Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you make a list when you shop?
Thí sinh
Yes, I do make a list when I shop the reason for it because a list can give me some advice when I go shopping and it can promise I bought all of what I want.
Giám khảo
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Thí sinh
It depends on how I feel. If I feel tired, I think I will not make a list for my work because I think it will limit me. But if I feel energetic, I think I will make a list for my work. It will help me to do some jobs.
Giám khảo
Why don't some people like making lists?
Thí sinh
The first thing I like to mention is some people think if they don't have a list they will do their job freely. Another interesting point is that if they don't have a list they can have a more quickly thinking about their jobs and they their brain is more active.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Thí sinh
Well, to be honest I don't really have a clear plan, but I guess that I will probably make a list on my phone, because if I make a list on paper I think I've lost it easily, but on phone it is far more convenient for me to locate or check it.
Do you make a list when you shop?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然,建议简化句子结构,避免重复表达,并使用更准确的词汇。
Ví dụ: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me remember everything I need and ensures I don't forget anything important.
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答较为重复,缺少连贯的连接词,建议使用连接词使表达更流畅,并丰富细节。
Ví dụ: Whether I make a list for work depends on my mood. If I'm tired, I avoid making one because it feels restrictive. However, when I'm energetic, I find lists helpful to organize and complete my tasks efficiently.
Why don't some people like making lists?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 表达不够清晰,语法错误较多,建议简化句子,使用更准确的表达,并注意逻辑连贯。
Ví dụ: Some people dislike making lists because they feel it restricts their freedom. Also, without a list, they believe their minds stay more active and they can think more quickly about their tasks.
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答较自然,但句子较长且有些重复,建议简化表达并使用连接词提高流畅度。
Ví dụ: I usually prefer making lists on my phone because it's more convenient and I won't lose it like I might with paper lists.
× Yes, I do make a list when I shop the reason for it because a list can give me some advice when I go shopping and it can promise I bought all of what I want.
✓ Yes, I do make a list when I shop because a list can give me some advice when I go shopping and it can ensure I buy everything I want.
原句中缺少连接词,导致句子结构混乱。应使用连词“because”连接原因部分,同时“promise I bought”用词不当,应改为“ensure I buy”以表达确保买到想要的东西。建议注意句子连接和动词时态的正确使用。
× Another interesting point is that if they don't have a list they can have a more quickly thinking about their jobs and they their brain is more active.
✓ Another interesting point is that if they don't have a list they can think more quickly about their jobs and their brain is more active.
原句中“have a more quickly thinking”结构错误,动词“think”应直接使用,且“quickly”作为副词修饰动词。应改为“think more quickly”。此外,“they their brain”重复,应删去多余的“they”。
× Another interesting point is that if they don't have a list they can have a more quickly thinking about their jobs and they their brain is more active.
✓ Another interesting point is that if they don't have a list they can think more quickly about their jobs and their brain is more active.
句中“they their brain”重复使用主语“they”,造成语法错误。应去掉多余的“they”,保持主语和所有格的正确使用。
× but on phone it is far more convenient for me to locate or check it.
✓ but on my phone it is far more convenient for me to locate or check it.
“on phone”缺少所有格“my”,应为“on my phone”。英语中表示使用某物时,通常需要加上所有格。