Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like singing? Why?
Thí sinh
Actually, I don't enjoy singing because I am tone deaf, which means I Can't Sing in tone. This makes me feel quite embarrassed, embarrassed at night trying to sing in front of fathers. So I usually avoid it. For example, I prefer listening to music rather than rather than singing myself.
Giám khảo
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
Thí sinh
Well, I remember when I was a pupil, my music teacher told me how to sing and that's my first time to contact music. I felt more exciting.
Giám khảo
Who do you want to sing for?
Thí sinh
Well I want to sing for my father because he always say I never been listen my daughter saying and she he always have curiosity about my thing so I decided I decided to sing for him on his birthday.
Giám khảo
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
Thí sinh
Definitely yes. Seeing can bring happiness to people. For example, will I feel frustrated or stressed I like to listen to I like to listen to music by famous singers like Taylor Swift because it helps athlete by mood and makes me feel more relaxed. Seeing or listening to music is a great way to relieve stress.
Do you like singing? Why?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在重复和语法错误,表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构,避免重复,并且注意语法正确性。可以用更自然的表达方式说明自己不喜欢唱歌的原因。
Ví dụ: I don't enjoy singing because I'm tone deaf, which makes me feel embarrassed when I try to sing in front of others. Therefore, I usually prefer listening to music rather than singing myself.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答缺乏连贯性和细节,语法和用词不准确。建议使用更准确的时态和表达方式,并且补充更多细节来丰富回答。
Ví dụ: When I was a student, my music teacher taught me how to sing for the first time. I felt very excited to learn something new about music.
Who do you want to sing for?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答语法混乱,表达不清晰。建议理清句子结构,使用正确的语法,并且明确表达想为父亲唱歌的原因。
Ví dụ: I want to sing for my father because he is always curious about my life. I plan to sing for him on his birthday to make him happy.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答中有多处语法错误和重复,表达不够流畅。建议简化句子,避免重复,并且使用恰当的词汇表达观点。
Ví dụ: Definitely yes. Singing can bring happiness to people. For example, when I feel stressed, I like to listen to music by famous singers like Taylor Swift because it improves my mood and helps me relax.
× Actually, I don't enjoy singing because I am tone deaf, which means I Can't Sing in tone.
✓ Actually, I don't enjoy singing because I am tone deaf, which means I can't sing in tune.
这里的错误是“Can't Sing in tone”中的“Sing”不应该大写,且“in tone”应为“in tune”,表示音准。动词不应大写,且短语用法错误。
× This makes me feel quite embarrassed, embarrassed at night trying to sing in front of fathers.
✓ This makes me feel quite embarrassed, especially at night when trying to sing in front of others.
句子结构混乱,“embarrassed”重复且“fathers”用词不当,应为“others”或“people”。需要调整句子结构使其通顺。
× For example, I prefer listening to music rather than rather than singing myself.
✓ For example, I prefer listening to music rather than singing myself.
“rather than”重复出现,属于连词使用错误,应去掉重复部分。
× Well, I remember when I was a pupil, my music teacher told me how to sing and that's my first time to contact music.
✓ Well, I remember when I was a pupil, my music teacher told me how to sing and that was my first time to come into contact with music.
“that's”应为过去时“that was”,且“to contact music”表达不准确,应为“to come into contact with music”。
× I felt more exciting.
✓ I felt more excited.
“exciting”是形容事物使人感到兴奋,形容人的感受应使用“excited”。
× Well I want to sing for my father because he always say I never been listen my daughter saying and she he always have curiosity about my thing so I decided I decided to sing for him on his birthday.
✓ Well, I want to sing for my father because he always says he has never listened to his daughter singing, and he is always curious about my things, so I decided to sing for him on his birthday.
句子中代词使用混乱,“say”应为“says”,“I never been listen”语法错误,应为“he has never listened”,代词“she he”混用,需理清主语。
× Definitely yes. Seeing can bring happiness to people.
✓ Definitely yes. Singing can bring happiness to people.
“Seeing”应为“Singing”,原句中单词拼写错误,导致意义不明。
× For example, will I feel frustrated or stressed I like to listen to I like to listen to music by famous singers like Taylor Swift because it helps athlete by mood and makes me feel more relaxed.
✓ For example, when I feel frustrated or stressed, I like to listen to music by famous singers like Taylor Swift because it helps improve my mood and makes me feel more relaxed.
句子结构混乱,缺少连接词,且“athlete by mood”无意义,应为“improve my mood”。
× Seeing or listening to music is a great way to relieve stress.
✓ Singing or listening to music is a great way to relieve stress.
“Seeing”应为“Singing”,单词拼写错误,导致句意不符。