverted, I find it easier to concentrate when I am alone rather than with my classmates.

Gợi ý: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，建议使用完整句子并避免断句，增加连接词使表达更流畅。

Ví dụ: Yes, I think it is a good place for me to study. When I am alone, I can focus better on my work, so my results are usually better than when I study with my classmates.

Gợi ý: 回答较为完整，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更连贯，同时注意词汇搭配的准确性。

Ví dụ: Actually, I don't want to change the place where I study because I am very familiar with it and most of my friends are here. Moreover, it is a good environment for me to learn about the global financial market, so I plan to stay there in the future.

Gợi ý: 回答内容不清晰且语法错误严重，建议简化表达，明确说明未来计划，并使用正确的词汇和句子结构。

Ví dụ: After I graduate, I plan to study investment in more depth. Although I have basic knowledge from my finance major, I want to focus more on this area to improve my skills.

× I chose this field is related about my father's job about investments and I want to have a deep knowledge about the financial market at first.

✓ I chose this field because it is related to my father's job in investments, and I want to have a deep knowledge of the financial market first.

原句中“is related about”用法错误，正确表达应为“is related to”，且句子结构不完整，需用because引导原因状语从句。建议使用“because it is related to”来表达原因。

× I chose this field is related about my father's job about investments and I want to have a deep knowledge about the financial market at first.

✓ I chose this field because it is related to my father's job in investments, and I want to have a deep knowledge of the financial market first.

“related about”是错误搭配，正确搭配是“related to”；“job about investments”应改为“job in investments”；“knowledge about”应改为“knowledge of”。这些都是介词使用错误。

× I started in college is good and most of the time I preferred to them at home instead of starting with my.

✓ I started college well, and most of the time I preferred to study at home instead of with my classmates.

原句结构混乱，缺少谓语动词，且“preferred to them at home”表达不清，应改为“preferred to study at home”。句子需要调整顺序和补充缺失成分。

× Classmates would be 'cause I am very introverted and I don't like to spend time with others, it can't make me concentrate on my work.

✓ I avoid classmates because I am very introverted and I don't like to spend time with others; it makes me unable to concentrate on my work.

“Classmates would be 'cause”表达不正确，且“it can't make me concentrate”语法错误，应改为“it makes me unable to concentrate”。代词使用不当，句子不通顺。

× So that said, the result might be better than I am. Do it with my classmate.

✓ That said, the result might be better than when I do it with my classmates.

“than I am. Do it with my classmate”断句错误，且代词使用不当，应合并为一句并调整代词和动词形式。

× For one thing, I am very familiar with this place and most of my friends are here with me too.

✓ For one thing, I am very familiar with this place, and most of my friends are here with me as well.

“here with me too”表达不够正式，建议用“here with me as well”更合适。

× After I graduate so I plan to learn investment.

✓ After I graduate, I plan to learn about investment.

“After I graduate so I plan”中“so”多余且破坏句子结构，应去掉并加逗号。

× Financial give me a basic health fund mention about.

✓ Finance gives me a basic understanding of health funds.

原句词汇使用错误，“Financial”应为“Finance”，“give me a basic health fund mention about”表达不清，应改为“gives me a basic understanding of health funds”。

× This area, but I still need to pay more attention to one point so that I could do better.

✓ In this area, I still need to pay more attention to one point so that I can do better.

“This area”前缺少介词“in”，且“could”应改为“can”以符合语境。