Snacks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and direct: start with a clear topic sentence saying when you snack, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid trailing or unfinished sentences and explain cultural terms briefly.

Ví dụ: I usually eat a snack around 3:00 PM each day. For example, my parents often prepare simple snacks like cookies or bread and homemade milk tea, and sometimes I enjoy Halo‑Halo, a Filipino shaved‑ice dessert.

Gợi ý: Give a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific, logical reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unfinished phrases; finish your thought about how to stay healthy.

Ví dụ: I think it depends on the snacks you choose. For instance, if you replace sugary treats with fruits and raw vegetables, you get more nutrients and fewer empty calories, so your snacks become much healthier.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with a clear past-tense sentence, then provide specific memories or examples. Use linking words to sequence ideas and avoid filler and unfinished endings.

Ví dụ: Yes, I ate snacks a lot when I was young. For example, I often went with my cousins to the local sari‑sari store where we bought candies, fruit shakes and bottled sodas, which was a regular part of my childhood.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct statement of your current preference, then give a brief reason why and use linking words. Be careful: pizza and spaghetti are more like meals, so clarify why you consider them snacks.

Ví dụ: At the moment I’m craving pizza and spaghetti with meatballs, which I treat as a filling snack. Because they make me feel full, I sometimes have a small portion in the afternoon so I eat less at dinner.

× My parents love to prepare snacks such as cookies, pies, bread and they even make drinks such as milk teas.

✓ My parents love preparing snacks such as cookies, pies, and bread, and they even make drinks such as milk tea.

Use of 'love to prepare' is acceptable, but parallel structure and noun form consistency improve clarity. 'Love preparing' is more natural when listing activities. Use singular 'milk tea' as a mass noun and include commas for list clarity. Ensure parallel verbs and items in lists.

× And also I love drinking Halo Halo. It's from the Philippines and.

✓ I also love drinking halo-halo; it is from the Philippines.

Sentence was incomplete and included unnecessary conjunction 'and' at the end. Remove leading 'And', place 'also' after subject for natural word order, hyphenate or lowercase 'halo-halo' as a compound dessert name, and finish the second clause to form a complete sentence.

× Well, it depends upon your choice of snacks and the You have to eliminate sugar from your snacks.

✓ Well, it depends on your choice of snacks. You should eliminate sugar from your snacks.

Sentence combined two clauses awkwardly and used 'depends upon your choice' which is acceptable but 'depends on' is more natural. There was an extraneous 'the' before 'You'. Split into two sentences for clarity and change 'have to' to 'should' to match advisory tone.

× You should choose eating fruits instead of cookies.

✓ You should choose to eat fruits instead of cookies.

Use 'choose to do something' rather than 'choose doing'. Use the infinitive 'to eat' after 'choose' for correct verb complementation.

× You should eat vegetables instead of pies.

✓ You should eat vegetables instead of pie.

'Pies' as plural is possible but 'pie' as a general food type is often used as a mass noun. Either is acceptable; change to singular 'pie' to match the general contrast with 'vegetables'.

× So to keep yourself.

✓ So that you can keep yourself healthy.

Original fragment lacked a main verb and object. Expand to a full clause that completes the idea, e.g., 'So that you can keep yourself healthy.' Adjust wording to match context.

× That's actually the peak time when I eat lots of snacks.

✓ That was actually the peak time when I ate lots of snacks.

Speaker refers to a past period ('when you were young' asked), so verbs should be in the past tense. Change 'is'/'eat' to 'was'/'ate' for consistency with past context.

× I grew up with my cousins and my aunts, my uncles, including my mom and my dad would give me money to buy from sari sari stores, candies, fruit shakes, a bottled sodas and stuff like that.

✓ I grew up with my cousins, aunts, and uncles. My mom and dad would give me money to buy things from sari-sari stores, like candies, fruit shakes, and bottled sodas.

Run-on sentence with mixed clauses and redundant possessives. Split into two sentences for clarity. Use parallel list punctuation and fix 'sari sari' to 'sari-sari', 'a bottled sodas' (incorrect article and plural) to 'bottled sodas'. Remove redundant 'my' before family members.

× So it's it's.

✓ So it was like that.

Fragment with repetition 'it's it's' is ungrammatical. Replace with a concise past-tense summary, e.g., 'So it was like that.' to match previous past-tense context.

× Right now I am craving pizza, spaghetti and meatballs.

✓ Right now I am craving pizza, spaghetti, and meatballs.

Add a serial comma for clarity in a list. The present continuous 'am craving' is correct for current desire.

× I don't know, for some reason I'm craving it since last week.

✓ I don't know; for some reason I've been craving it since last week.

When an action started in the past and continues to the present, use present perfect continuous ('have been craving') not simple present ('am craving') with a past time expression 'since last week'.

× So I would love a snack that also gives me the feeling of being full so that by dinner time I will eat less.

✓ So I would like a snack that also makes me feel full, so that I will eat less at dinner.

Change 'would love' to 'would like' for a polite preference (both acceptable). Use 'makes me feel full' for natural phrasing. Move 'at dinner' to end and split clauses with a comma for readability.