Hometown— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多いです。例えば、「My prefecture and food in trauma」という文は意味が不明瞭です。より自然な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。

Ví dụ: My hometown is Toyama Prefecture, which is located next to the Sea of Japan. The seafood there is very delicious, and I really enjoy it.

Gợi ý: 内容が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。具体的な例を挙げて、文を論理的に繋げるために接続詞を使う練習が必要です。

Ví dụ: I like the food and the beautiful scenery in my hometown. For example, when I was in elementary school, we often climbed mountains together.

Gợi ý: 過去形と現在形の使い分けは良いですが、「I had lived」という過去完了形はこの文脈では不自然です。より自然な時制を使い、文を繋げる表現を増やしましょう。

Ví dụ: I lived in Toyama for about 18 years before moving to Tokyo, where I live now.

Gợi ý: 「sceneries」は不可算名詞なので複数形は不適切です。また、「education to young people」も不自然な表現です。より自然な語彙と文法を使い、理由を明確に述べましょう。

Ví dụ: Yes, it is a good place for young people because it has many beautiful natural places, which provide a great environment for learning and growth.

× My hometown is Toyama prefecture, It is right next to the Japan Sea, so seafood is very delicious.

✓ My hometown is Toyama Prefecture. It is right next to the Sea of Japan, so seafood is very delicious.

'Toyama Prefecture' is a proper noun and should be capitalized. 'Japan Sea' is more commonly referred to as 'Sea of Japan' in English, and the definite article 'the' is used before it. Also, the original sentence is a run-on sentence and should be split into two sentences for clarity.

× My hometown is Toyama prefecture, It is right next to the Japan Sea, so seafood is very delicious.

✓ My hometown is Toyama Prefecture. It is right next to the Sea of Japan, so seafood is very delicious.

The original sentence is a comma splice, joining two independent clauses with a comma. It should be separated into two sentences or joined with a conjunction.

× I like that. My prefecture and food in trauma.

✓ I like that. I like my prefecture and the food in Toyama.

The phrase 'My prefecture and food in trauma' is incomplete and unclear. It should be a complete sentence expressing the liking of the prefecture and its food. Also, 'trauma' is a misspelling of 'Toyama'.

× For example is in term.

✓ For example, in Toyama,

The phrase 'For example is in term' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'For example, in Toyama,' to introduce an example properly.

× We climb tantamount when we were elementary schools.

✓ We climbed Mount Tsurugi when we were in elementary school.

'tantamount' is incorrect; likely the intended word is 'Mount Tsurugi', a mountain in Toyama. Also, 'when we were elementary schools' is incorrect; it should be 'when we were in elementary school'. The verb tense should be past tense 'climbed'.

× We climb tantamount when we were elementary schools.

✓ We climbed Mount Tsurugi when we were in elementary school.

The action happened in the past, so the verb should be in past tense 'climbed'. Also, 'when we were elementary schools' is incorrect; it should be 'when we were in elementary school'.

× I had lived for about 18 years.

✓ I lived there for about 18 years.

The past perfect tense 'had lived' is unnecessary here because there is no reference to another past event before it. Simple past 'lived' is appropriate.

× I moved to Tokyo, so I live in Tokyo now.

✓ I moved to Tokyo, so I live in Tokyo now.

This sentence is correct in tense and structure; no correction needed.

× Yes, it is because there are many beautiful sceneries and natural locations, so it is very good for education to young people.

✓ Yes, it is because there are many beautiful scenic spots and natural locations, so it is very good for the education of young people.

'Sceneries' is not commonly used in plural; 'scenic spots' or 'scenery' is better. Also, 'education to young people' should be 'education of young people' to use the correct preposition and article.