Patience— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and some unclear phrases. Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise. For example, say "I consider myself a patient person because patience is key to success. Without it, people can become frustrated, which negatively affects themselves and others."

Ví dụ: I consider myself a patient person because patience is key to success. Without it, people can become frustrated, which negatively affects themselves and others.

Gợi ý: Your answer is unclear and lacks a direct response to the question. Try to start with a clear topic sentence answering what makes you feel impatient, then explain with supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

Ví dụ: I feel impatient when things don't go as planned because I like to stay organized. However, I remind myself to stay calm so I don't get frustrated and make mistakes.

Gợi ý: Your answer shows your opinion but has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Ví dụ: Some people might feel annoyed when doing the same task for a long time, but I find it enjoyable because practicing repeatedly helps me improve my skills.

Gợi ý: Your answer is somewhat off-topic and contains grammatical mistakes. Focus on answering whether your job (or role) requires patience, and explain why with clear examples. Use correct sentence structures and linking words.

Ví dụ: Although I am a high school student, my studies require patience because I need to work consistently to improve my grades and prepare for university admission.

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant but has some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and use linking words to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Children are usually impatient, but as they grow older, they become more mature and patient. I have also become more patient compared to when I was younger.

× I believe that the patient is key to success.

✓ I believe that patience is key to success.

The word 'patient' is a noun meaning a person receiving medical care, but the intended meaning here is 'patience', which is an uncountable noun referring to the ability to wait calmly. Using 'patient' is incorrect in this context.

× If people they are not patients, it's easy to get in a bad mood that will affect other and it's create negative.

✓ If people are not patient, it's easy to get in a bad mood that will affect others and create negativity.

'Patients' is plural of 'patient' (a person receiving medical care), but the intended adjective is 'patient' meaning able to wait calmly. Also, 'other' should be plural 'others' to refer to other people, and 'it's create negative' is incorrect; it should be 'create negativity' to express the idea properly.

× If people they are not patients, it's easy to get in a bad mood that will affect other and it's create negative.

✓ If people are not patient, it's easy to get in a bad mood that will affect others and create negativity.

The pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'people'. The correct structure is 'If people are not patient'. Also, 'other' should be 'others' to refer to other people.

× Why I think it's really about myself.

✓ I think it's really about myself.

The sentence incorrectly starts with 'Why' which is unnecessary and causes confusion. Removing 'Why' corrects the sentence structure.

× I have to have a very strong mindset so that I I will keep telling myself I should be patient.

✓ I have to have a very strong mindset so that I will keep telling myself I should be patient.

There is a repeated pronoun 'I I' which is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'I'.

× I would so that I would not get into a bad mood and everything will be get very messed.

✓ I do this so that I will not get into a bad mood and everything will not get very messed up.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'I would so that' is incorrect; it should be 'I do this so that'. Also, 'everything will be get very messed' is incorrect; it should be 'everything will not get very messed up' to convey the intended meaning.

× So this is the I think that's the that's the thing that helped me to feel.

✓ So this is, I think, the thing that helps me to feel better.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. Adding commas and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× some people might feel annoyed because it's bored to doing the things saying all the time,

✓ some people might feel annoyed because it's boring to do the same things all the time,

'Bored' is an adjective describing a feeling, but here the correct form is 'boring' to describe the activity. Also, 'to doing' is incorrect; it should be 'to do'. 'Saying' is incorrect in this context and should be replaced with 'the same' to indicate repetition.

× I think it's a enjoyable things because if you keep doing the things, keep doing the same thing, it's help you to do something.

✓ I think it's an enjoyable thing because if you keep doing things, keep doing the same thing, it helps you to do something.

'A enjoyable things' is incorrect because 'things' is plural and 'a' is singular. It should be 'an enjoyable thing'. Also, 'the things' should be 'things' without 'the' for general meaning. 'It's help' should be 'it helps' for subject-verb agreement.

× While I still a Senior High School student, but they also require me to work consistently so that my academic grades will be improved logically and it helped me to get into the university most smoothly.

✓ While I am still a Senior High School student, they also require me to work consistently so that my academic grades will improve logically and it helps me to get into university more smoothly.

The sentence is missing the verb 'am' after 'I'. 'They' is unclear but presumably refers to the school or teachers, so it is acceptable. 'Will be improved' is passive and awkward; 'will improve' is better. 'It helped me' should be 'it helps me' to maintain present tense. 'Most smoothly' should be 'more smoothly'. Also, 'the university' is better as 'university' in general.

× Well, for most of the children they are usually impatient, but as they as they get older, they will be more mature and which means that they will be more patient.

✓ Well, most children are usually impatient, but as they get older, they become more mature, which means they become more patient.

'For most of the children they are' is wordy; 'most children are' is more natural. 'As they as they' is repetitive and should be 'as they'. 'They will be more mature and which means' is awkward; better to say 'they become more mature, which means'. Consistency in verb tense is improved.

× So I'm also more patient when I get older compare when I was younger.

✓ So I'm also more patient now that I am older compared to when I was younger.

'Compare' is a verb and should be 'compared' in this context. Also, 'when I get older' should be 'now that I am older' to indicate current state. The phrase 'compared to when I was younger' is the correct comparison structure.