Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you write a lot?
Thí sinh
I always read a lot when I was a high school student. At that time, I was prepared for my college entrance examination, but now I just write some important things on my textbooks.
Giám khảo
What do you like to write? Why?
Thí sinh
Actually, I like writing some novels because I think it's a good way to entertainment plus it can help me to relieve the stress of the routine life.
Giám khảo
Do you think the things you write would change?
Thí sinh
Yes, I sing. The sing a ride would be change because with my experience and my skill in writing would be developed in my age, I can write more creative and more experience.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
Thí sinh
Well, I was a high school student, I not have a phone or laptop so I just can write it down. But now the phone and laptop play a crucial role in my daily life, so I prefer typing because it's so convenient and easy to type in.
Giám khảo
How often do you keep diaries?
Thí sinh
Actually I never had these hobbies so I never do it, but I prefer take photo and videos when I suffer some important moment.
Giám khảo
What other methods do you use to record your life?
Thí sinh
I prefer to take a photo and a video, then upload it to the social media platform like WeChat Moment to show me off to record it, and I think it's a good way to convey my emotion and have a contact with my friends.
× I always read a lot when I was a high school student.
✓ I always read a lot when I was a high school student.
此句中“read”发音为过去式,符合过去时态,无需修改。
× but now I just write some important things on my textbooks.
✓ but now I just write some important things in my textbooks.
介词“on”用法不当,应该用“in”表示在书本内部写东西。
× Actually, I like writing some novels because I think it's a good way to entertainment plus it can help me to relieve the stress of the routine life.
✓ Actually, I like writing some novels because I think it's a good way to entertain plus it can help me relieve the stress of routine life.
“way to entertainment”中“entertainment”应为动词不定式“to entertain”,且“help me to relieve”中“to”可省略,且“the routine life”中“the”不必要。
× Yes, I sing. The sing a ride would be change because with my experience and my skill in writing would be developed in my age, I can write more creative and more experience.
✓ Yes, I think the style and writing would change because as I gain experience and improve my writing skills with age, I can write more creatively and with more experience.
句子结构混乱,单词拼写错误(sing应为think),表达不清晰,需重组句子并更正词汇。
× Well, I was a high school student, I not have a phone or laptop so I just can write it down.
✓ Well, when I was a high school student, I did not have a phone or laptop so I could only write it down.
“I not have”应为过去时否定形式“did not have”,“just can write”应为过去时“could only write”。
× But now the phone and laptop play a crucial role in my daily life, so I prefer typing because it's so convenient and easy to type in.
✓ But now the phone and laptop play a crucial role in my daily life, so I prefer typing because it's so convenient and easy to use.
“easy to type in”表达不自然,改为“easy to use”更符合习惯用法。
× Actually I never had these hobbies so I never do it, but I prefer take photo and videos when I suffer some important moment.
✓ Actually, I have never had these hobbies so I never do it, but I prefer taking photos and videos when I experience some important moments.
“never had”应为现在完成时“have never had”,“prefer take”应为“prefer taking”,“suffer some important moment”用词不当,应为“experience some important moments”。
× I prefer to take a photo and a video, then upload it to the social media platform like WeChat Moment to show me off to record it, and I think it's a good way to convey my emotion and have a contact with my friends.
✓ I prefer to take photos and videos, then upload them to social media platforms like WeChat Moments to show off and record them, and I think it's a good way to convey my emotions and keep in contact with my friends.
“show me off”错误,应为“show off”,“a photo and a video”应为复数形式,“social media platform”应为复数,“have a contact”应为“keep in contact”,“emotion”应为复数“emotions”。