Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like singing? Why?
Thí sinh
Yes umm, I love thinking because thinking make me feel relaxed and uh and sing around make me feel recharged and my mind will my mind will be released from my.
Giám khảo
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
Thí sinh
No, I never learned about how to sing, but I'm just a scroll on my Ted talk and I saw that people teach the audience how to learn about thinking, but I'm not focused on that. Just.
Giám khảo
Who do you want to sing for?
Thí sinh
It is very hard question. I'm usually seen for my friends, we sing together. The song that we sing, we have to we have to be too single and we react our feeling we are strong.
Giám khảo
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
Thí sinh
Absolutely yes, umm think that thinking can bring happy and being uh can help people happier from a whole day, a whole long working day and they live their pressure.
Do you like singing? Why?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: คำตอบของคุณไม่ชัดเจนและมีคำพูดที่ไม่เกี่ยวข้องกับคำถาม เช่น 'thinking' ควรตอบตรงประเด็นเกี่ยวกับการร้องเพลง และใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และชัดเจนมากขึ้น
Ví dụ: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and recharge my energy. Singing allows me to express my feelings and forget about stress.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
Điểm: 30.0Gợi ý: คำตอบไม่ตรงประเด็นและมีข้อมูลที่ไม่เกี่ยวข้อง ควรตอบตรงคำถามและใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและสมบูรณ์
Ví dụ: No, I have never taken singing lessons, but I enjoy listening to singing tutorials online to improve my skills.
Who do you want to sing for?
Điểm: 35.0Gợi ý: คำตอบไม่ชัดเจนและมีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์ ควรตอบตรงคำถามและอธิบายเพิ่มเติมด้วยประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล
Ví dụ: I usually like to sing for my friends because we enjoy singing together. We choose songs that express our feelings and make us feel strong.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: คำตอบมีความสับสนและใช้คำไม่ถูกต้อง ควรตอบให้ชัดเจนและใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมเพื่ออธิบายความคิดของคุณ
Ví dụ: Absolutely yes, I think singing can bring happiness and help people relieve stress after a long day at work.
× I love thinking because thinking make me feel relaxed and uh and sing around make me feel recharged and my mind will my mind will be released from my.
✓ I love singing because singing makes me feel relaxed and singing around makes me feel recharged and my mind will be released.
The verb 'thinking' is incorrectly used instead of 'singing' which fits the context. Also, 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. Repetition and incomplete phrases were corrected for clarity.
× thinking make me feel relaxed
✓ thinking makes me feel relaxed
The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'thinking' in the third person singular form.
× sing around make me feel recharged
✓ singing around makes me feel recharged
The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'singing around' in the third person singular form.
× No, I never learned about how to sing
✓ No, I have never learned how to sing
The present perfect tense 'have never learned' is more appropriate here to indicate experience up to now. Also, 'about' is unnecessary and removed.
× I never learned about how to sing
✓ I have never learned how to sing
The preposition 'about' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context; 'learn how to sing' is the correct phrase.
× but I'm just a scroll on my Ted talk and I saw that people teach the audience how to learn about thinking, but I'm not focused on that. Just.
✓ but I just scrolled through my Ted Talk and saw that people teach the audience how to learn about singing, but I'm not focused on that.
The phrase 'I'm just a scroll' is incorrect; it should be 'I just scrolled'. Also, 'thinking' should be 'singing' to match context. Sentence was restructured for clarity.
× I'm usually seen for my friends, we sing together.
✓ I usually sing for my friends; we sing together.
'Seen' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'sing'. Also, the sentence was split for clarity.
× The song that we sing, we have to we have to be too single and we react our feeling we are strong.
✓ The songs that we sing have to be simple, and we express our feelings strongly.
'Too single' is incorrect; 'simple' fits better. 'React our feeling' is incorrect; 'express our feelings' is correct. Sentence was rephrased for clarity.
× we react our feeling we are strong
✓ we express our feelings strongly
'React' is incorrect verb; 'express' is correct. 'Strong' should be the adverb 'strongly' to modify the verb.
× think that thinking can bring happy and being uh can help people happier from a whole day, a whole long working day and they live their pressure.
✓ I think that singing can bring happiness and can help people be happier after a long working day and relieve their stress.
'Think that thinking' is confusing; 'I think that singing' is correct. 'Bring happy' should be 'bring happiness'. 'Being uh' is unclear and removed. 'Live their pressure' is incorrect; 'relieve their stress' is correct.