Snacks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and clarity by using correct verb forms and clearer connectors. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one supporting detail using a linking word. For example, use present simple for habits, correct subject-verb agreement, and replace unclear phrases (e.g., “shield the snack”) with clearer expressions (e.g., “have a snack”).

Ví dụ: I usually have a snack while I am working because it helps me stay alert and gives me energy to continue. For instance, I often eat a piece of fruit or a handful of nuts during long work sessions.

Gợi ý: Give a direct opinion sentence, then explain with specific reasons and use linking words. Correct grammar (countable/uncountable, verb tenses) and avoid fillers like “uh.” Mention alternatives to show balance.

Ví dụ: No, I don't think most snacks are healthy because they often contain a lot of salt and oil, which can lead to weight gain. However, I try to choose healthier snacks, such as yogurt, fruit, or raw vegetables.

Gợi ý: Answer directly using past tense, then add a clear reason with specific details. Fix unclear phrases and pronouns, and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ correctly. Provide a short example to illustrate the memory.

Ví dụ: Yes, I ate a lot of snacks when I was young because children are attracted to sweet and salty treats. For example, I often had cookies and chips after school, but my mother tried to limit them because they were unhealthy.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the snack, then give concise, specific reasons using linking words. Use appropriate adjectives and avoid repetition. You can mention an occasion or quantity to add detail.

Ví dụ: I like potato chips because they are salty, crispy, and very tasty. For example, I enjoy a small bag of chips when watching a movie, although I try not to eat them too often because they are oily.

× I will eat snack when I working because the when I shield the snack it makes me alert and have energy to continue the work.

✓ I eat snacks when I am working because when I chew a snack it makes me feel alert and gives me energy to continue working.

The original mixes future 'will' with present progressive 'working' and has incorrect verbs ('shield' instead of 'chew') and missing articles. Use present simple 'I eat' for habitual action, present continuous 'I am working' for ongoing action, and 'chew a snack' or 'eat a snack'. Also add 'feel' and 'gives' for natural expressions and plural 'snacks' or 'a snack'.

× No, the snack is not healthy for me because in the snack have uh salt and oil so it made me fat and not healthy. I have to find the good one.

✓ No, snacks are not healthy for me because they contain salt and oil, so they made me gain weight and are not healthy. I have to find a healthier one.

Use plural 'snacks' for general statements and replace 'the snack' with 'snacks'. 'In the snack have' is incorrect word order; use 'they contain'. Use 'gain weight' not 'made me fat'. Use 'a healthier one' instead of 'the good one'. Tense agreement: 'made' refers to past effect; 'are not healthy' present. 'Contain' suits general truth.

× Yes, I ate snack a lot when I was young because it's snack come with the child. The shy love snack it but it's not healthy so my mom didn't.

✓ Yes, I ate snacks a lot when I was young because snacks come with childhood. Children love snacks, but they are not healthy, so my mom did not allow them.

Use plural 'snacks' and correct tense and word order. 'It's snack come with the child' is ungrammatical; use 'snacks come with childhood' or 'snacks are common in childhood'. 'The shy love snack it' should be 'children love snacks'. 'My mom didn't' is incomplete; clarify 'did not allow them' or 'didn't let me eat them'.

× My snack that I like to eat is potato chips because it's salty and crispy and oily. It's mixed together with everything tasty so I love it.

✓ My favorite snack is potato chips because they are salty, crispy, and oily. They are full of tasty flavors, so I love them.

Use plural pronoun 'they' to agree with 'potato chips'. 'It's' is singular and incorrect. 'Mixed together with everything tasty' is awkward; 'full of tasty flavors' or 'have a lot of flavor' is clearer. Maintain subject-pronoun agreement and natural wording.