Work— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence (I work as...), then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words sparingly and correct minor grammar (use “backend” as one word and avoid repeating time spans).

Ví dụ: I work as a software developer at a local company, specializing in data engineering and backend development. I've been in this role for six years, and I enjoy it because it lets me learn practical techniques like ETL pipeline design and scalable database architecture.

Gợi ý: Avoid tense and phrasing errors and remove repetition. Give a direct topic sentence about the workplace, then one specific detail about the company and one about your role. Use linking words like “and” or “so” to connect ideas simply.

Ví dụ: I work for a small family-run company in the city centre that I've been with for six years. My role focuses on backend development and data engineering, so I regularly work on building APIs and processing large datasets.

Gợi ý: Correct small grammar issues and tighten phrasing. Keep the answer natural by stating a clear opinion then providing two concise, concrete reasons linked with “because” or “and.”

Ví dụ: Yes, it's a good place to work. Firstly, it's in the city centre so my commute by subway is very convenient. Secondly, the office overlooks the town hall and water, which makes the working environment pleasant.

Gợi ý: Strong answer—just reduce informal phrasing like “you'll” and keep it about yourself. State your opinion, then give two specific benefits with brief examples to support each point.

Ví dụ: Yes, I really like working there. The company is very international, with colleagues from many countries, so I enjoy diverse perspectives. Also, its flat structure makes it easy to approach senior engineers for feedback and mentorship.

Gợi ý: Fix small repetition and preposition errors. Give a clear short-term goal then a concise long-term goal with a reason. Mention specific skills or areas you want to develop to make the plan more concrete.

Ví dụ: In the short term, I want to progress to a senior developer role by gaining leadership experience on projects. In the long term, I hope to work at a top tech company like Google or Microsoft to learn cutting-edge technologies such as distributed systems and machine learning.

× I'm working as a software developer at a local company and while my focus is on data engineering and back end development, I've been in this role for six years now and I really enjoy what I'm doing because I can learn a wide range of techniques in the industry.

✓ I work as a software developer at a local company, and while my focus is on data engineering and back-end development, I have been in this role for six years and I really enjoy it because I can learn a wide range of techniques in the industry.

The sentence mixes continuous and perfect continuous aspects awkwardly for a job situation that is a general, ongoing fact. Use simple present 'I work' to state current occupation and present perfect 'I have been in this role for six years' to indicate duration. Also use 'enjoy it' instead of 'enjoy what I'm doing' for conciseness and 'back-end' as a compound adjective.

× I will be in this role for six years now.

✓ I have been in this role for six years now.

The original uses future tense 'will be' incorrectly when referring to a past-to-present duration. Use present perfect 'have been' to show an action that started in the past and continues to the present.

× Yes, is a good place to work.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work.

The sentence is missing the subject pronoun 'it'. Adding 'it' fixes the article error and completes the clause structure. This is primarily a sentence structure/subject omission leading to article misuse.

× Firstly, the company is in the city center, so my commute is very convenient by subway.

✓ Firstly, the company is in the city center, so my commute is very convenient by subway.

No grammatical change required; sentence is acceptable. (Included to indicate checked against preposition list.)

× Secondly, the view is fantastic because the company overlooks the town hall across the water, which makes the working environment pleasant and enjoyable.

✓ Secondly, the view is fantastic because the company overlooks the town hall across the water, which makes the working environment pleasant and enjoyable.

No grammatical change required; prepositions are used correctly. (Checked and left unchanged.)

× Firstly, the company is very international with employees coming from many countries so you'll feel comfortable even if you are a foreigner.

✓ Firstly, the company is very international, with employees coming from many countries, so you will feel comfortable even if you are a foreigner.

Change 'you'll' to 'you will' is stylistic; original contraction is acceptable in speech. Main issue is comma usage; pronouns are correct. Kept meaning and corrected punctuation for clarity. (Marked as pronoun check.)

× Secondly, the company has a flat structure so you can talk to anyone you need to and can really get the help you need.

✓ Secondly, the company has a flat structure, so you can talk to anyone you need to and really get the help you need.

Added a comma for clause separation and removed the extra auxiliary 'can' in the second clause for concision; pronoun usage is correct.

× I want to develop further in my current field and become a senior developer.

✓ I want to develop further in my current field and become a senior developer.

Sentence is grammatically correct in present tense expressing future intention; no change necessary.

× My my long term plan is to work in in one of the top tech companies like Google or Microsoft so I can learn the cutting edge technologies in the industry.

✓ My long-term plan is to work at one of the top tech companies, like Google or Microsoft, so I can learn cutting-edge technologies in the industry.

Removed duplicate words 'My my' and 'in in'. Use 'at' for working for a company and hyphenate 'long-term' and 'cutting-edge' when used as adjectives. Added commas for clarity. These are preposition and hyphenation corrections aligned with list item 11 and 22.