Part 1
Giám khảo
What is your favourite machine in your home?
Thí sinh
My favorite machine in my home is my coffee maker, which can create a variety of coffee such as mocha, espresso and latte. And it is. I use it daily because I need coffee to start off my day and energize my spirits before a long day of work.
Giám khảo
Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?
Thí sinh
Yes, I agree that both machines are important because they free out the housewife and enable them to have more free time to do luxury work. For instance, the washing machine and sweeping machines in my house help my mother to clean the laundry and to sweep the floor so my mom can have more time going shopping and having fun and watching movies with her friends.
Giám khảo
Do you read the instructions before using a machine?
Thí sinh
Yes, I believe reading the instructions before using a machine is essential to the correct function and correct usage, because the first step you start a machine is you need to assemble it. Without the correct steps, it's hard for people with no engineering expertise to assemble a machine correctly and to make it functional normally.
Giám khảo
Do you think it is important to read the instructions?
Thí sinh
Yes, I think it's essential and important to read the instructions because because regular people with little engineering background and expertise will may will find it hard to operate correctly and by reading the instructions they can operate the machine correctly without arrows.
What is your favourite machine in your home?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答时应避免语法错误和不完整句子,如“and it is”这部分不完整且无意义。建议用更连贯的句子表达机器的功能和使用原因。
Ví dụ: My favorite machine at home is my coffee maker because it can make different types of coffee like mocha, espresso, and latte. I use it every morning to help me wake up and feel energized for the day ahead.
Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答中“free out the housewife”和“luxury work”表达不准确,建议使用更自然的表达方式,如“help save time for housewives”。同时,句子较长,建议适当分句,使用连接词使表达更流畅。
Ví dụ: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save time for housewives. For example, my mother uses these machines to do laundry and clean the floor, so she has more free time to go shopping, relax, and watch movies with her friends.
Do you read the instructions before using a machine?
Điểm: 80.0Gợi ý: 回答内容较完整,但句子结构稍显复杂且有重复,建议简化句子并使用连接词使表达更自然。
Ví dụ: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me assemble and operate it correctly. Without the instructions, it can be difficult for people without technical knowledge to use the machine properly.
Do you think it is important to read the instructions?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在重复词汇和语法错误,如“because because”和“will may will”,表达不清晰。建议简化句子,避免重复,使用准确的词汇表达观点。
Ví dụ: Yes, I believe reading instructions is very important because most people do not have technical knowledge. By reading the instructions, they can use the machine correctly and safely.
× My favorite machine in my home is my coffee maker, which can create a variety of coffee such as mocha, espresso and latte.
✓ My favorite machine in my home is my coffee maker, which can create a variety of coffees such as mocha, espresso and latte.
coffee是不可数名词,但在这里指多种咖啡种类,应该用复数形式coffees表示多种咖啡。
× Yes, I agree that both machines are important because they free out the housewife and enable them to have more free time to do luxury work.
✓ Yes, I agree that both machines are important because they free the housewife and enable her to have more free time to do leisure work.
housewife是单数,代词应使用her而非them;free out是不正确搭配,应为free;luxury work用词不当,应为leisure work(休闲活动)。
× For instance, the washing machine and sweeping machines in my house help my mother to clean the laundry and to sweep the floor so my mom can have more time going shopping and having fun and watching movies with her friends.
✓ For instance, the washing machine and sweeping machines in my house help my mother to clean the laundry and sweep the floor so my mom can have more time to go shopping, have fun, and watch movies with her friends.
动词不定式to go shopping等用法更符合习惯表达;并列动作应保持一致形式。
× Yes, I believe reading the instructions before using a machine is essential to the correct function and correct usage, because the first step you start a machine is you need to assemble it.
✓ Yes, I believe reading the instructions before using a machine is essential for correct functioning and usage, because the first step to start a machine is to assemble it.
句子结构不清晰,需调整表达使逻辑更通顺,使用介词for搭配essential,动词不定式表达目的。
× Yes, I think it's essential and important to read the instructions because because regular people with little engineering background and expertise will may will find it hard to operate correctly and by reading the instructions they can operate the machine correctly without arrows.
✓ Yes, I think it's essential and important to read the instructions because regular people with little engineering background and expertise may find it hard to operate correctly, and by reading the instructions they can operate the machine correctly without errors.
情态动词will may will重复错误,应只用may;because重复;without arrows应为without errors(无错误)。