Work— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答时语法错误较多，表达不够自然，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，并且注意冠词和名词单复数的正确使用。

Ví dụ: I am a student studying for an associate degree in finance at Hong Kong Community College.

Gợi ý: 回答内容不清晰，词汇使用错误较多，建议使用简单明了的句子表达工作地点和职位，避免拼写错误。

Ví dụ: I have two part-time jobs. One is at Crystal and the other is at Toyota.

Gợi ý: 表达不够连贯，词汇和语法错误较多，建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并注意词汇的准确使用。

Ví dụ: Yes, I think it's a good place to work because both workplaces are close to my home. I usually walk there, which is good for my health.

Gợi ý: 句子结构混乱，表达不清晰，建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和语法，明确表达自己的感受和原因。

Ví dụ: I don't like working in Tin Moon because the streets are usually empty at night. It feels unsafe since there are no people around.

Gợi ý: 表达不够准确，语法错误较多，建议使用简单句表达未来计划，并注意主谓一致和时态。

Ví dụ: My future plan is to become a social worker because it is my dream job. I am currently applying for social work degree programs to achieve this goal.

× I am a student which is association degree program and my major is finance and also I study in HTCC we called Hong Kong Community College.

✓ I am a student in an associate degree program, and my major is finance. I also study at HTCC, which is called Hong Kong Community College.

原句句子结构混乱，缺少必要的连接词和冠词。应使用定冠词和不定冠词，并分句表达，使句子更通顺。

× I have two-part time jaws which is Crystal and Toyota, therefore I have worked in to the toothpaste once it's in tumult and other is in Yunnan.

✓ I have two part-time jobs, one at Crystal and the other at Toyota. I have worked at the toothpaste factory in Tin Moon, and the other is in Yunnan.

原句中“jaws”应为“jobs”，且表达不清晰。应使用复数形式jobs，且分句表达两个工作地点。

× I have worked in to the toothpaste once it's in tumult and other is in Yunnan.

✓ I have worked at the toothpaste factory in Tin Moon, and the other is in Yunnan.

介词使用错误，“worked in to”应为“worked at”，并且地名拼写错误，应为“Tin Moon”。

× For me it's a good place to work because and those two rugby is very close to me, therefore it's convenient to me to go to there and I always go there on walk and it's a healthy travelling way for me to improve my healthy.

✓ For me, it's a good place to work because those two workplaces are very close to me. Therefore, it's convenient for me to go there. I always walk there, and it's a healthy way for me to improve my health.

原句中“those two rugby”应为“those two workplaces”，且“go to there”应为“go there”，“improve my healthy”应为“improve my health”。代词和词汇使用错误。

× I don't like the place where I was explicitly in Tin Moon because aren't there always did not have any people on the street in the night.

✓ I don't like the place where I was, especially in Tin Moon, because there are almost never any people on the street at night.

原句中“aren't there always did not have any people”语法错误，否定重复，应改为“there are almost never any people”。

× Therefore if I felt in dangerous in the night, I cannot find someone else.

✓ Therefore, if I feel in danger at night, I cannot find anyone else.

“felt in dangerous”应为“feel in danger”，“someone else”应为“anyone else”，代词和词汇使用错误。

× I think social worker is my future work plans because this is my dream job.

✓ I think being a social worker is my future career plan because it is my dream job.

“social worker is my future work plans”主谓不一致，应改为“being a social worker is my future career plan”。

× Therefore now they are trying to apply some of the social worker degree programs to make me to achieve this dream.

✓ Therefore, now I am trying to apply for some social work degree programs to achieve this dream.

原句中“they are trying to apply”主语错误，应为“I am trying to apply”，“make me to achieve”表达不当，应为“to achieve”。