Hometown— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some confusing phrases like 'to Twitter' and 'Mile per mile per'. Try to be more precise and avoid unnecessary or unclear information. Also, keep your answer concise and directly answer the question with clear details about your hometown's location and features.

Ví dụ: I come from Meghwal, a small village located near a well-known city. It is situated along the National Highway and offers several amenities such as schools, a library, and medical facilities.

Gợi ý: Your answer covers important points but can be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by correcting grammar errors. Also, try to be more specific and avoid repetition. For example, instead of repeating 'is', use correct sentence structures and add linking words like 'because' or 'and'.

Ví dụ: I like my hometown because it has excellent medical facilities that help people recover from illnesses. Moreover, there is a well-established school and college that support students in building their careers and achieving success.

Gợi ý: Your answer provides good content but has grammatical mistakes and some unclear phrases like 'or in my religion already corporative'. Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Ví dụ: I have lived in my hometown for about 22 years, and I enjoy it because of the peaceful and calm environment. Additionally, the neighbours and community members are very cooperative and treat me like their own family member, which makes my experience very positive.

Gợi ý: Your answer has good ideas but contains some unclear words like 'animus' and grammatical errors. Try to use simpler and clearer vocabulary, correct grammar, and linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, be specific about opportunities for young people.

Ví dụ: Yes, my hometown is a great place for young people because it has a calm and peaceful environment. There is no hostility or misunderstandings, so individuals can enjoy their lives freely. Moreover, girls have full opportunities to pursue their ambitions, as the community supports independence for everyone.

× Meghwal, which is to Twitter near a famous city.

✓ Meghwal, which is near a famous city called Twitter.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition to indicate proximity is 'near'. Also, the sentence structure is unclear; adding 'called' clarifies the city name.

× there are various amenities, school, library, medical facilities and many more.

✓ there are various amenities, such as schools, libraries, medical facilities and many more.

The nouns 'school' and 'library' should be plural to match 'various amenities'. Also, adding 'such as' improves clarity.

× First of all the medical facility is in my hometown is very good.

✓ First of all, the medical facilities in my hometown are very good.

The original sentence has redundant and misplaced words causing confusion. Correcting the structure and making 'facility' plural aligns with 'very good' and the context.

× and also a one well established school and college is for the students to build their career and get them success in their life.

✓ and also there is a well-established school and college for students to build their careers and achieve success in their lives.

The phrase 'a one' is incorrect; 'a' or 'one' should be used, not both. Also, 'get them success' is incorrect; 'achieve success' is appropriate. Plural forms 'careers' and 'lives' fit better here.

× I am here from at least 22 years and I really enjoy to live in my hometown because of the peaceful and calm environment.

✓ I have been here for at least 22 years and I really enjoy living in my hometown because of the peaceful and calm environment.

The phrase 'I am here from' is incorrect; present perfect tense 'have been here for' is appropriate for duration. Also, 'enjoy to live' should be 'enjoy living'.

× Also the neighbors and community members or in my religion already corporative and they treat me as their own child.

✓ Also, the neighbors and community members in my religion are very cooperative and they treat me as their own child.

The word 'or' is incorrect here; it should be 'are'. 'Corporative' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'cooperative'.

× Yes, my hometown is a very good place for young individuals because it's it has a very good and calm environment and there was no animus and misconceptions related to anything.

✓ Yes, my hometown is a very good place for young individuals because it has a very good and calm environment and there is no animosity or misconceptions related to anything.

The phrase 'it's it has' is redundant; 'it has' suffices. 'Animus' is incorrect in this context; 'animosity' is the correct word. Also, 'there was' should be 'there is' to maintain present tense.

× So individual can freely enjoy their life and girls have full opportunity that what they want to be We're so my community gives independent to each other.

✓ So individuals can freely enjoy their lives and girls have full opportunities to become what they want to be. Also, my community gives independence to each other.

'Individual' should be plural 'individuals' to match 'their'. 'Life' should be plural 'lives'. 'Full opportunity that what they want to be' is incorrect; 'full opportunities to become what they want to be' is correct. 'We're' is incorrect here and should be removed. 'Gives independent' is incorrect; it should be 'gives independence'.