Part 1
Giám khảo
What is your favourite machine in your home?
Thí sinh
I love air conditional because you know when you hot summer on we all feel tired and have bad emotion but the cool air conditioner can bringing us with happy with positive feelings and not make us think too much and also help us relax ourselves.
Giám khảo
Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?
Thí sinh
Yes, with the development of washing machines and sweeping machines, it's really helps us a lot in our daily life. For example, when we do not have too much time to wash our clothes by hand, we often use version machines. And also if sometimes we are not willing to flip the floor or maybe the house with our other house is too dirty, we'll use sweeping machines.
Giám khảo
Do you read the instructions before using a machine?
Thí sinh
Of course, because you know, I'm not very talent person which without reading any instruction books or. Other things well before using a machine because it saps, I using a machine without the things. I often make a mass, you know. And that was not good.
Giám khảo
Do you think it is important to read the instructions?
Thí sinh
Of course, I think we should read the instructions line by line, because it was really important for us to follow these instructions. If we do not follow it, it may make too much out too many mistakes, and you may even. Broke it I think.
What is your favourite machine in your home?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题,建议简化句子结构,避免重复表达,并注意时态和单复数的正确使用。可以使用更准确的词汇表达感受,使回答更流畅自然。
Ví dụ: My favourite machine at home is the air conditioner. During hot summers, it helps me feel comfortable and relaxed by cooling the room. It also improves my mood and helps me stay positive.
Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和词汇使用不当的问题,建议使用正确的词汇(如washing machines而非version machines),并且句子结构应更清晰,避免重复和不连贯。可以增加具体例子,使内容更丰富。
Ví dụ: Yes, washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important in our daily life. For instance, when I am busy, I use the washing machine to clean my clothes quickly. Also, the vacuum cleaner helps me keep the floor clean without much effort.
Do you read the instructions before using a machine?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: 回答表达混乱,语法错误较多,建议简化句子,明确表达观点,避免使用口语化和不完整的句子。可以用简单清晰的句子说明阅读说明书的重要性。
Ví dụ: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. If I don't, I might use it incorrectly and cause problems. Reading instructions helps me use machines safely and effectively.
Do you think it is important to read the instructions?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答中语法和表达不够准确,建议使用完整句子,避免重复和断句不当。可以更具体说明不读说明书可能带来的后果,使回答更有说服力。
Ví dụ: Yes, I believe it is very important to read instructions carefully. If we don't, we might make many mistakes or even damage the machine. Following instructions ensures safe and proper use.
× I love air conditional because you know when you hot summer on we all feel tired and have bad emotion but the cool air conditioner can bringing us with happy with positive feelings and not make us think too much and also help us relax ourselves.
✓ I love air conditioners because you know when it's hot in summer we all feel tired and have bad emotions but the cool air conditioner can bring us happiness and positive feelings, not make us think too much and also help us relax.
这里“air conditional”应为复数形式“air conditioners”,因为指的是空调这种设备的总称。英语中可数名词在泛指时通常用复数形式。
× I love air conditional because you know when you hot summer on we all feel tired and have bad emotion but the cool air conditioner can bringing us with happy with positive feelings and not make us think too much and also help us relax ourselves.
✓ I love air conditioners because you know when it's hot in summer we all feel tired and have bad emotions but the cool air conditioner can bring us happiness and positive feelings, not make us think too much and also help us relax.
“can bringing”是不正确的,情态动词后应接动词原形,不能用动名词形式。
× Yes, with the development of washing machines and sweeping machines, it's really helps us a lot in our daily life. For example, when we do not have too much time to wash our clothes by hand, we often use version machines.
✓ Yes, with the development of washing machines and sweeping machines, they really help us a lot in our daily life. For example, when we do not have too much time to wash our clothes by hand, we often use washing machines.
“it's really helps”中“it's”指代单数,但后面动词用复数形式“helps”不匹配,应改为“they really help”。另外“version machines”应为“washing machines”,可能是拼写错误。
× And also if sometimes we are not willing to flip the floor or maybe the house with our other house is too dirty, we'll use sweeping machines.
✓ And also, if sometimes we are not willing to mop the floor or maybe our other house is too dirty, we'll use sweeping machines.
“flip the floor”用词错误,正确表达应为“mop the floor”(拖地)。“the house with our other house”结构混乱,应简化为“our other house”。
× Of course, because you know, I'm not very talent person which without reading any instruction books or. Other things well before using a machine because it saps, I using a machine without the things. I often make a mass, you know.
✓ Of course, because you know, I'm not a very talented person who uses a machine without reading any instruction books or other things well before using it. If I use a machine without these, I often make a mess, you know.
“talent person”应为“talented person”;“which without reading”应为“who uses ... without reading”;“make a mass”应为“make a mess”;代词使用混乱,需调整。
× Of course, I think we should read the instructions line by line, because it was really important for us to follow these instructions. If we do not follow it, it may make too much out too many mistakes, and you may even. Broke it I think.
✓ Of course, I think we should read the instructions line by line, because it is really important for us to follow these instructions. If we do not follow them, it may cause too many mistakes, and you may even break it, I think.
“it was”时态错误,应为“it is”;“follow it”指代不明,应为“follow them”;“make too much out too many mistakes”表达混乱,应为“cause too many mistakes”;“broke it”应为“break it”。