Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you make a list when you shop?
Thí sinh
Actually no, because I often go shopping in the supermarket and buy some things spontaneously and I think when I saw it and I think to make a list before shopping it is complex and not useful.
Giám khảo
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Thí sinh
Yeah, of course. My work is a student and when I was at high school I often made a list for my homework and I found that it's very useful to make list and it is, it can solve very clearly through the list.
Giám khảo
Why don't some people like making lists?
Thí sinh
Well, I think some people don't like making this because they think it is complex and not useful. Because for me when I go shopping or doing some other things make a list, I think it is it is not needed.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Thí sinh
Well, I prefer to make a list on my phone because I always I almost use my phone every single time and every day. And also I think make a list on my phone and when I'm typing I type fast that then I write.
Do you make a list when you shop?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 你的回答表达了观点,但句子结构较为混乱,且有重复表达。建议简化句子,避免重复,并使用连接词使表达更流畅。
Ví dụ: No, I usually shop spontaneously at the supermarket because I find making a list before shopping complicated and unnecessary.
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答中有些语法错误和表达不够清晰。建议使用更准确的句子结构,并用连接词连接观点和理由。
Ví dụ: Yes, I do. When I was in high school, I often made lists for my homework, and I found them very useful because they helped me organize my tasks clearly.
Why don't some people like making lists?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中有重复和语法错误,表达不够连贯。建议简化句子,避免重复,并用连接词使观点更清晰。
Ví dụ: Some people dislike making lists because they find it complicated and unnecessary, just like I feel when I go shopping.
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中有重复和语法错误,表达不够流畅。建议简化句子,使用连接词,并注意语法准确性。
Ví dụ: I prefer making lists on my phone because I use it all the time, and typing is faster than writing on paper.
× Actually no, because I often go shopping in the supermarket and buy some things spontaneously and I think when I saw it and I think to make a list before shopping it is complex and not useful.
✓ Actually no, because I often go shopping in the supermarket and buy some things spontaneously and I think when I see it and I think making a list before shopping is complex and not useful.
这里的时间是现在时态,表示经常发生的事情,所以不能用过去时的'saw',应该用现在时的'see'。另外,'to make a list before shopping it is complex'结构不正确,应该用动名词'making a list before shopping'作为主语。
× Yeah, of course. My work is a student and when I was at high school I often made a list for my homework and I found that it's very useful to make list and it is, it can solve very clearly through the list.
✓ Yeah, of course. My work is a student and when I was at high school I often made a list for my homework and I found that it's very useful to make a list and it can solve problems very clearly through the list.
这里缺少冠词'a','make list'应为'make a list'。另外,'it is, it can solve very clearly through the list'表达不完整,补充为'it can solve problems very clearly through the list'更通顺。
× Well, I think some people don't like making this because they think it is complex and not useful. Because for me when I go shopping or doing some other things make a list, I think it is it is not needed.
✓ Well, I think some people don't like making lists because they think it is complex and not useful. For me, when I go shopping or do some other things, making a list is not needed.
'making this'不明确,应改为'making lists'。'when I go shopping or doing some other things make a list'结构混乱,应改为'when I go shopping or do some other things, making a list is not needed'。
× Well, I prefer to make a list on my phone because I always I almost use my phone every single time and every day. And also I think make a list on my phone and when I'm typing I type fast that then I write.
✓ Well, I prefer to make a list on my phone because I almost always use my phone every single time and every day. Also, I think making a list on my phone is better because when I'm typing, I type faster than when I write.
'I always I almost use'重复且语序错误,应改为'I almost always use'。'I think make a list'应为动名词结构'making a list'。'I type fast that then I write'表达不清,应改为'I type faster than when I write'。