Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장이 자연스럽지 않은 부분과 문법 오류를 고치고, 응답을 더 간결하고 명확하게 만드세요. 주제 문장으로 바로 답한 뒤 연결어를 사용해 이유와 예시를 덧붙이세요. 예: 'I enjoy taking photos of natural and city views'처럼 표현하고 'because' 뒤에는 결과나 감정을 명확히 설명하세요. 또한 중복되는 표현(‘makes me relaxed’와 ‘makes me feeling happy’)을 줄이세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of both natural and urban views because it relaxes me and makes me happy. For example, when I travel I like to photograph landscapes so I can look back on those moments later.

Gợi ý: 문장 구조와 표현을 간결하게 고치고 문법 오류(단수/복수, 동사 형태)를 수정하세요. 이유를 설명할 때 연결어를 사용하고 구체적인 감정이나 비교를 추가하세요. 또한 'greenish' 대신 'green' 등 더 자연스러운 단어를 사용하세요.

Ví dụ: I prefer rural areas because the greenery makes me feel relaxed and comfortable. Since I live in Busan, which is a city, rural landscapes feel especially refreshing to me.

Gợi ý: 내용을 논리적으로 연결하고 문법적으로 정확한 문장으로 바꾸세요. 'cannot go whenever I want' 같은 표현을 더 자연스럽게 바꾸고, 이유와 감정 표현을 한두 문장으로 정리하세요. 불필요한 감탄사('yeah')는 피하세요.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in other countries because I don't have many opportunities to travel abroad. Therefore, when I do visit another country I make an effort to capture its unique scenery, and it often feels magical, almost like being in a theme park.

× I enjoy the photographs, the nature or city views because it makes me relaxed and makes me feeling happy.

✓ I enjoy photographs of nature or city views because they make me feel relaxed and happy.

Subject-pronoun and verb agreement and word choice: 'photographs' is plural so use 'they' and 'make' (subject-verb agreement). Use 'feel' not 'feeling' after 'make me'. Remove unnecessary article 'the' before 'photographs' and use 'of' to link photographs to views. Use 'relaxed and happy' (adjectives) after 'feel' rather than 'feeling happy'.

× And I especially like taking photos while traveling so I can revisit those moments later.

✓ I especially like taking photos while traveling so I can revisit those moments later.

This sentence is grammatically correct after removing leading conjunction for style. No subject-verb agreement error; 'I like' and 'I can revisit' are correct. Suggestion: avoid starting sentences with 'And' in formal speech.

× I prefer rural area because the greenish color of nature makes me feeling healing and comfortable and I'm living in Busan and here is also cities so the rural areas landscapes come to me feel special.

✓ I prefer rural areas because the green color of nature makes me feel healed and comfortable. I live in Busan, which is also a city, so rural landscapes feel special to me.

Plural and article use: 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally. 'Greenish color' is better as 'green color' or 'green'. 'Makes me feeling' is incorrect; use 'makes me feel' plus adjective. 'Healing' is awkward; 'healed' or 'relaxed' works. 'I'm living' should be simple present 'I live' for general fact. 'Here is also cities' is incorrect; use 'which is also a city' (singular) and adjust word order. 'Rural areas landscapes' should be 'rural landscapes' and 'come to me feel special' should be 'feel special to me'.

× I prefer the other countries views because I cannot go whenever I want.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I cannot go there whenever I want.

Preposition and article use: 'the other countries views' is incorrect; use 'views in other countries' or 'views of other countries'. Also include 'there' after 'go' to indicate destination. Tense is present simple and appropriate; main fixes are preposition and article.

× So when I have a chance that captures the wonderful views.

✓ So when I have the chance, I capture the wonderful views.

Sentence fragment: original lacks a proper main clause and misuse of relative clause 'that captures'. Use a full clause 'when I have the chance, I capture the wonderful views' or better 'I take photos of the wonderful views.' Suggestion: use 'I take photos of' for clarity.

× I feel like in fantasy world like Disneyland.

✓ I feel like I'm in a fantasy world, like Disneyland.

Missing subject and verb: 'I feel like in fantasy world' lacks 'I'm' after 'feel like'. Also include articles 'a fantasy world' and comma before example 'like Disneyland.' Structure corrected to natural English.

× So I prefer the other countries also, yeah.

✓ So I prefer other countries too.

Article and word order: 'the other countries' is unnecessary; say 'other countries'. 'Also, yeah' is informal—'too' fits better. Keep concise phrasing for clarity.