Part 1
Giám khảo
When do you usually eat snacks now?
Thí sinh
I usually have snacks in the evening when I am reading books and watching TV's. Having snacks can relieve my pressure and make me more confidence throughout the day. I usually prepare the snacks for popcorn or chips because they are easy to prepare and tasty.
Giám khảo
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
Thí sinh
No, I don't think it's very healthy for me to have a lot of snacks. There are a lot of salt, sugar and unhealthy fat which can prove each which can make your get a heavy when you're excessively consumed. That and also they may cause a lot of healthy issues.
Giám khảo
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
Thí sinh
Yes, I often eat a lot of snacks when I was young because they gave me a lot of pressure and they helped me relax after school. For example, I usually enjoy sweet snacks like a cookie and candies, which were very tasty and made me feel happy when I was stress.
Giám khảo
What snacks do you like to eat?
Thí sinh
I enjoy the sweet snacks best, which can provide me a lot of happiness and relieve my pressures after school. For example, I usually enjoy the cookies and the candies in my daily life because it's not only tasty but also it's very sweet.
When do you usually eat snacks now?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题,例如“make me more confidence”应为“make me more confident”,且“watching TV's”中的复数形式不正确。建议简化句子结构,避免冗余,并注意冠词和复数形式的正确使用。
Ví dụ: I usually eat snacks in the evening while reading books or watching TV. Snacks help me relax and feel more confident. I often choose popcorn or chips because they are easy to prepare and taste good.
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误较多,表达不清晰,如“which can prove each which can make your get a heavy”语句混乱。建议使用简单明了的句子表达观点,避免语法错误,并具体说明不健康的原因。
Ví dụ: No, I don't think eating many snacks is healthy. They usually contain a lot of salt, sugar, and unhealthy fats, which can cause weight gain and health problems if eaten too much.
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 时态使用不当,如“eat”应为“ate”,且表达不够自然。建议注意时态一致性,简洁表达原因和举例,避免重复。
Ví dụ: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because they helped me relax after school. For example, I liked sweet snacks like cookies and candies, which were tasty and made me happy when I felt stressed.
What snacks do you like to eat?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在重复和语法错误,如“the cookies and the candies”应为“cookies and candies”,且“it's not only tasty but also it's very sweet”表达冗余。建议简化句子,避免重复,并使用更自然的表达。
Ví dụ: I like sweet snacks the most because they make me happy and help me relax after school. For example, I often eat cookies and candies because they taste sweet and delicious.
× I usually have snacks in the evening when I am reading books and watching TV's.
✓ I usually have snacks in the evening when I am reading books and watching TV.
这里“TV's”错误地使用了所有格形式,实际上应使用复数形式“TVs”或直接用“TV”表示电视。根据语境,应该用“TV”表示电视节目或电视机。
× Having snacks can relieve my pressure and make me more confidence throughout the day.
✓ Having snacks can relieve my pressure and make me more confident throughout the day.
“more confidence”是名词短语,句中需要形容词“confident”来修饰主语,表示“更有信心”。
× I usually prepare the snacks for popcorn or chips because they are easy to prepare and tasty.
✓ I usually prepare snacks like popcorn or chips because they are easy to prepare and tasty.
“the snacks for popcorn or chips”结构不正确,应该用“snacks like popcorn or chips”表示“像爆米花或薯片这样的零食”。
× There are a lot of salt, sugar and unhealthy fat which can prove each which can make your get a heavy when you're excessively consumed.
✓ There is a lot of salt, sugar and unhealthy fat which can cause you to gain weight when consumed excessively.
“salt, sugar and unhealthy fat”作为不可数名词,应使用单数动词“is”。另外,句子结构混乱,需调整表达。
× There are a lot of salt, sugar and unhealthy fat which can prove each which can make your get a heavy when you're excessively consumed.
✓ There is a lot of salt, sugar and unhealthy fat which can cause you to gain weight when consumed excessively.
“your get a heavy”错误使用了“your”,应为“you”,且表达不通顺,需改为“cause you to gain weight”。
× That and also they may cause a lot of healthy issues.
✓ Also, they may cause a lot of health issues.
“healthy issues”用词错误,应为“health issues”表示健康问题。
× Yes, I often eat a lot of snacks when I was young because they gave me a lot of pressure and they helped me relax after school.
✓ Yes, I often ate a lot of snacks when I was young because they gave me a lot of pressure and helped me relax after school.
描述过去习惯时,动词应使用过去式“ate”而非现在式“eat”。
× For example, I usually enjoy sweet snacks like a cookie and candies, which were very tasty and made me feel happy when I was stress.
✓ For example, I usually enjoyed sweet snacks like cookies and candies, which were very tasty and made me feel happy when I was stressed.
“a cookie and candies”数量不一致,应改为复数“cookies and candies”。“when I was stress”中“stress”应为形容词“stressed”。
× For example, I usually enjoy sweet snacks like a cookie and candies, which were very tasty and made me feel happy when I was stress.
✓ For example, I usually enjoyed sweet snacks like cookies and candies, which were very tasty and made me feel happy when I was stressed.
“when I was stress”中“stress”应为形容词“stressed”,表示“我感到压力时”。
× I enjoy the sweet snacks best, which can provide me a lot of happiness and relieve my pressures after school.
✓ I enjoy sweet snacks best, which can provide me with a lot of happiness and relieve my pressure after school.
“the sweet snacks”不需要定冠词,且“relieve my pressures”应为不可数名词“pressure”。
× I enjoy the sweet snacks best, which can provide me a lot of happiness and relieve my pressures after school.
✓ I enjoy sweet snacks best, which can provide me with a lot of happiness and relieve my pressure after school.
“provide me a lot of happiness”缺少介词“with”,应为“provide me with”。
× For example, I usually enjoy the cookies and the candies in my daily life because it's not only tasty but also it's very sweet.
✓ For example, I usually enjoy cookies and candies in my daily life because they are not only tasty but also very sweet.
“the cookies and the candies”不需要定冠词,且“it's”应改为复数“they are”与复数主语一致。