Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Thí sinh
Yes, I really like taking pictures. I prefer to take photos outdoors rather than indoors because I can capture a variety of scenes such as landscapes, peoples and buildings, and the natural light usually looks better.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Thí sinh
I prefer the views in urban area than rural areas because of them area who's out of nature things and valuable things so I could enjoy a lot of different things such as bars or Mama.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Thí sinh
I prefer the views in my country rather than other country because my country has a lot of historical buildings and I can see I can take pictures of them in several places such as Kyoto or Osaka.
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 文法と語彙の正確さを高め、自然な表現を使うこと。具体的には複数形の誤り(people, areasなど)や語順('prefer to take photos outdoors' は良い)を直し、冗長な部分を削って一貫した理由を示してください。また、1〜2の追加具体例(例えば好きな場所や時間帯)をつなぎ言葉(because, for example, especially)で繋いでください。
Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs. I prefer shooting outdoors because natural light makes colours more vivid and there are diverse subjects like landscapes, people and architecture. For example, I often take pictures at sunrise in the park because the soft light creates a peaceful atmosphere.
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: まず文法と語順を直し、比較表現を正しく使ってください('prefer urban areas to rural areas')。次に理由を明確で具体的に述べ、曖昧な語句('out of nature things', 'Mama')を避けてください。つなぎ言葉(because, for example, such as)を用い、具体的な都市の例や都市ならではの被写体(cafes, historic buildings, street life)を挙げると良いです。
Ví dụ: I prefer urban areas to rural ones because cities offer a greater variety of subjects like historic buildings, street art and lively cafes. For example, I enjoy photographing busy streets and neon signs in the evening since they create dynamic compositions.
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 文を簡潔にし、重複('I can see I can take')をなくすこと。比較表現は 'prefer X to Y' を使い、理由を具体的に述べてください。さらに例を一つか二つの具体的描写(どの建物やどの季節に美しいか)で補強すると効果的です。
Ví dụ: I prefer photographing views in my own country because it has many historical sites. For instance, in Kyoto I like capturing traditional temples framed by maple trees in autumn, and in Osaka I enjoy photographing the contrast between modern skyscrapers and old merchant streets.
× I prefer to take photos outdoors rather than indoors because I can capture a variety of scenes such as landscapes, peoples and buildings, and the natural light usually looks better.
✓ I prefer to take photos outdoors rather than indoors because I can capture a variety of scenes such as landscapes, people, and buildings, and the natural light usually looks better.
'Peoples' is incorrect when referring to multiple individuals in general; the correct plural of 'person' is 'people'. Use commas to separate items in a list (Oxford comma optional). Suggestion: use 'people' for plural humans and proofread lists for correct plural forms and punctuation. Grammar problem type ID: 14
× I prefer the views in urban area than rural areas because of them area who's out of nature things and valuable things so I could enjoy a lot of different things such as bars or Mama.
✓ I prefer the views in urban areas to those in rural areas because urban areas have more man-made and valuable things, so I can enjoy many different things such as bars or malls.
Multiple issues: 'urban area' should be plural 'urban areas' to match 'rural areas' (singular/plural agreement). Use 'prefer ... to ...' not 'prefer ... than'. 'Them area who's out of nature things and valuable things' is ungrammatical; correct meaning likely 'urban areas have more man-made and valuable things'. 'Could' should be 'can' to match general preference. 'a lot of different things' better as 'many different things'. 'Mama' seems to be a typo for 'mall' or 'mamá' (not appropriate); I corrected to 'malls'. Suggestions: match singular/plural, use 'prefer A to B', choose clearer vocabulary and simple present for general preferences. Grammar problem type ID: 1
× I prefer the views in my country rather than other country because my country has a lot of historical buildings and I can see I can take pictures of them in several places such as Kyoto or Osaka.
✓ I prefer the views in my country rather than those in other countries because my country has a lot of historical buildings, and I can take pictures of them in several places such as Kyoto or Osaka.
'Other country' should be plural 'other countries' or use 'another country' depending on meaning; here plural fits better. Also 'the views in my country rather than those in other countries' requires 'those' to refer to 'views'. Repetition 'I can see I can take' is redundant; remove 'I can see'. Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: ensure noun number agreement and avoid repetition for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 1