Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like eating chocolate? Why or why not?
Thí sinh
Chocolate. I love eating chocolate actually. Chocolate just give me this energy boost that helped me really concentrate in my stuff. And it's like the sugar just make me feel very like energetic and I have something to like I have to the source of energy to do stuff.
Giám khảo
How often do you eat chocolate?
Thí sinh
I eat chocolate like once a week 'cause I did, you know, acknowledge the fact that chocolate isn't really healthy and it's actually contained quite a lot of sugar. So I try to not eat chocolate that much to, you know, be healthy and stay strong.
Giám khảo
Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?
Thí sinh
Yes, too much. My parents would have these people gifting them chocolate and I would just binge on them all the time as snacks, like for breakfast, for dinner, for everything and I eat them quite a lot.
Giám khảo
Why do you think chocolate is popular around the world?
Thí sinh
I think chocolate is really addicted to kids 'cause they are really sweet and tasty. Chocolate just like give them the energy and in the same time as it being tasty and I think it's quite helpful and quite the reason why it's popular.
Giám khảo
What's your favourite flavour of chocolate?
Thí sinh
I myself love salted caramel chocolate. I think salted caramel chocolate or is a perfect flavor that have the salt to balance out the sweetness of the chocolate. And I think it's quite amazing that you know, it's such a addictive flavor and tasty.
Giám khảo
Do you think it is good to use chocolate as gifts to others?
Thí sinh
Yes, giving chocolate is just like, I feel like it's just like a really simple gift, but it's at the same time really meaningful as it being, you know, appreciation and love and the receiver can just eat them.
Do you like eating chocolate? Why or why not?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và thể hiện được ý chính, nhưng cần tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn để tăng tính hiệu quả. Bạn nên dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "like" quá nhiều và nên thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.
Ví dụ: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it gives me an energy boost. The sugar in chocolate helps me feel more energetic and focused when I work or study.
How often do you eat chocolate?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: Bạn trả lời rõ ràng và có nội dung cụ thể, tuy nhiên câu hơi dài và có nhiều từ thừa như "you know". Nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.
Ví dụ: I usually eat chocolate once a week because I know it contains a lot of sugar. Therefore, I try to limit my consumption to stay healthy.
Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý chính nhưng thiếu cấu trúc rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp (thì sai). Bạn nên dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "too much" một mình và sửa thì động từ cho phù hợp.
Ví dụ: Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolate when I was a kid. My parents often received chocolates as gifts, and I would eat them as snacks throughout the day.
Why do you think chocolate is popular around the world?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, tránh dùng từ sai như "chocolate is really addicted to kids". Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác hơn.
Ví dụ: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and delicious, especially loved by children. Additionally, it provides a quick energy boost, which makes it appealing to many people.
What's your favourite flavour of chocolate?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng câu trả lời hơi dài và có lỗi ngữ pháp (số nhiều/số ít). Nên dùng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp để câu tự nhiên hơn.
Ví dụ: My favourite flavour is salted caramel chocolate because the salt balances the sweetness perfectly. I find this combination very delicious and addictive.
Do you think it is good to use chocolate as gifts to others?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý chính nhưng dùng nhiều từ thừa và lặp lại như "just like" và "you know". Nên dùng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ để câu tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.
Ví dụ: Yes, I think chocolate is a simple yet meaningful gift. It shows appreciation and love, and the recipient can enjoy eating it.
× Chocolate just give me this energy boost that helped me really concentrate in my stuff.
✓ Chocolate just gives me this energy boost that helps me really concentrate on my stuff.
The subject 'Chocolate' is singular, so the verb should be in the third person singular form 'gives' instead of 'give'. Also, 'helped' should be 'helps' to maintain present tense consistency. Additionally, 'concentrate in my stuff' should be 'concentrate on my stuff' to use the correct preposition.
× And it's like the sugar just make me feel very like energetic and I have something to like I have to the source of energy to do stuff.
✓ And it's like the sugar just makes me feel very energetic and I have something like the source of energy to do stuff.
The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'sugar'. The phrase 'very like energetic' is incorrect; it should be 'very energetic'. The phrase 'I have something to like I have to the source of energy' is awkward and unclear; it is corrected to 'I have something like the source of energy'. Also, 'like' is used incorrectly and should be removed or replaced.
× I eat chocolate like once a week 'cause I did, you know, acknowledge the fact that chocolate isn't really healthy and it's actually contained quite a lot of sugar.
✓ I eat chocolate like once a week because I acknowledge the fact that chocolate isn't really healthy and it actually contains quite a lot of sugar.
The phrase 'I did, you know, acknowledge' is incorrect; 'did' is unnecessary here. The verb 'contained' should be 'contains' to agree with present tense and singular subject 'it'. Also, 'cause' is informal and should be replaced with 'because' for clarity.
× My parents would have these people gifting them chocolate and I would just binge on them all the time as snacks, like for breakfast, for dinner, for everything and I eat them quite a lot.
✓ My parents would have these people gifting them chocolate and I would just binge on it all the time as snacks, like for breakfast, for dinner, for everything and I ate it quite a lot.
'Chocolate' is uncountable, so 'them' should be 'it'. Also, 'eat' should be 'ate' to maintain past tense consistency with 'would have' and 'would binge'.
× I think chocolate is really addicted to kids 'cause they are really sweet and tasty.
✓ I think kids are really addicted to chocolate because it is really sweet and tasty.
The original sentence incorrectly uses 'chocolate is really addicted to kids'; addiction applies to people, not objects. The sentence is corrected to show that kids are addicted to chocolate. Also, 'cause' is replaced with 'because' for formality.
× Chocolate just like give them the energy and in the same time as it being tasty and I think it's quite helpful and quite the reason why it's popular.
✓ Chocolate just gives them energy and at the same time is tasty, and I think that's quite helpful and quite the reason why it's popular.
'Like give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'Chocolate'. 'In the same time as it being tasty' is incorrect; it should be 'at the same time is tasty'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.
× I think salted caramel chocolate or is a perfect flavor that have the salt to balance out the sweetness of the chocolate.
✓ I think salted caramel chocolate is a perfect flavor that has the salt to balance out the sweetness of the chocolate.
The verb 'have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'flavor'. The extra 'or' is removed as it is unnecessary.
× And I think it's quite amazing that you know, it's such a addictive flavor and tasty.
✓ And I think it's quite amazing that, you know, it's such an addictive and tasty flavor.
'a addictive' should be 'an addictive' because 'addictive' starts with a vowel sound. Also, 'and tasty' should be connected to 'addictive' as adjectives describing 'flavor'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.
× Yes, giving chocolate is just like, I feel like it's just like a really simple gift, but it's at the same time really meaningful as it being, you know, appreciation and love and the receiver can just eat them.
✓ Yes, giving chocolate is, I feel, a really simple gift, but at the same time really meaningful as it shows appreciation and love, and the receiver can just eat it.
The phrase 'it being, you know, appreciation and love' is incorrect; it should be 'it shows appreciation and love'. Also, 'them' should be 'it' because 'chocolate' is uncountable. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.