Part 1
Giám khảo
When do you usually eat snacks now?
Thí sinh
In fact, sometimes I when I finish my homework, I will eat some snacks because in that time I feel very tired. But if I eat snacks, I think it can bring out my more energy and happiness.
Giám khảo
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
Thí sinh
Actually, it's not how very healthy for people to eat snacks because something is like a calorie bomb. It may it will make me very fat. So absolutely I'm not very interesting to eat snacks.
Giám khảo
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
Thí sinh
Why was round? I think UMM barely eats snacks because when I was a young my mother always tell me don't eat so so many snacks. It have so ma so many sugars and calories it's very awesome.
Giám khảo
What snacks do you like to eat?
Thí sinh
I only have one snake that I want to eat. It's chocolate because chocolate have so many flavors and I can I can try try to eat.
When do you usually eat snacks now?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答时语法和表达不够准确,句子结构混乱,建议简化句子并注意时态和语法的正确使用,同时避免重复表达。
Ví dụ: I usually eat snacks after finishing my homework because I feel tired then. Eating snacks helps me feel more energetic and happier.
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 表达不清晰,语法错误较多,建议使用更准确的词汇和句型表达观点,并注意句子连贯性。
Ví dụ: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because many snacks have a lot of calories. They might make me gain weight, so I try not to eat them often.
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答中有许多语法和发音错误,句子不连贯,建议练习基本句型,注意时态和主谓一致,并避免使用不恰当的词汇。
Ví dụ: When I was young, I rarely ate snacks because my mother told me not to eat too many. She said snacks have a lot of sugar and calories, which is not good for health.
What snacks do you like to eat?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中有发音和语法错误,句子重复,建议使用更准确的词汇并避免重复,同时丰富表达。
Ví dụ: My favorite snack is chocolate because it comes in many flavors, and I enjoy trying different kinds.
× In fact, sometimes I when I finish my homework, I will eat some snacks because in that time I feel very tired.
✓ In fact, sometimes when I finish my homework, I will eat some snacks because at that time I feel very tired.
句子中“sometimes I when I finish my homework”结构混乱,应去掉多余的“I”,并将“in that time”改为更自然的“at that time”。
× But if I eat snacks, I think it can bring out my more energy and happiness.
✓ But if I eat snacks, I think it can bring me more energy and happiness.
“bring out my more energy”中“bring out”用法不当,应改为“bring me more energy”,更符合英语表达习惯。
× Actually, it's not how very healthy for people to eat snacks because something is like a calorie bomb.
✓ Actually, it's not very healthy for people to eat snacks because some snacks are like calorie bombs.
“how very healthy”用法错误,应直接用“very healthy”;“something is like a calorie bomb”表达不清,应改为“some snacks are like calorie bombs”。
× It may it will make me very fat.
✓ It may make me very fat.
“may it will”重复使用情态动词,应只用一个,保留“may”更合适。
× So absolutely I'm not very interesting to eat snacks.
✓ So absolutely I'm not very interested in eating snacks.
“interesting”是形容词,表示“有趣的”,此处应使用“interested”表示“感兴趣的”,并且动词后应用介词短语“interested in eating”。
× Why was round? I think UMM barely eats snacks because when I was a young my mother always tell me don't eat so so many snacks.
✓ Why was that? I think I barely ate snacks because when I was young my mother always told me not to eat so many snacks.
“Why was round?”不合逻辑,应为“Why was that?”;“UMM”应为“I”;“barely eats”时态和主语不符,应为“barely ate”;“when I was a young”中“a”多余;“tell”应为过去式“told”;“don't eat so so many snacks”应改为“not to eat so many snacks”。
× It have so ma so many sugars and calories it's very awesome.
✓ It has so many sugars and calories; it's very bad for health.
“It have”主谓不一致,应为“It has”;“so ma so many”是重复且错误拼写,应为“so many”;“awesome”用词不当,描述含糖量高应用负面词汇。
× I only have one snake that I want to eat.
✓ I only have one snack that I want to eat.
“snake”拼写错误,应为“snack”,表示零食。
× It's chocolate because chocolate have so many flavors and I can I can try try to eat.
✓ It's chocolate because chocolate has so many flavors and I can try to eat it.
“chocolate have”主谓不一致,应为“chocolate has”;“try try”重复,应去掉一个;“try to eat”后应加宾语“it”。