Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Thí sinh
Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me capture memorable scenes and preserve tribal moments. For example, I often photograph CD lot City skylines at golden hour to record the changing light.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Thí sinh
Or rural areas. I prefer rural areas because of the lack of light pollution, so the night sky is much clearer, I can see a canopy of shiny stars and the moon, and the tranquil atmosphere and fresh air make it a perfect place to relax.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Thí sinh
Uh, actually I didn't go aboard. I live in Shenzhen and I used to go to Hong Kong. I like the atmosphere there in Hong Kong because everyone there is manner.
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 修正词汇错误并使表达更自然、简洁。注意避免拼写与搭配错误(例如“tribal moments”、“CD lot City”),并用一到两句补充具体细节以丰富内容。可以先用主题句回答,再用连接词补充例子。
Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because they help me capture memorable scenes. For example, I often take photos of city skylines at golden hour to capture the warm light and changing colors.
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Điểm: 78.0Gợi ý: 句子总体较好,但要注意衔接与语法,使回答更简洁有条理。把“Or”改为完整回答句,使用连接词(for example, which)来组织原因与结果,保持不超过五句。
Ví dụ: I prefer rural areas because there is little light pollution, so the night sky is much clearer and I can see many stars. Moreover, the tranquil atmosphere and fresh air make it a perfect place to relax.
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 回答不够直接且包含拼写与语法错误(例如“aboard”应为“abroad”,“manner”用词错误)。应先直接回答问题(prefer own country/other countries/depends),然后用一两句具体理由或例子支持,注意时态与词汇准确。
Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because I haven't traveled abroad much. For example, I live in Shenzhen and often visit Hong Kong, where I enjoy the polite atmosphere and vibrant street scenes.
× Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me capture memorable scenes and preserve tribal moments.
✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me capture memorable scenes and preserve treasured moments.
句中“tribal moments”用词不当,应为“treasured moments”(珍贵的时刻)或类似表达。该问题属于词汇使用不当,属于“形容词或副词使用不当/词语选择错误”。建议:注意搭配和常用短语,多背诵固定搭配,写作或说话时若不确定单词含义可选择更常见的词,比如“treasured/precious”。
× For example, I often photograph CD lot City skylines at golden hour to record the changing light.
✓ For example, I often photograph city skylines at golden hour to record the changing light.
原句中“CD lot City”为拼写或多余词语,应简化为“city skylines”。此为用词/冠词/拼写错误(归入“冠词错误”类别22),建议:注意单词拼写和不要重复无意义的词。如需特指某城市可写出城市名并加适当冠词或限定词。
× Or rural areas. I prefer rural areas because of the lack of light pollution, so the night sky is much clearer, I can see a canopy of shiny stars and the moon, and the tranquil atmosphere and fresh air make it a perfect place to relax.
✓ I prefer rural areas. Because of the lack of light pollution, the night sky is much clearer: I can see a canopy of shining stars and the moon. The tranquil atmosphere and fresh air make it a perfect place to relax.
原句第一句用“Or rural areas.” 不完整(句子缺主语或连贯性差),并且后面句子过长且用逗号连接多个独立分句,属于句子结构错误。建议:将断句并用连词或标点分开,保持句子完整,避免逗号拼接过多独立分句。注意形容词“shiny”在此应为“shining”或“bright”。(归入“句子结构错误”类别26)
× Uh, actually I didn't go aboard. I live in Shenzhen and I used to go to Hong Kong. I like the atmosphere there in Hong Kong because everyone there is manner.
✓ Uh, actually I haven't gone abroad. I live in Shenzhen and I used to go to Hong Kong. I like the atmosphere in Hong Kong because people there are polite.
句一“I didn't go aboard.”中“aboard”拼写错误且时态与语境不符,應为“abroad”,并且如果想表达到目前为止未出国,應用现在完成时“haven't gone abroad”。句二“I used to go to Hong Kong.”可保留表示过去常去。句三“everyone there is manner.”用词错误,应为“people there are polite”(礼貌)。这些问题包括过去时/现在完成时选择(5/6)和介词/拼写与形容词使用错误(11、13)。建议:注意单词拼写“abroad”;根据语境选择正确时态(现在完成时用于至今仍相关的经历);使用正确形容词描述人(polite)。