Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và động từ sai; trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề ngắn gọn; giảm từ thừa và sửa thì động từ. Cụ thể: (1) Dùng cấu trúc ngắn gọn: “I prefer to…” hoặc “I usually don’t take photos because…”; (2) Sửa động từ sai như “photographed” thành “take photos” hoặc “photograph”; (3) Hạn chế tiếng ngập (umm, uh) và câu quá dài; (4) Thêm liên từ nếu cần (for example, when…) để mạch lạc hơn.

Ví dụ: I usually prefer to enjoy beautiful views with my own eyes because I can get completely absorbed in the moment. However, I do take photos sometimes, especially when I see something unusual or when I want to share the memory with my family.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: Bắt đầu trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi và dùng thì nhất quán; loại bỏ tiếng ngập và sửa cấu trúc câu. Cụ thể: (1) Mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng: “I prefer rural views” hoặc “I prefer views in rural areas because…”; (2) Dùng thì hiện tại đơn để diễn tả sở thích: “they give me a memorable atmosphere” thay vì thì quá khứ; (3) Cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể và liên từ để kết nối: “for example, when I work outside I feel refreshed.”

Ví dụ: I prefer views in rural areas because they give me a peaceful, memorable atmosphere. For example, when I spend time outdoors in nature, such as working in a garden or hiking, I feel refreshed and less stressed.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: Sửa ngữ pháp, lựa từ chính xác và sắp xếp câu mạch lạc. Cụ thể: (1) Dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: “I prefer views in other countries because…”; (2) Sửa cụm từ sai: “cloud dominated my high rise buildings” → “my city is dominated by high-rise buildings and clouds of pollution” hoặc “my city is full of high-rise buildings”; (3) Nêu ví dụ ngắn gọn, chính xác và tránh tên địa danh mơ hồ; (4) Giữ số câu không quá 4-5 câu và dùng liên từ để liên kết lý do và ví dụ.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in other countries because my city is dominated by high-rise buildings and I rarely see natural scenery. For example, on my last trip I visited a coastal area with clear beaches and green hills, which felt very relaxing compared with the urban views at home.

× I usually prefer to enjoy this unique views with my own eyes because I can get completely absorbed in the moment and forget to take photos.

✓ I usually prefer to enjoy these unique views with my own eyes because I can get completely absorbed in the moment and forget to take photos.

The noun 'views' is plural, so the demonstrative must be 'these' not 'this'. Also 'unique' correctly modifies 'views' but 'prefer to enjoy' is acceptable; keep as is. Suggestion: use 'these unique views' to match plural noun.

× But sometimes I do photographed as scenery, especially when I see something unusual or when I want to keep a memory to share with my family.

✓ But sometimes I do photograph scenery, especially when I see something unusual or when I want to keep a memory to share with my family.

The phrase 'do photographed' is wrong: after auxiliary 'do' use the base form 'photograph'. Also 'as scenery' is unnatural; 'photograph scenery' or 'take photos of the scenery' is better. Suggestion: use 'do photograph scenery' or simpler 'sometimes I photograph the scenery' or 'sometimes I take photos of the scenery.'

× And before views in rural areas because they give me, umm, memorable atmosphere every time I went into the nature, for example, just uh, having to work outside made me feel so refreshed.

✓ I preferred views in rural areas because they give me a memorable atmosphere every time I go into nature; for example, working outside makes me feel so refreshed.

The original mixes tenses incorrectly: 'preferred' (past) then 'give' (present) and 'went' (past). To express a general preference use present tense: 'I prefer' and 'go'. If talking about past, keep past consistently. Also 'memorable atmosphere' needs article 'a', 'into the nature' should be 'into nature' or 'into the countryside', and 'having to work outside made me feel' is wordy — use 'working outside makes/made me feel' depending on tense. Suggestion: choose consistent tense (present: 'I prefer...every time I go...working outside makes me feel').

× I prefer views in other countries because I live in a cloud dominated my high rise buildings, but I rarely see nature or scenery.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I live in a cloud-dominated city of high-rise buildings, and I rarely see nature or scenery.

Pronoun/phrase issues and word order: 'cloud dominated my high rise buildings' is ungrammatical. Use adjective phrase 'cloud-dominated' to modify 'city' or 'area', and 'high-rise buildings' needs hyphenation; 'my' is unnecessary. Also replace 'but' with 'and' for smoother contrast. Suggestion: 'I live in a cloud-dominated city of high-rise buildings' or 'I live in a city dominated by clouds and high-rise buildings.'

× For example, on the last strip of Rd. I visited a postal area with clear beaches and green hills which was very relaxing and different from the urban views at home.

✓ For example, on my last trip I visited a coastal area with clear beaches and green hills, which was very relaxing and different from the urban views at home.

The original 'on the last strip of Rd.' is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Strip of Rd.' likely intended 'trip' or 'road'; 'postal area' is incorrect — 'coastal area' or 'seaside area' fits the context. Also add comma before 'which'. Suggestion: use 'on my last trip I visited a coastal area...' for clarity and correct collocations.