Part 1
Giám khảo
Are you a patient person?
Thí sinh
Of course, I believe I'm a patient person. My future career is being a teacher. To be a teacher is required a person who are really patient. In my past experience, I have tutored a lot of kids from elementary school. I found that I am a patient person.
Giám khảo
What is it that makes you feel impatient?
Thí sinh
Even though I really want to be a teacher, I sometimes find out I sometimes feel like I am not an impatient person. Every times I do my work if I don't feel comfort comfortable, I start feel impatient and find and finally giving up to work on everything.
Giám khảo
How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?
Thí sinh
But I need to do something. For a long time I felt impatient and fraturated sometimes, because if that's not what I want to do, I might feel easy to give it up. Or not. Not everything goes smoothly.
Giám khảo
Does your job require you to be patient?
Thí sinh
I am currently still a student so I don't have a job now, but studying require a lot of patience, especially when I want everything goes smoothly. Like doing a finishing my assignment as soon as possible. It requires a lot of patience. Sometimes I really want to do as fast as I can, but the qualities cannot be guaranteed.
Giám khảo
Are you more patient now than when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Definitely when I was a child I didn't understand what patient exactly is, so I always cry when I made difficulties and challenges. But now as my age goes, I realize that patient is to stay calm and focus on what you really want to do.
Are you a patient person?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 你的回答表达了观点,但语法和表达不够自然,句子结构有误。建议注意主谓一致,避免重复表达,并使用更自然的句型。
Ví dụ: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I have experience tutoring elementary school children, which requires a lot of patience. This has helped me develop the calmness needed for my future career as a teacher.
What is it that makes you feel impatient?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和表达混乱,建议简化句子,明确表达原因,并避免重复。
Ví dụ: I feel impatient when I am uncomfortable while working. For example, if a task is too difficult or takes too long, I might lose patience and want to give up.
How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答不够连贯,语法错误较多,建议使用连词连接句子,表达更清晰具体的感受。
Ví dụ: When I have to do something for a long time, I sometimes feel frustrated and impatient, especially if I am not interested in the task. However, I try to stay focused because not everything goes smoothly.
Does your job require you to be patient?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答内容相关,但语法和表达需要改进。建议注意主谓一致,句子简洁,并用连词使表达更流畅。
Ví dụ: Although I don't have a job yet, studying requires a lot of patience. For example, when I finish assignments quickly, I have to be careful to maintain quality, which takes time and patience.
Are you more patient now than when you were a child?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答表达了对比,但语法和用词不够准确。建议使用正确的时态和词汇,表达更自然。
Ví dụ: Definitely, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Back then, I would cry when facing difficulties, but now I understand that patience means staying calm and focusing on my goals.
× To be a teacher is required a person who are really patient.
✓ To be a teacher requires a person who is really patient.
The original sentence incorrectly uses 'is required' and 'are' which do not agree with the subject. 'To be a teacher' is a singular subject, so the verb should be 'requires'. Also, 'a person' is singular, so the verb should be 'is'. This corrects the sentence structure and subject-verb agreement.
× To be a teacher is required a person who are really patient.
✓ To be a teacher requires a person who is really patient.
The verb 'are' does not agree with the singular noun 'person'. It should be 'is' to match the singular subject.
× I have tutored a lot of kids from elementary school.
✓ I have tutored many kids from elementary school.
While 'a lot of' is commonly used in speech, 'many' is more appropriate in formal contexts when referring to countable nouns like 'kids'.
× I sometimes feel like I am not an impatient person.
✓ I sometimes feel like I am an impatient person.
The sentence contradicts itself by saying 'not an impatient person' when the intended meaning is to express feeling impatience. Removing 'not' clarifies the meaning.
× Every times I do my work if I don't feel comfort comfortable, I start feel impatient and find and finally giving up to work on everything.
✓ Every time I do my work, if I don't feel comfortable, I start to feel impatient and finally give up on working on everything.
The phrase 'Every times' is incorrect; it should be 'Every time'. 'Comfort' should be 'comfortable' as an adjective. 'Start feel' should be 'start to feel'. 'Find and finally giving up' is awkward; 'finally give up' is correct. Also, 'give up on working' is the proper phrase.
× if I don't feel comfort comfortable
✓ if I don't feel comfortable
'Comfort' is a noun; the adjective 'comfortable' should be used to describe feelings.
× Every times I do my work
✓ Every time I do my work
'Every times' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'Every time'.
× finally giving up to work on everything.
✓ finally giving up working on everything.
The verb 'give up' is followed by a gerund without a preposition, so 'giving up working' is correct rather than 'giving up to work'.
× For a long time I felt impatient and fraturated sometimes, because if that's not what I want to do, I might feel easy to give it up.
✓ For a long time I felt impatient and frustrated sometimes, because if that's not what I want to do, I might find it easy to give up.
'Fraturated' is a misspelling of 'frustrated'. 'Might feel easy' is incorrect; it should be 'might find it easy'. 'Give it up' should be 'give up'.
× fraturated
✓ frustrated
The word 'fraturated' is a misspelling; the correct word is 'frustrated'.
× I might feel easy to give it up.
✓ I might find it easy to give up.
The verb 'feel' is not used correctly here; 'find it easy' is the correct expression. Also, 'give it up' should be 'give up'.
× Or not. Not everything goes smoothly.
✓ Or not. Not everything goes smoothly.
No correction needed; sentence is acceptable as is.
× studying require a lot of patience, especially when I want everything goes smoothly.
✓ studying requires a lot of patience, especially when I want everything to go smoothly.
'Studying' is singular and requires 'requires'. 'Want everything goes' is incorrect; it should be 'want everything to go'.
× studying require a lot of patience
✓ studying requires a lot of patience
The singular subject 'studying' requires the singular verb 'requires'.
× when I want everything goes smoothly
✓ when I want everything to go smoothly
After 'want', the verb should be in the infinitive form 'to go', not 'goes'.
× Like doing a finishing my assignment as soon as possible.
✓ Like finishing my assignment as soon as possible.
The phrase 'a finishing' is incorrect; 'finishing' alone is sufficient here.
× Sometimes I really want to do as fast as I can, but the qualities cannot be guaranteed.
✓ Sometimes I really want to do it as fast as I can, but the quality cannot be guaranteed.
'Do as fast as I can' needs an object 'it'. 'Qualities' should be singular 'quality' when referring to the overall standard.
× Sometimes I really want to do as fast as I can
✓ Sometimes I really want to do it as fast as I can
The verb 'do' requires an object; adding 'it' clarifies the meaning.
× the qualities cannot be guaranteed
✓ the quality cannot be guaranteed
'Quality' is uncountable in this context and should be singular.
× Definitely when I was a child I didn't understand what patient exactly is, so I always cry when I made difficulties and challenges.
✓ Definitely, when I was a child, I didn't understand what patience exactly is, so I always cried when I faced difficulties and challenges.
'Patient' is an adjective; the noun 'patience' is needed here. 'Cry' should be past tense 'cried' to match 'was'. 'Made difficulties' is incorrect; 'faced difficulties' is correct.
× I always cry when I made difficulties and challenges.
✓ I always cried when I faced difficulties and challenges.
The verb tense should be consistent in past tense: 'cried' and 'faced'.
× when I made difficulties and challenges
✓ when I faced difficulties and challenges
The verb 'made' is incorrect here; 'faced' is the appropriate verb to describe encountering difficulties.
× But now as my age goes, I realize that patient is to stay calm and focus on what you really want to do.
✓ But now as I grow older, I realize that patience is staying calm and focusing on what you really want to do.
'Patient' is an adjective; the noun 'patience' is needed. 'As my age goes' is awkward; 'as I grow older' is better. 'Is to stay' should be 'is staying' or 'means staying'. 'Focus' should be 'focusing' to parallel 'staying'.