Part 1
Giám khảo
When do you usually eat snacks now?
Thí sinh
I usually eat snack like after the main course when it's like the break school time like 14 AM in the school. So after the first lesson I always eat snacks and share it with my.
Giám khảo
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
Thí sinh
Well it's not really healthy for each snake but I don't really often to eat snake too. And I always bring snack that does like cookies or something I love like carrots snack and then strawberry, blueberry like healthy food snack stuff.
Giám khảo
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
Thí sinh
Uh, so my mom really doesn't let me to eat more. Uh, so I just eat the snack less than I eat, uh, the real food and real life because it's not really healthy for my body and I'm still young too, so my mom just give me real food.
Giám khảo
What snacks do you like to eat?
Thí sinh
So I usually a likes like the, uh, from the real food, especially like carrot, umm, many fruits like berries, strawberry, blueberry, uh, and for the drink I like to drink chia seed or matcha.
When do you usually eat snacks now?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: Jawaban Anda kurang alami dan ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa serta penggunaan kata yang tidak tepat. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur dengan baik, serta hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan langsung ke inti jawaban.
Ví dụ: I usually eat snacks after my first lesson at school, around 2 PM. I like to share them with my friends during the break.
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat kesalahan pengucapan kata serta tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk menjawab dengan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat. Jelaskan pendapat Anda dengan contoh yang spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.
Ví dụ: I think snacks are not very healthy, so I don't eat them often. When I do, I prefer healthy options like carrot sticks, strawberries, and blueberries.
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik namun masih ada pengulangan kata dan struktur kalimat yang kurang rapi. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide dengan baik.
Ví dụ: When I was young, my mom didn't allow me to eat many snacks. She preferred me to eat real food because it is healthier for my body.
What snacks do you like to eat?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup jelas namun terdapat pengulangan kata dan penggunaan kata pengisi yang berlebihan. Cobalah untuk menjawab dengan kalimat yang lebih lancar dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat serta variasi kata yang lebih baik.
Ví dụ: I usually like healthy snacks such as carrots and various fruits like strawberries and blueberries. For drinks, I enjoy chia seed drinks or matcha tea.
× I usually eat snack like after the main course when it's like the break school time like 14 AM in the school.
✓ I usually eat snacks like after the main course when it's break time at school around 2 PM.
The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to a general habit of eating multiple snack items. Also, '14 AM' is incorrect; the correct time format is '2 PM'. 'Break school time' is better expressed as 'break time at school'.
× So after the first lesson I always eat snacks and share it with my.
✓ So after the first lesson I always eat snacks and share them with my friends.
The sentence ends abruptly with 'my' which is incomplete. It should specify with whom the snacks are shared, e.g., 'my friends'. Also, 'snacks' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it'.
× Well it's not really healthy for each snake but I don't really often to eat snake too.
✓ Well, it's not really healthy to eat snacks, but I don't often eat snacks either.
The phrase 'for each snake' is incorrect; it should be 'to eat snacks'. Also, 'I don't really often to eat' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I don't often eat'. The word 'snake' is a misspelling of 'snack'.
× And I always bring snack that does like cookies or something I love like carrots snack and then strawberry, blueberry like healthy food snack stuff.
✓ And I always bring snacks like cookies or something. I love carrot snacks and also strawberry and blueberry snacks, which are healthy food snacks.
'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' when referring to multiple items. The sentence is also fragmented and needs to be split for clarity. 'Carrots snack' should be 'carrot snacks'.
× Uh, so my mom really doesn't let me to eat more.
✓ Uh, so my mom really doesn't let me eat more.
The verb 'let' is followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Therefore, 'let me to eat' is incorrect; it should be 'let me eat'.
× Uh, so I just eat the snack less than I eat, uh, the real food and real life because it's not really healthy for my body and I'm still young too, so my mom just give me real food.
✓ Uh, so I just eat snacks less than I eat real food in real life because it's not really healthy for my body and I'm still young too, so my mom just gives me real food.
'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' to indicate general consumption. 'Give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'my mom'. 'In real life' is a better phrase than 'and real life'.
× so my mom just give me real food.
✓ so my mom just gives me real food.
The verb 'give' must agree with the third person singular subject 'my mom', so it should be 'gives'.
× So I usually a likes like the, uh, from the real food, especially like carrot, umm, many fruits like berries, strawberry, blueberry, uh, and for the drink I like to drink chia seed or matcha.
✓ So I usually like foods from real food, especially carrots, many fruits like berries, strawberries, blueberries, and for drinks I like to drink chia seed water or matcha.
'Likes' is incorrect after 'I usually'; it should be 'like'. 'Carrot' should be plural 'carrots' when referring to the food generally. 'Strawberry' and 'blueberry' should be plural 'strawberries' and 'blueberries' when referring to multiple fruits. 'Chia seed' is better expressed as 'chia seed water' or 'chia seeds' for clarity.