Hometown— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Correct pronunciation and reduce hesitations; use a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details (max 3–4 short sentences). Also fix factual/word choice errors (e.g., “home town” not “home toy”, Suzhou is in eastern China). Use linking words briefly.

Ví dụ: My hometown is Suzhou, a small city in eastern China. It is known for its pleasant climate and convenient transport. It combines traditional markets with modern shopping centers, which makes it a comfortable and vibrant place to live.

Gợi ý: Be more precise and consistent with verb tenses and singular/plural forms; avoid overlong sentences and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add two specific details linked logically (e.g., “for example” / “in particular”).

Ví dụ: I love the natural scenery around my hometown, such as winding rivers, small forests and a large lake. For example, the tranquil environment helps me relax, and in particular the golden sunsets by the river are perfect for photography.

Gợi ý: Use present perfect for ongoing periods where appropriate and keep answers concise; combine related facts into one coherent short paragraph with linking words (e.g., “since”) to show timeline clearly.

Ví dụ: I have lived in my hometown for more than 15 years; I was born and raised there. After finishing school I moved to another city for college and then worked there, but now I live in Nanjing with my family.

Gợi ý: Avoid minor grammar errors and incomplete sentences; use linking words for reasons (e.g., “because”, “in addition”) and correct verb forms and articles. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and finish thoughts fully.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think it is a great place for young people because the economy is growing and there are many entry-level job opportunities. In addition, there are several affordable cafés and co-working spaces, which make everyday life convenient for young professionals.

× My home toy is a small city called Suzhou in northeastern China.

✓ My hometown is a small city called Suzhou in northeastern China.

The word 'toy' is a wrong word choice here; 'hometown' is the correct noun. This is a vocabulary/word choice error manifesting as an incorrect adjective/noun use. Replace 'toy' with 'hometown' to correctly refer to the place where the speaker is from.

× It is famous for its pleasant climate and convenient transport, and a mix of traditional markets with modern ones, which made it makes it uh, uh, comfortable and vibrant.

✓ It is famous for its pleasant climate and convenient transport, and for its mix of traditional and modern markets, which make it comfortable and vibrant.

There are multiple issues: redundant verbs ('made it makes it') and incorrect parallel structure. The relative clause refers to 'mix', a singular noun, but the verb should agree with the whole noun phrase (the mix ... make it) because 'mix of traditional and modern markets' is treated as plural in meaning; using 'make' is natural. Also add 'for its' to parallel the earlier 'for its pleasant climate'. Remove fillers 'uh' and redundant words.

× I love the national scenery around my hometown, winding rivers, light forests and a Big Lake.

✓ I love the natural scenery around my hometown: winding rivers, light forests, and a big lake.

'National scenery' is incorrect word choice; 'natural scenery' fits context. Also 'Big Lake' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper name; use lowercase 'big lake'. Use a colon or dash to introduce the list and add commas for clarity.

× The tranquil environment helped me relax and it's a great place for photography, especially at the golden sunset when the light is beautiful and I can take a wonderful pictures by the river.

✓ The tranquil environment helps me relax, and it's a great place for photography, especially at golden sunset when the light is beautiful and I can take wonderful pictures by the river.

Tense inconsistency: the speaker discusses a general truth so present tense 'helps' is preferable. Also 'a wonderful pictures' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' or make singular. 'Golden sunset' does not need 'the' if speaking generally; both are acceptable but present tense and plural agreement must be fixed.

× I lived in my hometown for more than 15 years.

✓ I lived in my hometown for more than 15 years.

This sentence is acceptable in past tense since the speaker refers to a completed period; no correction needed. It is included to show it matches the Past tense type but requires no change.

× I was born and raised there.

✓ I was born and raised there.

This is correct past passive usage; no change needed. It fits past context of life events.

× After finishing school, I moved to another city for college and stayed there to work, and now I'm living in Nanjing here with my family.

✓ After finishing school, I moved to another city for college and stayed there to work, and now I'm living in Nanjing with my family.

Remove redundant 'here' which is unnecessary and informal in this short answer. The tense sequence is correct: past actions followed by present continuous 'I'm living' to describe current situation.

× The town has a growing economy and a wide range of job opportunities so recent graduates can find good entry level positions into start their careers.

✓ The town has a growing economy and a wide range of job opportunities, so recent graduates can find good entry-level positions to start their careers.

Grammar issues: 'entry level' should be hyphenated as 'entry-level' when used as a compound adjective. The phrase 'into start their careers' is incorrect; use 'to start their careers'. Add a comma before 'so' and ensure word order and preposition use are correct.

× In addition there are several affordable cafes and Co working spaces which makes life easy and.

✓ In addition, there are several affordable cafes and co-working spaces, which make life easier.

Punctuation: add comma after 'In addition'. 'Co working' should be hyphenated 'co-working'. Subject-verb agreement: 'spaces' is plural so the relative clause should use 'make' not 'makes'. The sentence ended abruptly; finish with 'life easier' for correct adjective use. Also add comma before the relative clause.