Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Thí sinh
Absolutely yes. I love photographing some beautiful places, especially natural that schools because it helps me capture memories and I can share the photos with my friends.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Thí sinh
I prefer rural areas because I think the natural views makes me more comfortable and relaxing. The urban areas I think it may be a little too noisy.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Thí sinh
I'd like to choose my own country because, you know, China is a big country, there's a lot of beautiful places and I think travel to other countries too expensive and I have no.
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: 句子表达较为直接,但存在语法错误和用词不当(如“natural that schools”),句子较长且信息堆砌,缺少连贯性。建议:1) 修正语法错误,使用简洁自然的主句和一两个支持细节;2) 使用连接词使句子更连贯(例如“because”“so”);3) 提供更具体的细节或例子(具体地点或拍摄对象)。示例回答不超过5句。
Ví dụ: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing natural landscapes such as mountains and lakes because they change with the light. I take photos to remember special trips and to share the best shots with my friends on social media.
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Điểm: 76.0Gợi ý: 回答清晰直接且表达了原因,但有一些小语法问题(主谓一致、句子衔接)和重复表达。建议:1) 注意主谓一致(“views make me”);2) 用连接词如“because”或“as”使因果更自然;3) 加入具体对比细节(例如环境、气味、声音或活动)以丰富内容。保持不超过5句。
Ví dụ: I prefer rural areas because natural scenery makes me feel more relaxed and peaceful. In the countryside there is less noise and more fresh air, so I can really enjoy the view. In contrast, urban views are busier and often feel crowded.
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答表达了偏好和原因,但结构不够完整,有口语填充词(“you know”)和未完成的句子(“I have no”)。建议:1) 避免多余填充词,完成句子并给出具体理由;2) 使用连接词(例如“because”或“also”)并举例说明中国哪里景色好;3) 保持简洁清楚,不超过5句。
Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because China has a great variety of landscapes, from deserts to mountains and coastlines. Also, traveling domestically is often cheaper and more convenient than going abroad. For example, I can visit a beautiful mountain in a weekend without spending too much.
× I love photographing some beautiful places, especially natural that schools because it helps me capture memories and I can share the photos with my friends.
✓ I love photographing beautiful places, especially natural ones, because it helps me capture memories and I can share the photos with my friends.
句中“natural that schools”是不正确的表达。应使用名词替代词把形容词“natural”名词化,常用“natural ones”来指代“自然景色”。另外“some beautiful places”虽然语法上可以,但在此句中更自然的表达是直接说“beautiful places”。建议:遇到形容词想代指前面名词时,用“ones”来代替;确保从属成分清晰。
× I prefer rural areas because I think the natural views makes me more comfortable and relaxing.
✓ I prefer rural areas because I think the natural views make me more comfortable and relaxed.
主谓一致错误:主语“the natural views”为复数,谓语动词应为复数“make”而不是“makes”。另外“relaxing”通常指使人放松的事物,描述人的感受时应使用形容词“relaxed”。建议:确认主语是单数还是复数,动词要与主语一致;描述人的感受用“comfortable/relaxed”。
× The urban areas I think it may be a little too noisy.
✓ I think urban areas may be a little too noisy.
原句结构混乱,重复使用主语(The urban areas)和代词(it),导致句子冗余且不通顺。应把意见性短语置于句首或句中,保持主语与谓语直接对应。建议:简化句子结构,避免重复主语或不必要的代词。
× I'd like to choose my own country because, you know, China is a big country, there's a lot of beautiful places and I think travel to other countries too expensive and I have no.
✓ I'd like to choose my own country because, you know, China is a big country and there are a lot of beautiful places. I think travelling to other countries is too expensive and I can't.
该长句存在多处问题:1) “there's a lot of beautiful places”主谓不一致,应为“there are a lot of beautiful places”。2) “I think travel to other countries too expensive”缺少系动词,应为“is too expensive”。3) “I have no”不完整,意图应为“我不能(去)”,使用情态动词“can't”更自然。建议:拆分成长短句来表达不同意思,注意there be结构的主谓一致和使用系动词,以及使用合适的情态动词表达能力或可能性。