Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you make a list when you shop?
Thí sinh
Umm, to be honest, umm, I don't make a list when shopping because umm, when I want to go shopping, uh, I just walk in the supermarket or a big shop just to grab something I need. So I don't make a list.
Giám khảo
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Thí sinh
Umm, definitely, I make a list for my daily work because it helped me to arrange my daily schedule for a study more efficiently. Umm, I think it works well to help me umm arrange my day more, umm effectively.
Giám khảo
Why don't some people like making lists?
Thí sinh
Well, probably they think making lists will waste some time on just arranging their daily time they want to spend more time on. Improve their productivity in reality.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Thí sinh
Umm, I prefer to make a list on my phone because there are so many useful apps in my phone, they can help me make a list very quickly and effectively.
Do you make a list when you shop?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中有较多的语气词“umm”和“uh”,显得不够自然流畅。回答内容较为简单,缺少具体细节和连贯的逻辑。建议减少语气词的使用,直接回答问题,并补充具体原因或例子,使回答更丰富且连贯。
Ví dụ: No, I usually don't make a list when I shop because I prefer to buy things spontaneously. For example, I often just walk into the supermarket and pick up whatever I need at the moment.
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中仍有较多语气词,影响流畅度。句子结构有些重复,表达不够简洁。建议减少重复和语气词,使用连接词使句子更连贯,并具体说明列表如何帮助提高效率。
Ví dụ: Yes, I definitely make a list for my daily work because it helps me organize my tasks efficiently. For instance, by listing my priorities, I can focus on important jobs and manage my time better.
Why don't some people like making lists?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答表达不够清晰,句子结构混乱,逻辑不连贯。建议理清思路,使用完整句子表达观点,并用连接词连接句子,使回答更自然流畅。
Ví dụ: Some people might dislike making lists because they feel it wastes time that could be spent on actual work. They may believe that planning takes away from their productivity.
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答较为自然,但开头仍有语气词。建议去除多余的语气词,使用连接词使句子更流畅,并举例说明手机应用的具体优势。
Ví dụ: I prefer making lists on my phone because there are many useful apps that help me create and edit lists quickly. For example, I can set reminders and easily update my tasks anytime.
× I make a list for my daily work because it helped me to arrange my daily schedule for a study more efficiently.
✓ I make a list for my daily work because it helps me to arrange my daily schedule for study more efficiently.
这里时态不一致,前半句用现在时,后半句用过去时,应该保持时态一致,使用一般现在时。
× making lists will waste some time on just arranging their daily time they want to spend more time on.
✓ making lists will waste some time just arranging their daily time they want to spend more time on.
介词“on”在这里使用不当,短语“waste time on”后面不需要再加“on”,应去掉多余的介词。
× Improve their productivity in reality.
✓ They want to improve their productivity in reality.
句子缺少主语,导致结构不完整,应加上主语“they”使句子完整。