Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Thí sinh
Yes, I definitely do. I enjoy landscape photography because it helps me capture special moments and share them with my friend on social media. For example, I love photographing castles and mountain peaks. One time I captured a sunshine behind the old castle and that changing light made the whole sense. Absolutely breathtaking.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Thí sinh
I prefer the countryside because it helps me recharge after a busy week at work. Natural scenery such as mountains, lakes, and open fields feels much more peaceful and rejuvenating than city views. For example, a monthly weekend walk by lake usually helps me forget work stress and clear my mind.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Thí sinh
I prefer views in my own country because they remind me of my childhood and family memories, although there are still many beautiful places I haven't explored yet, and traveling domestically is usually more familiar and more affordable than going abroad.
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Điểm: 78.0Gợi ý: 内容自然,回应直接,但存在语法和表达不准确(如“a sunshine”,“the whole sense”)和轻微冗余。建议:1) 注意冠词和名词搭配(sunshine通常不用不定冠词,改用“a sunbeam”或“the sunlight”);2) 用更准确的短语替换模糊表达(如“the whole scene”而不是“the whole sense”);3) 控制长度在3–5句内,保持信息具体且连贯;4) 添加连接词使细节更流畅,例如“for instance”或“which made”来引出结果。
Ví dụ: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I especially enjoy landscape photography because it lets me capture memorable moments and share them with friends on social media. For instance, I often photograph castles and mountain peaks, and once I caught the sunlight streaming behind an old castle, which created a truly breathtaking scene.
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Điểm: 85.0Gợi ý: 回答结构清晰,内容具体且目的明确。改进点:1) 注意冠词和数的一致性(如“a monthly weekend walk by the lake”);2) 可加入连接词如“therefore”或“so”来强化因果关系;3) 稍微扩展一个具体细节(例如描述一次特别的漫步或感受)以提升说服力。
Ví dụ: I prefer the countryside because it helps me recharge after a busy week at work. Natural scenery like mountains, lakes, and open fields feels much more peaceful and rejuvenating than city views, so I find it easier to relax there. For example, a monthly weekend walk by the lake usually helps me forget about work stress and clear my mind.
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Điểm: 80.0Gợi ý: 回答表达清楚且包含多个理由,但句子较长且信息密集,略显冗长。建议:1) 将复合句拆成两到三句以提高清晰度;2) 使用连接词如“however”或“also”来分隔对比信息;3) 可以补充一个具体例子或回忆来增加情感细节。
Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because they remind me of my childhood and family memories. However, there are still many beautiful places I haven't explored, and domestic travel is usually more familiar and affordable than going abroad. For example, visiting a seaside town from my childhood always brings back warm memories of family trips.
× I enjoy landscape photography because it helps me capture special moments and share them with my friend on social media.
✓ I enjoy landscape photography because it helps me capture special moments and share them with my friends on social media.
原句中使用了不正确的代词单复数搭配。“friend”在这里应表示一类关系或多位在社交媒体上的朋友,通常用复数“friends”。建议:当表示泛指的“朋友们”或在社交媒体上通常面向多人的情况下使用复数。
× One time I captured a sunshine behind the old castle and that changing light made the whole sense.
✓ One time I captured the sunshine behind the old castle and that changing light made the whole scene.
原句有两个问题:1) “captured a sunshine” 中的冠词和名词搭配不当,应为“the sunshine”或不加冠词。2) “whole sense” 是用词错误,正确应为“whole scene”(整个场景)。这里主要属于过去时使用(captured)搭配名词形式错误及词汇选择。建议:注意可数名词与冠词的搭配,并选择合适的名词(scene 表示景象)。
× For example, a monthly weekend walk by lake usually helps me forget work stress and clear my mind.
✓ For example, a monthly weekend walk by the lake usually helps me forget work stress and clear my mind.
原句在名词前缺少必要的定冠词“the”。“lake”在这里指特定的那个湖,需用“the lake”。这种问题归为现在时语境中名词定冠词使用错误(属于介于第6和第22项,但根据列表归为“现在时问题”相关)。建议:当提到特定地点时在名词前加定冠词,例如“by the lake/at the park”。
× I prefer views in my own country because they remind me of my childhood and family memories, although there are still many beautiful places I haven't explored yet, and traveling domestically is usually more familiar and more affordable than going abroad.
✓ I prefer views in my own country because they remind me of my childhood and family memories, although there are still many beautiful places I haven't explored yet, and traveling domestically is usually more familiar and more affordable than traveling abroad.
原句末端使用了“going abroad”,与前文的动名词短语“traveling domestically”搭配不平行。为保持结构一致性,应改为“traveling abroad”。这个问题属于冠词/形式一致或句子结构平行性问题,按列表归为“文章/冠词错误(22)”。建议:保持并列结构中动词形式一致,使用相同的词类和形式(如都用 traveling + 地点)。