Writing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Verbesserungsvorschlag: Kürzen Sie die Antwort und machen Sie die Struktur klarer. Beginnen Sie mit einer direkten Antwort auf die Frage, geben Sie dann ein oder zwei unterstützende Details und vermeiden Sie Wiederholungen. Achten Sie auf Grammatik (z. B. Zeitformen und Possessivformen) und verwenden Sie präzisere Ausdrücke statt vager Phrasen.

Ví dụ: No, I don't write a lot now. When I was younger I kept a diary and wrote down interesting events; it still contains many happy memories.

Gợi ý: Verbesserungsvorschlag: Geben Sie eine klare thematische Aussage und ein konkretes Beispiel. Verwenden Sie korrekte Einzahl/Mehrzahl und Präpositionen, und fügen Sie ein verbindendes Wort hinzu, um die Logik zu verbessern.

Ví dụ: I usually write about memorable experiences or funny moments because they help me remember important days; for example, I once wrote about a surprise birthday party.

Gợi ý: Verbesserungsvorschlag: Formulieren Sie präziser und korrigieren Sie Fehler (z. B. ‚vote‘ ist hier falsch). Nutzen Sie Verbindungswörter für Klarheit und geben Sie ein konkretes Beispiel, wie sich Einträge ändern könnten.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think my entries would change over time because as I grow older I experience new events and perspectives; for instance, I might write more about challenges and lessons learned rather than only happy moments.

Gợi ý: Verbesserungsvorschlag: Nennen Sie zwei klare Gründe und erläutern Sie sie knapp. Achten Sie auf Wortwahl und Grammatik („handwritten“ statt „handwrited“). Nutzen Sie eine kurze verbindende Phrase.

Ví dụ: I prefer handwriting to typing because I'm faster at it and it feels more personal; for example, seeing my handwritten notes brings back stronger memories.

Gợi ý: Verbesserungsvorschlag: Geben Sie eine präzise Häufigkeitsangabe und vermeiden Sie unnötige Großschreibung. Verwenden Sie klare Verbindungswörter und ein kurzes Beispiel, um Ihre Aussage zu konkretisieren.

Ví dụ: Not very often — maybe once or twice a month. I usually write only when something special happens or when I find a quote that inspires me.

Gợi ý: Verbesserungsvorschlag: Verwenden Sie die richtige Zeitform und Wortwahl (z. B. ‚pictures‘, ‚easier‘, ‚more vivid‘). Strukturieren Sie den Satz klar mit einer Hauptaussage und einem Beispiel oder Grund, unterstützt durch eine verbindende Phrase.

Ví dụ: I usually use photos to record my life because it's easier and photos make memories more vivid; for instance, I keep a photo album of trips and celebrations.

× No, I don't. But when I was younger I used to have a diary and whenever something interesting happened, I would write it in my diary. It contains a lot of beautiful memories from me.

✓ No, I don't. But when I was younger I used to have a diary and whenever something interesting happened, I would write it in my diary. It contained a lot of beautiful memories of mine.

The original sentence mixes past and present tense: 'It contains' is present while the context is about the past. Use past tense 'contained'. Also 'from me' is awkward; the correct possessive phrase is 'of mine'. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent and use standard possessive expressions. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× I would write about beautiful experiences that I had of the day or just fun thing that happened to me.

✓ I would write about beautiful experiences that I had during the day or just fun things that happened to me.

The phrase 'of the day' is incorrect; use 'during the day' or 'that day'. 'Fun thing' should be plural 'fun things' to match 'experiences' and the plural context. Ensure correct prepositional phrase and plural agreement. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× All those things that should be memorized.

✓ All those things that should be remembered.

'Memorized' implies actively learning to recall, which is odd here. 'Remembered' is the natural verb to express keeping memories. Also the fragment lacks a subject; it's clear in context as a continuation but better as 'I wanted to remember' if a full sentence is preferred. Grammar problem type ID: 4

× Yes, I think so, because when you are getting older, many different thing could happen to you, whether it's good thing or bad thing.

✓ Yes, I think so, because as you get older, many different things can happen to you, whether they're good things or bad things.

Use 'as you get older' rather than 'are getting older' for general statements. 'Thing' should be plural 'things'. Modal 'could' is acceptable but 'can' fits general possibility. Also match plural for 'it's' -> 'they're'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× And it's probably possible that I won't just vote about the good thing but also the bad memories that happened to me.

✓ And it's also possible that I won't write only about the good things but also about the bad memories that happened to me.

'Vote about' is incorrect — likely intended 'write about'. 'Won't just' and word order are awkward; rephrasing clarifies intention. Use plural 'things' and include 'about' before 'the bad memories'. Grammar problem type ID: 4

× I would definitely prefer handwriting over typing because I'm faster in handwriting and another reason is it feels more personal when you see your handwrited letter for example.

✓ I would definitely prefer handwriting to typing because I'm faster at handwriting, and another reason is it feels more personal when you see your handwritten letters, for example.

Use 'prefer X to Y' not 'over'. Use 'faster at' not 'in'. 'Handwrited' is incorrect; the past participle of 'handwrite' is 'handwritten'. 'Letter' should be plural 'letters' if referring generally. Add commas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 4

× Actually, not very often, maybe just one or twice in a month. I would only write Diaries when something special happened on that day, or just write down a special quote.

✓ Actually, not very often, maybe just once or twice a month. I would only write in my diary when something special happened that day, or just write down a special quote.

Use 'once or twice a month' rather than 'one or twice in a month'. 'Diaries' is wrong: singular 'diary' (or 'my diary') is appropriate. Use 'write in my diary' rather than 'write Diaries'. 'On that day' -> 'that day'. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× I would have used picture to record my life as many people else because it's more easier this way and if you can see the picture is more made the memory more vividly.

✓ I would use pictures to record my life like many other people because it's easier that way, and when you can see the pictures they make the memories more vivid.

'Would have used' is wrong tense/modal; simple 'would use' or 'I use' fits general habit. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures'. 'Many people else' -> 'many other people'. 'More easier' is incorrect; use 'easier' (not 'more easier'). The clause is restructured: 'if you can see the picture is more made the memory more vividly' is ungrammatical; correct to 'when you can see the pictures they make the memories more vivid'. Grammar problem type ID: 12