Singing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변이 자연스럽고 주제에 맞지만, 반복되는 표현("I usually sing")을 줄이고 더 다양한 어휘를 사용하면 좋겠습니다. 또한, 문장 연결을 위해 접속사를 활용해 답변을 더 유창하게 만들 수 있습니다.

Ví dụ: I enjoy singing because it is entertaining and helps me relieve stress. For instance, I often sing songs like "California Girls" or Japanese tunes while taking a shower, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

Gợi ý: 답변이 명확하지만, 문장 구조가 다소 단순하고 연결어가 부족합니다. 문장 간 연결을 위해 접속사를 사용하고, 좀 더 구체적인 경험을 추가하면 좋겠습니다.

Ví dụ: I learned how to sing in high school when I participated in the musical "How to Succeed in Business Without Trying." Although I was mainly a dancer, I also sang, so I had a tutor who helped me improve my singing skills.

Gợi ý: 답변이 솔직하지만, 비격식적인 표현("wanna")를 줄이고 문장을 더 간결하게 만드는 것이 필요합니다. 또한, 문장 연결을 위해 접속사를 활용하고 구체적인 예시를 명확히 하면 좋겠습니다.

Ví dụ: Because I am quite shy, I prefer not to sing in public or for strangers. However, I enjoy singing for people I care about, such as my boyfriend or family, especially during special occasions like birthdays.

Gợi ý: 답변에 문법 오류가 있고, 문장 연결이 부자연스럽습니다. 문법을 정확히 하고, 더 구체적이고 자연스러운 표현을 사용하며, 접속사를 활용해 문장을 매끄럽게 연결하세요.

Ví dụ: Certainly, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, my aunt enjoys listening to music, which helps her relieve stress and feel more relaxed.

× I learned how to sing while I was in high school.

✓ I learnt how to sing while I was in high school.

The verb 'learned' is correct in American English, but 'learnt' is more commonly used in British English. Since the rest of the transcript uses British English spelling (e.g., 'learnt'), consistency is recommended.

× I was in musical called How to Succeed in Business Without Trying and I was a dancer but at the same time singer.

✓ I was in a musical called How to Succeed in Business Without Trying, and I was a dancer but also a singer at the same time.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'musical' and lacks proper conjunction and punctuation. Adding 'a' and a comma before 'and' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So I had a tutor to teach me how to sing and it made me improve.

✓ So I had a tutor to teach me how to sing, and it helped me improve.

The phrase 'made me improve' is awkward; 'helped me improve' is more natural. Also, adding a comma before 'and' separates the clauses properly.

× I'm a pretty shy girl so I don't wanna sing for other people who I don't know, so I don't wanna sing in public, but I wanna sing for people I care for, for example my boyfriend or family when I need to celebrate their birthday or something.

✓ I'm a pretty shy girl, so I don't want to sing for people I don't know. I don't want to sing in public, but I want to sing for people I care about, for example, my boyfriend or family when I need to celebrate their birthday or something.

The sentence is too long and uses informal contractions like 'wanna'. Also, 'people I care for' should be 'people I care about'. Breaking the sentence into shorter sentences and using formal language improves clarity and correctness.

× Certainly, I do feel that some people are happy when while they are singing or listening to music.

✓ Certainly, I do feel that some people are happy when they are singing or listening to music.

The phrase 'when while' is redundant; only one conjunction is needed. Removing 'while' corrects the sentence.

× For example, my aunt like to listen to music and it seems that she relieves her stress while listening to some.

✓ For example, my aunt likes to listen to music, and it seems that she relieves her stress while listening to it.

The verb 'like' should be 'likes' to agree with the singular subject 'my aunt'. Also, 'listening to some' is vague; 'listening to it' refers clearly to music.