Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant and conveys meaning, but it has hesitations, some redundancy, and a few grammatical slips. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence without filler (avoid 'uh'). 2) Limit to 3–4 concise sentences. 3) Use linking words to organize ideas (for example, 'because', 'so', 'therefore'). 4) Replace vague phrases with specific vocabulary (e.g., 'preserve memories' instead of 'reminding themselves of their memories').

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. I often capture landscapes and family moments because looking at these photos helps me remember special occasions. For example, I keep albums of trips and gatherings that I revisit when I want to feel nostalgic.

Gợi ý: Your preference is clear, but the answer has repetition, filler sounds, and incomplete ending. To improve: 1) Use one clear topic sentence stating your preference. 2) Give two specific reasons with linking words ('because', 'whereas', 'in contrast'). 3) Avoid repeating words like 'full of'—use varied vocabulary ('crowded', 'congested'). 4) Finish your thought completely and watch capitalization/grammar (e.g., 'peace of mind').

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and visually appealing. For example, countryside scenes have open fields and greenery, which are relaxing, whereas urban areas tend to be crowded and noisy. Therefore, rural landscapes help me feel calmer and more refreshed.

Gợi ý: Your answer honestly admits limited experience, which is fine, but the response is disfluent and has grammar errors. To improve: 1) Begin with a direct topic sentence (e.g., 'I haven't travelled much'). 2) Remove filler words and correct grammar ('I haven't even travelled around India'). 3) Offer a brief opinion or hypothetical to extend the answer (e.g., 'However, I imagine...'). 4) Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use connecting words like 'however' or 'although'.

Ví dụ: I haven't traveled much, so I don't have strong personal experience comparing views at home and abroad. However, I imagine that each country offers different kinds of beauty—for instance, India likely has diverse landscapes like mountains and coasts, while other countries might offer different cultural settings and architecture.

× I like taking pictures of different sceneries and viewpoints as I'm a kind of person who likes to, uh, revisit their mobile gallery for reminding themselves of their memories and the most special moments which we have spent with our families and friends.

✓ I like taking pictures of different scenery and viewpoints because I'm the kind of person who likes to revisit my mobile gallery to remind myself of memories and the most special moments I have spent with my family and friends.

Errors: 'sceneries' should be 'scenery' (uncountable) and 'their' and 'themselves' are wrong pronouns for the speaker (use 'my' and 'myself'); 'for reminding' is an incorrect verb pattern — use 'to remind'; 'we have spent with our families and friends' mixes pronouns and plurality — use 'I have spent with my family and friends'. Suggestion: use uncountable nouns when appropriate, match pronouns to the speaker, and use infinitive after verbs expressing purpose (to + verb).

× So I think it's a good way to preserve our memories for a long time.

✓ So I think it's a good way to preserve our memories for a long time.

No grammatical correction needed for prepositions; sentence is acceptable. Note: could also say 'preserve memories for a long time' without 'our' to be more general. This entry is included to indicate checked preposition use.

× I think views in rural area are far more beautiful and uh cheerful as compared to those in urban areas as urban areas are full of crowd, full of traffic and congestion.

✓ I think views in rural areas are far more beautiful and cheerful compared to those in urban areas, which are full of crowds, traffic, and congestion.

Errors: 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match context; 'as compared to' is wordy — use 'compared to' or 'than'; 'full of crowd' should be 'full of crowds' (countable noun plural). Suggestion: ensure noun number matches context and use standard comparative phrasing.

× Whereas in rural areas we get calm, cheerful and thriving environment and a Peace of Mind which we can't even.

✓ In rural areas we get a calm, cheerful, and thriving environment and a peace of mind that we sometimes cannot find in cities.

Errors: sentence is incomplete and unidiomatic ('which we can't even' leaves out the object); missing articles ('a calm... environment'); 'Peace of Mind' should be lowercased and idiomatically 'peace of mind'; needs comparison target such as 'in cities'. Suggestion: complete the clause, add necessary articles, and use natural comparative phrasing.

× Indeed, I'm not the kind of person who travels a lot, even if being an Indian, I have not even, uh, travelled India once in my lifetime, so I don't even have any experience weather views are nice in my own country or in other countries.

✓ Indeed, I'm not the kind of person who travels a lot. Even though I am Indian, I have not even traveled around India once in my life, so I don't have any experience to judge whether views in my own country are nicer than those in other countries.

Errors: 'even if being an Indian' is incorrect; use 'even though I am Indian' or 'although I am Indian'; 'travelled India' is incorrect verb pattern — use 'traveled around India' or 'been to India'; 'in my lifetime' is wordy — 'in my life' is natural; 'I don't even have any experience weather views are nice' is ungrammatical — needs 'to judge whether views... are nicer than...' Suggestion: use proper subordinating conjunctions, correct verb patterns for travel, and proper clause to express inability to compare.