Work— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Сократите повторения, говорите более связно и прямо: начните с простого предложения, затем добавьте одно-два пояснения. Избегайте лишних вводных слов и исправьте базовые грамматические ошибки (например, «at recent time» → «recently», «most time» → «most of the time»). Также используйте связующие слова экономно (e.g., "but", "because") и только когда они нужны.

Ví dụ: I am currently a student, although I sometimes help my family with their work. I do that to earn a little extra money, but most of the time I focus on my studies because my education is more important right now.

Gợi ý: Говорите четко и логично: опишите место работы одним предложением, затем добавьте конкретные детали. Уберите неуместные или бессмысленные фразы (например, "Nothing cabbage"). Используйте правильные предлоги и согласование (например, "on the farm", "it has").

Ví dụ: When I work with my family, I work on our large farm near my town. The farm is quite well-known and has many animals, such as cows, horses and dogs, and I enjoy feeding them and helping with daily chores.

Gợi ý: Дайте прямой ответ (yes/no) в первой фразе, затем объясните причину и приведите пример. Следите за грамматикой и порядком слов; избегайте смешения противоположных идей без ясной структуры. Уточните, что вы имеете в виду под "convenience" и количество работников сформулируйте грамматически правильно.

Ví dụ: Yes, it is a good place to work because the farm provides comfortable facilities and a friendly environment. For example, about ten people work there and they seem satisfied with their jobs and the working conditions.

Gợi ý: Начните с ясного ответа на вопрос и затем объясните причину, используя одно-два дополнительных предложения. Не используйте противоречивые утверждения без переходов: если вы колеблетесь, скажите "sometimes yes, sometimes no" и поясните почему. Избегайте самоуничижительных фраз (например, "I'm a little lazy") — лучше сказать честно и нейтрально.

Ví dụ: I'm not sure — sometimes I wouldn't choose it because I prefer studying and find farm work tiring. However, I do enjoy working there occasionally because it lets me spend time with my family and helps me relax.

Gợi ý: Дайте чёткое утверждение о планах и поясните конкретно, почему вы так решили, используя связующие слова для логики. Избегайте неясных фраз и ошибок в лексике ("harming" → "farming"). Укажите шаги или цели кратко (например, "I plan to study agriculture" или "I want to start a family business").

Ví dụ: In the future I want to build one of the largest farms in my city because I enjoy farming and agribusiness. To achieve this, I plan to study agriculture and gain experience working on different farms before starting my own business.

× At recent time I I am a student at school and but sometimes I work with my family members because of it's really good to earn money easily.

✓ Recently I am a student at school, but sometimes I work with my family members because it is a good way to earn some money.

The original sentence has redundant words ('I I', 'and but'), incorrect phrasing ('At recent time', 'because of it's really good to earn money easily') and poor sentence flow. Use 'Recently' or 'At present' for current time. Combine clauses with 'but' (not 'and but') and use 'because it is a good way to earn some money' for clear cause. Keep tense consistent (present simple for habitual actions).

× But my I but they say but most time I focus my career to study because of it's more important than work at the recent time because of now I am teenager and so good.

✓ But most of the time I focus on my studies because they are more important than work at the moment since I am a teenager.

The original contains many redundant conjunctions ('but' repeated), incorrect pronoun use ('my I but they say'), and awkward phrases ('focus my career to study', 'because of it's more important'). Use 'most of the time' and 'focus on my studies'; 'they are more important' agrees with plural 'studies'. 'At the moment' or 'now' is preferable to 'at the recent time'.

× Nothing cabbage and when I work with my family members, I always work in the farm because of we have a really big farm in my town and this is so famous and also the in this farm has so many different pets such as cows, horses and dogs.

✓ I don't have another job; when I work with my family, I always work on the farm because we have a very large and famous farm in my town. The farm has many animals such as cows, horses, and dogs.

'Nothing cabbage' is meaningless and should be replaced with a clear negation. Use 'work on the farm' (not 'in the farm') and avoid repeated phrases. 'This is so famous' -> 'very famous'. 'Pets' is incorrect for farm animals; use 'animals'. Split into two sentences for clarity and proper sentence structure.

× I really enjoy feeding and working here there.

✓ I really enjoy feeding the animals and working there.

The repetition 'here there' is incorrect. Use 'there' to refer to the farm and specify the object 'feeding the animals'. Prepositions: 'working there' is correct; 'feeding' should take an object.

× Business, but the yes, this is not really good for work because of this is really in these places has many convenience for workers.

✓ No, it is not a very good place to work because there are not many conveniences for workers.

Original sentence is disfluent ('Business, but the yes'). Use a clear negation 'No' and a proper clause 'it is not a very good place to work'. Correct 'this is really in these places has many convenience' to 'there are not many conveniences' and use plural 'conveniences'.

× Thereby now we work in this farm works approximately 10 workers and they are really satisfied working here there.

✓ Currently about ten people work on the farm, and they are generally satisfied working there.

'Thereby' is incorrectly used; use 'currently' or 'now'. Remove redundant 'work' and use 'about ten people' instead of 'works approximately 10 workers'. Use 'on the farm' and 'working there'. Adjust pronoun agreement and word order.

× Honestly, no, I'm not sure because of I don't like working because I'm a little lazy person, but sometimes I really enjoy working with my family members.

✓ Honestly, no; I'm not sure because I don't really like working since I'm a bit lazy, but sometimes I enjoy working with my family members.

Avoid 'because of' before clauses; use 'because' or 'since'. 'I'm a little lazy person' -> 'I'm a bit lazy' is more natural. Simplify sentence structure and punctuation for clarity.

× It's really good not just working but also hanging out with my relatives.

✓ It's nice because I can not only work but also spend time with my relatives.

Original structure 'not just working but also hanging out' is informal; use 'not only... but also...' and 'spend time with relatives' is clearer. Maintain parallel structure after 'not only' and 'but also'.

× Thereby, sometimes I really enjoy and like working here. If I have a chance, I always try to work in there.

✓ Sometimes I really enjoy working there. If I have the chance, I always try to work there.

'Thereby' is misused; remove it. Use 'work there' not 'work in there'. 'Have a chance' -> 'have the chance' or 'get the chance' is more natural.

× Now I make a lot of plans for future if it's about work, I wanna more.

✓ I am making a lot of plans for the future regarding work; I want to do more.

Use 'I am making' or 'I have made' for planned future actions. 'for future' -> 'for the future'. Avoid informal 'wanna'; use 'want to'. Restructure for clarity.

× I wanna create or build one of the biggest farm in my city.

✓ I want to create or build one of the biggest farms in my city.

Use plural 'farms' after 'one of the biggest'. Also avoid 'wanna' and prefer 'want to'. 'Create or build' is OK but choose one for conciseness.

× Because of the I really enjoy working and business of harming the revises my future job.

✓ Because I really enjoy farm work and the business, I hope to make farming my future job.

Original has many errors: 'Because of the I', 'business of harming the revises' are meaningless. Use 'Because I really enjoy farm work and the business, I hope to make farming my future job.' This corrects word choice ('farming') and clarifies intent.