Writing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的时态和表达方式。

Ví dụ: Yes, I write a lot, especially after long trips. I usually record my feelings and observations, and combine them with photos and videos to create a journal, which I then post on my blog.

Gợi ý: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱。建议使用更清晰的句子表达喜好和原因，并注意语法和词汇的准确性。

Ví dụ: I like writing diaries or journals because sharing my thoughts and feelings on my blog gives me a sense of satisfaction. It also feels rewarding when my posts help others with their trips.

Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用更准确的时态和词汇，表达观点时逻辑要清晰。

Ví dụ: Yes, I think what I write can change over time, especially if I don't regularly record my recent experiences. Memories tend to fade, and when I revisit places, I often find that things have changed and I can't remember everything clearly.

Gợi ý: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，注意主谓一致，并使用连贯的表达方式。

Ví dụ: I prefer typing on my phone because it's easy to access, and I can quickly record my thoughts and feelings. This way, I don't miss any part of my memories.

× I usually will write down what what I feel and what I saw during the trip and I will collect it with my pictures and videos as a journal and I will post it on the on my blog.

✓ I usually write down what I feel and what I saw during the trip, and I collect it with my pictures and videos as a journal, and I post it on my blog.

句中使用了“will”与“usually”搭配不当，表示习惯动作时应使用一般现在时。去掉多余的“what”，并调整句子结构使其更通顺。

× I will post it on the on my blog.

✓ I will post it on my blog.

“on the on my blog”中“the on”重复且多余，应删除。

× I like to write diary or journal especially sharing these thoughts and feelings on blog can make me feel satisfied.

✓ I like to write diaries or journals, especially sharing these thoughts and feelings on my blog can make me feel satisfied.

“diary”与“journal”应使用复数形式表示泛指多篇日记或日志。

× I like to write diary or journal especially sharing these thoughts and feelings on blog can make me feel satisfied.

✓ I like to write diaries or journals, especially sharing these thoughts and feelings on my blog can make me feel satisfied.

“on blog”缺少冠词，应为“on my blog”。

× I also feel that feel sense of achievement when I feel that my sharing can help someone to trip.

✓ I also feel a sense of achievement when I feel that my sharing can help someone on a trip.

“feel that feel sense”重复，应删去多余的“feel”。“help someone to trip”表达不准确，应为“help someone on a trip”。

× Yes, everything would change, especially if you don't regular stories that you just experience.

✓ Yes, everything would change, especially if you don't regularly record the stories that you just experienced.

“don't regular stories”表达不完整且错误，应为“don't regularly record the stories”。

× The memories would fade out in your brains and when you back back to the place you will find everything change and you can even remember it.

✓ The memories would fade out in your brain, and when you go back to the place, you will find everything has changed and you can't even remember it.

“back back”重复，应删去多余的“back”。“brains”应为单数“brain”。“you will find everything change”时态错误，应为“has changed”。“you can even remember it”与语境不符，应为“can't even remember it”。

× I prefer typing stories on my phones because phones is easy to easy to get and I can type in these thoughts and feelings down as soon as possible and I want to.

✓ I prefer typing stories on my phone because the phone is easy to get, and I can type these thoughts and feelings down as soon as possible, and I want to.

“phones”应为单数“phone”，且“phones is”主谓不一致，应为“phone is”。

× I prefer typing stories on my phones because phones is easy to easy to get and I can type in these thoughts and feelings down as soon as possible and I want to.

✓ I prefer typing stories on my phone because the phone is easy to get, and I can type these thoughts and feelings down as soon as possible, and I want to.

“easy to easy to get”重复，应删去多余的“easy to”。

× I can type in these thoughts and feelings down as soon as possible and I want to.

✓ I can type these thoughts and feelings down as soon as possible because I want to.

句子结构不完整，“and I want to”缺少连接词，应改为“because I want to”。