Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you love flowers?
Thí sinh
Yes I love flowers especially if they smell good. I love both when they are as a gift and also I like to I like to grow them as a plant. Both are good.
Giám khảo
Do you know anyone who loves flowers?
Thí sinh
Yes, my mother loves flowers, especially, uh, white roses. That's why I always buy for my mother when, uh, a special day comes, uh, I buy to my mother as a gift a White Rose.
Giám khảo
Are there a lot of flowers where you live?
Thí sinh
Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live, but I don't know the exact names of them in English, That's why I cannot give examples to you. But since my hometown is a very unique climate, there are a lot of flower types in my hometown.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of flowers in your daily life?
Thí sinh
I generally don't take photos of flowers, but if I see a different kind of flowers which I didn't see before, most probably I would take picture of it. But I don't like to take pictures of random flowers, it should be different from the others.
Giám khảo
Do people in your country often send flowers to others?
Thí sinh
As far as I know, in my hometown people they rarely send flowers to others. If they are only in a special situation, they send flowers such as to their wife in Valentine's Day.
Do you love flowers?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: Cevabınız doğal ancak tekrar eden ifadelerden kaçınmalısınız ve cümlenizi daha akıcı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümle sayısını 5'ten fazla yapmaktan kaçının.
Ví dụ: Yes, I love flowers, especially those with a pleasant fragrance. I enjoy receiving them as gifts and also growing them myself, as both bring me joy.
Do you know anyone who loves flowers?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Cümlenizde gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeleri var. Daha akıcı ve doğal bir cevap için bu kelimeleri azaltmalı ve cümle yapısını basitleştirmelisiniz.
Ví dụ: Yes, my mother loves flowers, particularly white roses. Therefore, I often buy her white roses as gifts on special occasions.
Are there a lot of flowers where you live?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Cevabınızda kendinizi sınırlamak yerine, bildiklerinizi kullanarak daha spesifik örnekler vermeye çalışın. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi bağlaçlarla daha akıcı hale getirin.
Ví dụ: Yes, there are many flowers where I live due to the unique climate. Although I don't know their English names, I often see colorful and diverse flowers in my hometown.
Do you take photos of flowers in your daily life?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: Cümlelerinizde tekrarlar var ve bağlaç kullanımı geliştirilebilir. Daha doğal ve akıcı bir cevap için cümlelerinizi sadeleştirin ve bağlaçlarla bağlayın.
Ví dụ: I usually don't take photos of flowers, but if I come across a unique or rare flower, I would probably take a picture of it because I find it interesting.
Do people in your country often send flowers to others?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Cümlenizde gereksiz tekrarlar var ve bağlaç kullanımı eksik. Daha akıcı ve doğal bir cevap için cümlelerinizi sadeleştirin ve bağlaçlarla bağlayın.
Ví dụ: In my hometown, people rarely send flowers to others. However, they usually do so on special occasions, like giving flowers to their wives on Valentine's Day.
× Yes I love flowers especially if they smell good.
✓ Yes, I love flowers especially when they smell good.
The phrase 'if they smell good' suggests a conditional situation, but here the meaning is habitual or general, so 'when' is more appropriate to indicate a regular condition.
× I love both when they are as a gift and also I like to I like to grow them as a plant.
✓ I love both receiving them as a gift and also growing them as plants.
The original sentence is awkward and repetitive ('I like to I like to'). The phrase 'when they are as a gift' is incorrect; it should be 'receiving them as a gift'. Also, 'grow them as a plant' is incorrect; it should be 'grow them as plants' because flowers are plural.
× Both are good.
✓ Both are good.
No correction needed here; the sentence is grammatically correct.
× That's why I always buy for my mother when, uh, a special day comes, uh, I buy to my mother as a gift a White Rose.
✓ That's why I always buy my mother a white rose as a gift on special days.
The prepositions 'buy for' and 'buy to' are incorrect here. The correct structure is 'buy someone something'. Also, 'a special day comes' is awkward; 'on special days' is more natural. 'White Rose' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun.
× Are there a lot of flowers where you live?
✓ Are there a lot of flowers where you live?
No correction needed; the sentence is correct.
× Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live, but I don't know the exact names of them in English, That's why I cannot give examples to you.
✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live, but I don't know their exact names in English, so I cannot give you examples.
The phrase 'the exact names of them' is awkward; 'their exact names' is better. Also, 'give examples to you' is better as 'give you examples'. The comma splice should be corrected by using 'so'.
× But since my hometown is a very unique climate, there are a lot of flower types in my hometown.
✓ But since my hometown has a very unique climate, there are many types of flowers in my hometown.
The phrase 'my hometown is a very unique climate' is incorrect because a hometown is a place, not a climate. It should be 'my hometown has a very unique climate'. Also, 'a lot of flower types' is better as 'many types of flowers'.
× I generally don't take photos of flowers, but if I see a different kind of flowers which I didn't see before, most probably I would take picture of it.
✓ I generally don't take photos of flowers, but if I see a different kind of flower which I haven't seen before, I will most probably take a picture of it.
'A different kind of flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'a different kind of flower' because 'kind' is singular. 'Didn't see' should be present perfect 'haven't seen' to indicate experience. 'Would take picture' should be 'will take a picture' for future intention and article 'a' is needed before 'picture'.
× But I don't like to take pictures of random flowers, it should be different from the others.
✓ But I don't like to take pictures of random flowers; they should be different from the others.
The original sentence is a comma splice connecting two independent clauses with a comma. It should be separated by a semicolon or made into two sentences. Also, 'it' should be 'they' to refer to 'flowers'.
× As far as I know, in my hometown people they rarely send flowers to others.
✓ As far as I know, in my hometown people rarely send flowers to others.
The pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'people'. Removing 'they' corrects the sentence.
× If they are only in a special situation, they send flowers such as to their wife in Valentine's Day.
✓ If they are in a special situation, they send flowers, such as to their wife on Valentine's Day.
The phrase 'are only in a special situation' is awkward; 'are in a special situation' is better. Also, 'in Valentine's Day' should be 'on Valentine's Day' because we use 'on' with days and dates.