Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you work or are you a student?
Thí sinh
I actually work. I graduated about two miles ago. I really miss my school time because when I was in my college time, I really have so many spare time to do what I really want to enjoy instead of entering into society have to deal a lot of work.
Giám khảo
Where do you work?>
Thí sinh
I walk in the city in China which is located in southern east part of here and is quite natural but a little bit humid. Sometimes it's raining a lot so I have to take the umbrella usually most of my time.
Giám khảo
Is it a good place to work?
Thí sinh
Definitely, because it's one of the famous touring cities in China, attracting many people from all over the globe. The scenery there is quite beautiful and you can enjoy the fresh air and you can enjoy the seaside and you can even play the volleyball on the beach, enjoy the sunshine during the summer time.
Giám khảo
Would you like the place where you work?
Thí sinh
It really depends on different situations. Sometimes if I feel happy, definitely I can hang out with my friends in the place where I work. If I feel blue, I just want to stay at home. I I even don't feel any advantages of the city where I work at all. I just miss my hometown.
Giám khảo
What are your future work plans?
Thí sinh
I plan to work in a more modern city, for example, like Shanghai, because that would be more opportunities living there and people there will feel convenience in traffics, for example. If they want to shorten their schedule to come back to company, they can.
Do you work or are you a student?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题,例如“graduated about two miles ago”应为“graduated about two years ago”。建议注意时态和词汇的准确使用,避免语义混淆,同时回答应更简洁,避免冗余。
Ví dụ: I am currently working. I graduated about two years ago, and I sometimes miss my college days because I had more free time to enjoy myself compared to now when I have to focus on work.
Where do you work?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 回答中有明显的词汇错误,如“walk”应为“work”,地理位置表达不准确且句子结构混乱。建议加强词汇准确性和句子连贯性,使用恰当的连接词使表达更自然。
Ví dụ: I work in a city in the southeast of China. It is quite natural and a bit humid. It often rains, so I usually carry an umbrella with me.
Is it a good place to work?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答内容丰富,但句子重复“you can enjoy”显得冗余。建议使用多样的表达方式和连接词,使回答更流畅自然。
Ví dụ: Definitely, it is a famous tourist city in China that attracts people worldwide. The scenery is beautiful, with fresh air and a lovely seaside where you can play volleyball and enjoy the sunshine during summer.
Would you like the place where you work?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答表达了情感,但结构稍显混乱,且有重复词汇。建议使用更清晰的结构和连接词,表达观点时更具体。
Ví dụ: It depends on my mood. When I feel happy, I enjoy hanging out with friends in the city where I work. However, when I feel down, I prefer staying at home and sometimes I miss my hometown because I don't see many advantages in this city.
What are your future work plans?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答表达了未来计划,但语法和表达不够准确,如“convenience in traffics”应为“convenience in transportation”。建议注意词汇搭配和句子结构,使表达更自然。
Ví dụ: I plan to work in a more modern city like Shanghai because there are more opportunities. Also, transportation is convenient there, which helps people save time commuting to work.
× I graduated about two miles ago.
✓ I graduated about two years ago.
这里使用了“miles”(英里)来表示时间,这是错误的。应使用“years”(年)来表示时间的长度。
× I really have so many spare time to do what I really want to enjoy instead of entering into society have to deal a lot of work.
✓ I really have so much spare time to do what I really want to enjoy instead of entering society and having to deal with a lot of work.
“spare time”是不可数名词,前面应使用“much”而非“many”。另外,句子结构混乱,需调整动词形式和连接词。
× I walk in the city in China which is located in southern east part of here and is quite natural but a little bit humid.
✓ I work in a city in China which is located in the southeast part and is quite natural but a little bit humid.
“walk”应为“work”,表示工作。方向表达应为“southeast”,且“part of here”不合适,应简化为“part”。
× Sometimes it's raining a lot so I have to take the umbrella usually most of my time.
✓ Sometimes it rains a lot so I usually have to take an umbrella most of the time.
“raining”应改为一般现在时“rains”,表示习惯性动作。冠词“the umbrella”应为“不定冠词an umbrella”。“usually”位置调整更自然。
× If they want to shorten their schedule to come back to company, they can.
✓ If they want to shorten their commute to come back to the company, they can.
“schedule”用词不当,应为“commute”(通勤)。“company”前应加定冠词“the”。