Writing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 你的回答有些冗长且语法错误较多，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并注意语法和句子结构的正确性。

Ví dụ: Yes, I write a lot because it helps me relax and express my thoughts clearly.

Gợi ý: 回答中表达不够流畅，建议使用连贯的句子并注意时态和词汇的准确使用。

Ví dụ: I like to write about my daily life because when I grow up, I can look back at my diary and feel happy and excited.

Gợi ý: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简洁表达观点并使用合适的连接词。

Ví dụ: I believe what I write will remain the same because writing preserves my memories forever.

Gợi ý: 回答不完整且表达不清，建议完整表达理由并避免重复。

Ví dụ: I prefer handwriting because it feels more personal and helps me express my emotions better.

Gợi ý: 回答中有发音错误和重复，建议注意发音并简洁表达。

Ví dụ: I write in my diary every day because each day brings new experiences worth recording.

Gợi ý: 回答较为自然，但可以减少口头语并使用更丰富的词汇。

Ví dụ: I also take photos to capture my experiences, especially when I travel to new cities, as it helps me remember the moments vividly.

× writing is a good habit and it can makes me feel relaxed

✓ writing is a good habit and it can make me feel relaxed

情态动词can后面应接动词原形，不能加s。这里makes应改为make。

× and it's a good way to express myself it according to the writing I feel very clean and.

✓ and it's a good way to express myself. According to the writing, I feel very clean and relaxed.

原句结构混乱，缺少标点和连贯性。应拆分为两句，并补充缺失部分，使句子完整通顺。

× I like to write my daily life because I think if I continue oh writing my diary, one day I become grown up, I will see my diary again and I will become very happiness and excited.

✓ I like to write about my daily life because I think if I continue writing my diary, one day when I grow up, I will see my diary again and I will become very happy and excited.

continue后应接动名词writing；become grown up应改为grow up；happiness是名词，形容词应为happy。

× So I like to write my daily life, but now I prefer recall them.

✓ So I like to write about my daily life, but now I prefer to recall it.

prefer后应接动词不定式to recall；daily life是不可数名词，代词应为it而非them。

× I don't think the things I write would change because if if everything will be changed but I write, it will stay forever.

✓ I don't think the things I write will change because even if everything changes, what I write will stay forever.

虚拟语气中would改为will更合适；if条件句中用一般现在时changes；will be changed被动语态不合适，改为changes。

× It will not be changed and I will protect them and let them keep.

✓ It will not change and I will protect it and keep it safe.

things前文指代单数内容，代词应统一为it；let them keep结构不正确，改为keep it safe更通顺。

× I prefer handwriting because I think it's meaningful and it it can express my mood at that time and I think it can practice my.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I think it's meaningful and it can express my mood at that time, and I think it can help me practice.

重复的it应去掉；practice后应有宾语，补充help me practice使句子完整。

× I kick my Diaries every day because I think every day is a new life, every day is a new challenge and have new new things that I will record it.

✓ I keep my diary every day because I think every day is a new life, every day is a new challenge and has new things that I will record.

kick应为keep；diaries复数改为单数diary；have主语是every day，需用第三人称单数has；record后不需it。

× And I think when I grow up I see my diary, I will feel very excited.

✓ And I think when I grow up and see my diary, I will feel very excited.

连接词and缺失，连接两个动作；时态保持一致。

× when I travel to another city, I usually take pictures umm for everything that I saw because I think it's a good way to record it.

✓ When I travel to another city, I usually take pictures of everything that I see because I think it's a good way to record it.

take pictures后应接介词of；时态应保持现在时see而非过去时saw。