Snacks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as mixing past and present tenses ('was studying' instead of 'am studying') and incorrect verb forms ('relaxed' instead of 'relax'). To improve, use the present tense consistently and structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence followed by supporting details. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise.

Ví dụ: I usually eat snacks when I am studying at home because I find that eating snacks helps me to relax. For example, when I feel stressed, I often open the snack cupboard and have a pack of cheese.

Gợi ý: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward expressions, such as 'a pack a whole pack' and 'many sugar on it'. To improve, use clearer and more natural phrasing, and include linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Ví dụ: Most of the time, I think eating snacks is unhealthy for me because I tend to eat a lot of sweets. For instance, when I feel stressed, I might eat a whole pack of gummies, which contain a lot of sugar.

Gợi ý: Your answer has tense inconsistencies and unclear expressions, such as 'I often eat snacks when I was a child' and 'I was a little'. To improve, use the past tense consistently when talking about the past, and clarify your points with more natural vocabulary and linking words.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child. For example, I have liked eating gummies since I was little. Moreover, my mum did not stop me from eating snacks, so I was free to enjoy them.

Gợi ý: Your answer is somewhat informal and contains grammatical errors, such as 'some of them are having sour powder on it' and 'cheesy is really my type of taste'. To improve, use more precise vocabulary and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words for coherence.

Ví dụ: I like many kinds of snacks. For instance, I enjoy eating gummies because they are sweet and some have a sour powder coating. Additionally, I like cheese rings because I really enjoy cheesy flavours.

× I usually eat snacks when I was studying at home as I think eating snacks can definitely relaxed me, so when I stressful I'll open the snacks door and take a pack of cheese.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I am studying at home as I think eating snacks can definitely relax me, so when I am stressed I'll open the snack door and take a pack of cheese.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'I was studying' should be 'I am studying' to match 'I usually eat' which is present tense. 'Can definitely relaxed me' is incorrect; 'relaxed' should be the base form 'relax' after 'can'. 'When I stressful' is incorrect; it should be 'when I am stressed' to use the correct adjective form and verb 'to be'. Also, 'snacks door' should be 'snack door' as 'snack' is used as an adjective here.

× If you're saying most of the time, no, it is unhealthy for me to eat snacks because I really eat a lot of sweets.

✓ If you are saying most of the time, no, it is unhealthy for me to eat snacks because I really eat a lot of sweets.

The contraction 'you're' stands for 'you are' and is acceptable, but in formal speech 'If you are saying' is clearer. No modal verb error here, so no correction needed for modal verbs. This sentence is acceptable as is.

× When I feel stressed I can eat a pack a whole pack of gummies with many sugar on it.

✓ When I feel stressed I can eat a whole pack of gummies with a lot of sugar on it.

'A pack a whole pack' is redundant; 'a whole pack' suffices. 'Many sugar' is incorrect because 'sugar' is uncountable; 'a lot of sugar' is correct. The tense is present, which matches 'When I feel stressed' so no tense correction needed.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child.

The action happened in the past ('when I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'ate' instead of present 'eat'.

× As I said, I really like eating gummies since I was a little.

✓ As I said, I have really liked eating gummies since I was little.

'Since I was a little' is incomplete; it should be 'since I was little' or 'since I was a child'. Also, 'I really like' should be present perfect 'I have really liked' to indicate an action continuing from the past to present.

× My mom would not desist me from eating snacks so I'm totally free to.

✓ My mom would not stop me from eating snacks so I'm totally free to.

'Desist me' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'stop me'. Also, 'free to' is incomplete; it should be 'free to do so' or 'free to eat snacks'.

× Wow there are many.

✓ Wow, there are many.

A comma is needed after 'Wow' to separate the interjection from the rest of the sentence.

× I like eating gummies as they are sweets and some of them are having sour powder on it.

✓ I like eating gummies as they are sweets and some of them have sour powder on them.

'Are having' is incorrect here; 'have' is the correct verb to describe possession or characteristic. Also, 'on it' should be 'on them' to agree with the plural 'some of them'.

× Also I like eating cheese ring because I think cheesy is really my type of taste.

✓ Also I like eating cheese rings because I think cheesy flavour is really my type of taste.

'Cheese ring' should be plural 'cheese rings' if referring to snack items. 'Cheesy' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify; 'cheesy flavour' is appropriate. 'My type of taste' is awkward but acceptable; 'my kind of taste' or 'my taste' would be better.