Hometown— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장에서 'sour'라는 단어는 아마 'south'를 잘못 표현한 것으로 보입니다. 또한, 'park, museum and stadium' 앞에 관사 'a'를 붙여야 하며, 문장 구조를 좀 더 자연스럽게 다듬는 것이 좋습니다. 예를 들어, 주제 문장과 세부 설명을 명확히 구분하고, 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 매끄럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

Ví dụ: My hometown is in the southern part of the city, called Mok Dong. It is a nice residential area with several cultural facilities, such as a park, a museum, and a stadium.

Gợi ý: 'closure'는 'closer'가 맞는 표현이며, 'the air is green'는 자연스럽지 않은 표현입니다. 대신 'the air is fresh'나 'the air is clean'을 사용하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 문장 간 연결어를 적절히 사용하여 논리적 흐름을 강화하는 연습이 필요합니다.

Ví dụ: My hometown is closer to nature than where I live now. Many hikers visit on weekends because of the numerous tree-covered mountains. Above all, I like it most because the air is fresh and it is far from the city's noise.

Gợi ý: 과거부터 현재까지의 기간을 표현할 때는 현재완료 시제를 사용하는 것이 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장을 두 개로 나누어 명확하게 표현하는 것이 좋습니다. 예를 들어, 'I have lived there for more than 10 years since I was born. However, I moved to my current area when I was in middle school.'

Ví dụ: I have lived there for more than 10 years since I was born. However, I moved to my current area when I was in middle school.

Gợi ý: 'good price'는 문맥에 맞지 않는 표현이며, 아마 'good place'를 의미한 것 같습니다. 'passport centers'도 적절하지 않은 표현으로 보이며, 아마 'sports centers'를 말하려는 것 같습니다. 문장 끝부분이 불완전하며, 문법과 어휘 선택에 주의가 필요합니다. 문장을 명확하고 완전하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people. It offers various recreational facilities such as sports centers and cafes, where they can socialize and relax. Additionally, there are several educational institutions and job opportunities nearby, which make it convenient for young people to study and start their careers.

× My hometown is also sour but a different area to where I live now.

✓ My hometown is also close but in a different area from where I live now.

The word 'sour' is incorrectly used here; the intended meaning is likely 'close'. Also, the preposition 'to' should be 'from' when indicating difference in location. Correct adjective and preposition usage improves clarity.

× It was a nice residential area and there were several cultural facilities like park, museum and stadium.

✓ It was a nice residential area and there were several cultural facilities like parks, museums, and stadiums.

When listing countable nouns, plural forms should be used. 'Park', 'museum', and 'stadium' should be pluralized to 'parks', 'museums', and 'stadiums' to correctly indicate multiple facilities.

× My hometown is closure to nature than where I live now.

✓ My hometown is closer to nature than where I live now.

The word 'closure' is a noun meaning 'the act of closing', but the comparative adjective 'closer' is needed here to compare proximity to nature.

× It is a place where hikers often visit on weekends, especially because there are many mountains covered with trees.

✓ It is a place where hikers often visit on weekends, especially because there are many mountains covered with trees.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Above all, the reason I like it the most is that the air is green and it is away from the noise of the city.

✓ Above all, the reason I like it the most is that the air is clean and it is away from the noise of the city.

The adjective 'green' is incorrectly used to describe air quality; 'clean' is the appropriate adjective to describe fresh or unpolluted air.

× I had lived there for more than 10 years since I was born, so when I was in middle school I moved to the area where I live now.

✓ I lived there for more than 10 years since I was born, so when I was in middle school I moved to the area where I live now.

The past perfect tense 'had lived' is unnecessary here because the sequence of events is clear. Simple past 'lived' is appropriate to describe a past action completed before another past action.

× Yes, my hometown is quite a good price for young people.

✓ Yes, my hometown is quite a good place for young people.

The word 'price' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'place' to describe a location suitable for young people.

× It offers a variety of recreational facilities such as passport centers and cafes, where young people can socialize and relax.

✓ It offers a variety of recreational facilities such as parks and cafes, where young people can socialize and relax.

'Passport centers' is likely a mistake; 'parks' fits better as a recreational facility. 'Passport centers' are not recreational facilities.

× Additionally, there are several educational institutions and job opportunities nearby which may get convenient to free others to study and start their.

✓ Additionally, there are several educational institutions and job opportunities nearby which may make it convenient for others to study and start their careers.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'May get convenient to free others to study and start their' is incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects verb usage and sentence structure.