Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and concise: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words like “Listen,” and use specific details about what you photograph and why. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words (for example, “because” or “so”). Also correct small phrasing issues (e.g., “a token or a remembrance” → “a keepsake”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing landscapes and local architecture when I travel because the photos serve as keepsakes and help me remember the places I visited. I also sometimes post the best shots on Instagram to share my experiences with friends.

Gợi ý: Provide one clear preference with coherent supporting details. Avoid fragmentary sentences and unclear words (e.g., “Danita”). Use linking words such as “because” and give specific sensory details or examples. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy the fresh air and natural scenery. For example, mountain vistas and open fields are relaxing, and I like listening to birdsong rather than city traffic.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct topic sentence and then add a specific reason or example. Avoid repeating words (“love the views” and “helps me relax” are fine but could be expanded). Use linking words like “because” or “so that” and give a concrete detail about a favorite local scene.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because I am familiar with the landscapes and they make me feel at home. For instance, I often go to the coastal cliffs nearby to relax and watch the sunset, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

× Listen, I like taking pictures, especially when I travel as this will be a token or a remembrance of where I go and sometimes I will post it.

✓ I like taking pictures, especially when I travel, as they are a token or remembrance of the places I visit, and sometimes I post them.

The original sentence has issues with pronoun reference and plurality after 'taking pictures'. 'This' should be 'they' to refer to 'pictures' (plural). 'Where I go' is better expressed as 'the places I visit' for natural English. Also 'I will post it' should match plural 'pictures' as 'I post them' and simple present is more natural for habitual actions. Maintain verb + -ing 'taking' is fine.

× And social media is like Facebook and Instagram.

✓ I sometimes share them on social media platforms like Facebook and Instagram.

Beginning a sentence with 'And' is informal and the original lacks connection to previous idea. 'Social media is like Facebook and Instagram' is awkward; better to specify sharing and use plural 'platforms' and 'like' for examples. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× I'd rather choose the view in rural areas as. I can smell the mountain breeze. Danita, urban areas.

✓ I'd rather choose views in rural areas because I can smell the mountain breeze; I do not prefer urban areas.

The original is fragmented and contains an unclear word 'Danita'. 'As.' is an incomplete subordinating connector. Combine clauses: use 'because' to show reason, keep plurality 'views', and clearly contrast with urban areas. Remove unrelated word 'Danita' which seems erroneous.

× I'd rather choose the view in our own country because I love the views and it helps me relax.

✓ I'd rather choose views in my own country because I love the scenery and it helps me relax.

Using 'the view' and 'the views' in the same sentence is inconsistent. Use plural 'views' or general noun 'scenery'. Also 'our own country' may be correct but 'my own country' matches the speaker perspective. 'It helps me relax' is fine; keep singular 'it' referring to 'scenery'.