Part 1
Giám khảo
Are you good at memorising things?
Thí sinh
Yes, as a student of liberal artists in Senior High School, I always remember things to fresh my study.
Giám khảo
Have you ever forgotten something important?
Thí sinh
No, because I'm proud to do that. Memorizing things as a Senior High School student in liberal arts, I always. Exercise my memoration so I don't forget.
Giám khảo
What do you need to remember in your daily life?
Thí sinh
I need to stay with my grandmother and a daughter every day, so I must remember my grandmother's COVID and my daughter's need in daily life.
Giám khảo
How do you remember important things?
Thí sinh
After the exciting of remembering in Senior High School, I train cheaper important things in my mind and I always remind them in my mind.
Are you good at memorising things?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答不够自然且表达不清晰,句子结构混乱,建议简化表达并直接回答问题。
Ví dụ: Yes, I am good at memorising things because I often review my notes to keep the information fresh in my mind.
Have you ever forgotten something important?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: 回答不连贯且语法错误较多,建议使用完整句子并具体说明如何避免忘记重要事情。
Ví dụ: No, I rarely forget important things because I make lists and review them regularly to stay organized.
What do you need to remember in your daily life?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 表达不清楚,信息混乱,建议明确说明需要记住的具体事项并使用连贯的句子。
Ví dụ: In my daily life, I need to remember my grandmother's health condition and my daughter's daily needs, such as meals and school schedule.
How do you remember important things?
Điểm: 35.0Gợi ý: 句子结构混乱且用词不当,建议使用简单明了的句子描述记忆方法。
Ví dụ: I remember important things by repeating them to myself and writing notes to help me recall them later.
× Yes, as a student of liberal artists in Senior High School, I always remember things to fresh my study.
✓ Yes, as a student of liberal arts in Senior High School, I always remember things to refresh my study.
这里“liberal artists”应为“liberal arts”,表示文科专业;“fresh”用作动词不正确,应使用“refresh”表示“使恢复、使清新”。
× No, because I'm proud to do that. Memorizing things as a Senior High School student in liberal arts, I always. Exercise my memoration so I don't forget.
✓ No, because I'm proud to do that. As a Senior High School student in liberal arts, I always exercise my memory so I don't forget.
原句中“Memorizing things as a Senior High School student in liberal arts, I always.”句子不完整,且“Exercise my memoration”表达不正确,应改为“exercise my memory”。
× I need to stay with my grandmother and a daughter every day, so I must remember my grandmother's COVID and my daughter's need in daily life.
✓ I need to stay with my grandmother and my daughter every day, so I must remember my grandmother's COVID condition and my daughter's needs in daily life.
“a daughter”应为“my daughter”,表示特指;“my grandmother's COVID”表达不完整,需加“condition”表示病情;“my daughter's need”应为复数“needs”,表示多项需求。
× After the exciting of remembering in Senior High School, I train cheaper important things in my mind and I always remind them in my mind.
✓ After the excitement of remembering in Senior High School, I train to remember important things in my mind and I always remind myself of them.
“exciting”应为名词“excitement”;“train cheaper important things”表达不清,应为“train to remember important things”;“remind them in my mind”应改为“remind myself of them”,正确使用反身代词和动词短语。