Hometown— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer provides useful information but could be more concise and clearer. Avoid redundancy and minor inaccuracies (e.g., 'Nosaki' instead of 'Nagasaki'). Also, try to use linking words to improve coherence.

Ví dụ: My hometown is Nagasaki Prefecture, located in the southwestern part of Japan. It is famous for its long coastline, which is the second largest in the country, making it an attractive place for fish lovers.

Gợi ý: Your answer is good and includes specific details. To improve, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and vary your vocabulary slightly for a more natural flow.

Ví dụ: I love Nagasaki because it is surrounded by beautiful nature, including green mountains and the ocean. Moreover, I can easily visit these areas, as it only takes about 20 minutes from the city centre to reach the nearest sea.

Gợi ý: Your answer is detailed and personal, which is excellent. To enhance coherence, use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid minor grammatical errors (e.g., 'my high school' instead of 'my high school').

Ví dụ: I have lived in Nagasaki for 18 years. However, after graduating from high school, I had to move to Tokyo to attend university. This decision was very important and memorable because I had to say goodbye to my family and best friends, a moment I will never forget.

Gợi ý: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to improve the flow.

Ví dụ: No, I don't think my hometown is attractive for young people because there are few job opportunities. For example, many big companies closed their headquarters and factories when I was a child, making it difficult for young people to earn a good income.

× My hometown is Nagasaki Prefecture, located in southwestern area of Japan and I think Nosaki is a quite attractive place especially for fish lovers because it is the second or largest coastline in Japan and there are many fish.

✓ My hometown is Nagasaki Prefecture, located in the southwestern area of Japan, and I think Nagasaki is quite an attractive place especially for fish lovers because it has the second largest coastline in Japan and there are many fish.

The phrase 'located in southwestern area of Japan' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'southwestern area'. Also, 'Nosaki' seems to be a typo for 'Nagasaki'. The phrase 'second or largest coastline' is incorrect; it should be 'second largest coastline' without 'or'. Additionally, 'it is the second or largest coastline' is incorrect because 'coastline' is a noun and cannot be 'second largest' in that way; the correct expression is 'it has the second largest coastline'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I love Nagasaki very much because there are plenty of nature, such as Green Mountains and beautiful ocean.

✓ I love Nagasaki very much because there is plenty of nature, such as green mountains and a beautiful ocean.

'Nature' is an uncountable noun and should be used with singular verb 'is' rather than 'are'. Also, 'Green Mountains' should be in lowercase unless it is a proper noun; if it is a proper noun, it should be 'the Green Mountains'. 'Beautiful ocean' should be preceded by an article 'a' to specify it properly. These changes correct subject-verb agreement and article usage.

× I can easily go to such areas surrounded by animals and fish.

✓ I can easily go to such areas surrounded by animals and fish.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not require correction.

× For example, it takes about 20 minutes from the center of Nagasaki to reach the nearest sea.

✓ For example, it takes about 20 minutes from the center of Nagasaki to reach the nearest sea.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not require correction.

× I have lived in Nagasaki for just 18 years and after graduating from my high school, I had to go to Tokyo to enter university.

✓ I have lived in Nagasaki for just 18 years, and after graduating from high school, I had to go to Tokyo to enter university.

The phrase 'my high school' is better expressed as 'high school' in this context. The sentence is otherwise correct in tense usage. The comma after 'years' improves sentence clarity.

× That decision was quite essential and memorable because I had to say goodbye to my precious family and my best friends.

✓ That decision was quite important and memorable because I had to say goodbye to my precious family and my best friends.

The word 'essential' is not typically used to describe a decision in this context; 'important' is more appropriate. The past tense usage is correct.

× No, I don't take my hometown is an attractive area, especially for young people because there are few job opportunities.

✓ No, I don't think my hometown is an attractive area, especially for young people, because there are few job opportunities.

The phrase 'I don't take' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I don't think'. Also, a comma is needed before 'because' to separate clauses. These corrections fix the incorrect verb usage and improve sentence clarity.

× When I was a child, many big companies shut down their headquarters and the factories, so it's a quite difficult for young people to earn more money.

✓ When I was a child, many big companies shut down their headquarters and factories, so it's quite difficult for young people to earn more money.

The phrase 'the factories' should be 'factories' without 'the' because it refers to factories in general. 'It's a quite difficult' is incorrect; it should be 'it's quite difficult' without 'a'. These corrections address article misuse and adjective usage.