Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you make a list when you shop?
Thí sinh
Yes, I I always make a list to be for shopping because I think make a list can help me figure out what do I want to buy and then that therefore I can save time when I go shopping.
Giám khảo
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Thí sinh
Yes, I always make a list for my work because making a list for my work helps me organize what I need to do. Uh. And I think it works very well because I can work more efficiently.
Giám khảo
Why don't some people like making lists?
Thí sinh
Because I think. One first people who doesn't like making list is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve sacrif actori from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Thí sinh
I like bows what I am at work. While I am working, I preferred to make a list on my phone because it is more efficient. But when I stay at home I prefer to make a list on the paper because it helps me. It feels like a ceremony.
Do you make a list when you shop?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 你的回答有些语法错误和重复,表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构,避免重复,并使用连接词使句子更流畅。
Ví dụ: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember what I need and saves time when I go shopping.
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答较为清晰,但有口头语“Uh”,影响流畅度。建议去除口头语,使用连接词使句子更连贯。
Ví dụ: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me organize my tasks, and as a result, I can work more efficiently.
Why don't some people like making lists?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答中有语法错误和不清晰的表达,词汇使用不准确。建议简化句子,明确表达原因,并使用正确词汇。
Ví dụ: Some people don't like making lists because they find it hard to follow them, so they feel it's useless and get confused about their tasks.
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中有发音错误和语法问题,表达不够连贯。建议使用更准确的词汇,避免重复,并用连接词连接句子。
Ví dụ: When I am at work, I prefer to make lists on my phone because it's more efficient. However, at home, I like using paper lists because it feels more personal and organized.
× Yes, I I always make a list to be for shopping because I think make a list can help me figure out what do I want to buy and then that therefore I can save time when I go shopping.
✓ Yes, I always make a list for shopping because I think making a list can help me figure out what I want to buy and therefore I can save time when I go shopping.
句中“make a list”应改为动名词形式“making a list”,因为它作为think的宾语。"what do I want to buy"应改为宾语从句“what I want to buy”,去掉倒装。"to be for shopping"应改为“for shopping”,去掉多余词。
× Because I think. One first people who doesn't like making list is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve sacrif actori from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.
✓ Because I think. First, some people who don't like making lists is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve satisfactory results from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.
“people”是复数,谓语动词应使用复数形式“don't”。“making list”应为复数“making lists”。“sacrif actori”应为“satisfactory results”,拼写错误。
× While I am working, I preferred to make a list on my phone because it is more efficient.
✓ While I am working, I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is more efficient.
句中描述习惯动作,应使用一般现在时“prefer”,而非过去时“preferred”。
× One first people who doesn't like making list is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve sacrif actori from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.
✓ First, some people who don't like making lists do so because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve satisfactory results from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.
“people”是复数,谓语动词应使用复数形式“do”。“making list”应为复数“making lists”。
× Yes, I I always make a list to be for shopping because I think make a list can help me figure out what do I want to buy and then that therefore I can save time when I go shopping.
✓ Yes, I always make a list for shopping because I think making a list can help me figure out what I want to buy and therefore I can save time when I go shopping.
“to be for shopping”中的“to be”多余,应直接用介词短语“for shopping”。
× Because I think. One first people who doesn't like making list is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve sacrif actori from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.
✓ First, some people who don't like making lists do so because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve satisfactory results from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.
“One first people”表达不当,应改为“First, some people”。
× I like bows what I am at work.
✓ I like both when I am at work.
“bows”拼写错误,应为“both”,表示两者都喜欢。
× Because I think. One first people who doesn't like making list is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve sacrif actori from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.
✓ I think the first reason some people don't like making lists is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve satisfactory results from making a list and probably don't know what they need to do.
句子结构混乱,应调整为完整句子,去掉多余的“Because I think.”,使表达更清晰。