Work— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is informative but a bit lengthy and has some grammatical errors. Try to keep your answer concise and use correct verb tenses. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating information unnecessarily.

Ví dụ: I am currently an international student pursuing a postgraduate diploma in Global Business Management. Alongside my studies, I work part-time as a cashier at an Indian restaurant, where I handle orders, manage the cash register, and resolve customer complaints.

Gợi ý: Your answer repeats information and has some grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'over there'.

Ví dụ: I work as a cashier at Radhani Sweets and Restaurant, a well-known Indian restaurant here in Canada. I chose this job to earn extra money to help pay for my rent and groceries as an international student.

Gợi ý: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organise your ideas logically using linking words and avoid vague phrases. Also, check grammar and sentence structure for better clarity.

Ví dụ: Personally, I find the workplace good, but the managers and supervisors are not very cooperative, which makes it difficult to ask questions. However, interacting with different customers is enjoyable, and I have had many positive communication experiences there.

Gợi ý: Your answer is incomplete and somewhat disorganised. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid short, choppy sentences by combining related ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like the place where I work. The restaurant is well-maintained with beautiful interiors, including a separate dining area entrance. My colleagues are very cooperative, and despite the restaurant being busy, we always help each other to manage the workload effectively.

Gợi ý: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'after having my Pi'. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct grammar. Also, organise your answer logically with linking words.

Ví dụ: I am a professional accountant with a bachelor's degree in accounting. In the future, I plan to pursue the CPA qualification. However, I intend to start this after completing my postgraduate diploma because I currently lack sufficient financial resources.

× Currently I'm an international student pursuing my post graduation diploma in Global Business Management.

✓ Currently I'm an international student pursuing my postgraduate diploma in Global Business Management.

The term 'post graduation diploma' is incorrect; the correct term is 'postgraduate diploma'. This is a vocabulary usage issue related to adjective form, which affects the present tense description.

× But along with my study I'm working as a part time at an Indian restaurant.

✓ But along with my studies I'm working part-time at an Indian restaurant.

The word 'study' should be plural 'studies' because it refers to the general activity of learning. Also, 'part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time' when used as an adjective or adverb.

× I worked as a store cashier where my responsibility includes order taking, maintaining cashiers registers and solving complaints.

✓ I work as a store cashier where my responsibilities include order taking, maintaining cash registers, and solving complaints.

The sentence mixes past tense 'worked' with present tense 'includes'. Since the job is current, present tense 'work' and 'include' should be used. Also, 'cashiers registers' should be 'cash registers'.

× As I mentioned earlier, I worked at an Indian restaurant as a store cashier.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I work at an Indian restaurant as a store cashier.

The student is currently working there, so present tense 'work' is appropriate instead of past tense 'worked'.

× The restaurant name is Radhani Sweets and Restaurant.

✓ The restaurant's name is Radhani Sweets and Restaurant.

The phrase 'The restaurant name' is incorrect; it should be 'The restaurant's name' to show possession.

× It is a quite famous restaurant over here in Canada.

✓ It is quite a famous restaurant here in Canada.

The phrase 'a quite famous' is incorrect; the correct order is 'quite a famous'. Also, 'over here' is informal and redundant; 'here' suffices.

× I choose to work over there to earn some extra cash as I am international student.

✓ I choose to work there to earn some extra cash as I am an international student.

The phrase 'I am international student' is missing the article 'an' before 'international student'.

× So by working over there I can have some cash to pay my rent or groceries.

✓ So by working there I can have some cash to pay my rent or buy groceries.

The phrase 'pay my rent or groceries' is incorrect because you pay rent but buy groceries. Also, 'over there' is unnecessary; 'there' is sufficient.

× If you talk about me personally, the place is good to work, but the managers and the supervisors are not cooperative.

✓ If you talk about me personally, the place is good to work, but the managers and supervisors are not cooperative.

The definite article 'the' before 'supervisors' is unnecessary when listing plural nouns generally.

× If we have some doubt, we are always reluctant to ask from them.

✓ If we have some doubts, we are always reluctant to ask them.

The phrase 'ask from them' is incorrect; the correct form is 'ask them'. Also, 'some doubt' should be plural 'some doubts'.

× But the when we get to interact with different peoples and we are able to have the best communication, then communication with them.

✓ But when we get to interact with different people and are able to communicate well with them, we enjoy it a lot.

The sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Peoples' should be 'people'. The phrase 'have the best communication, then communication with them' is incorrect and needs restructuring for clarity.

× We enjoyed there a lot.

✓ We enjoy it there a lot.

Since the context is present habitual action, present tense 'enjoy' is appropriate instead of past tense 'enjoyed'.

× Yes, I do like the place where I work.

✓ Yes, I do like the place where I work.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× It is a very well maintained restaurant.

✓ It is a very well-maintained restaurant.

When used as a compound adjective before a noun, 'well maintained' should be hyphenated as 'well-maintained'.

× The interior is very beautiful.

✓ The interior is very beautiful.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× The dining area has a separate entrance where people sit and order for their food.

✓ The dining area has a separate entrance where people sit and order their food.

The preposition 'for' after 'order' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× Even my colleagues are very cooperative.

✓ Even my colleagues are very cooperative.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× We always prefer to help each other.

✓ We always prefer to help each other.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× It's an Indian restaurant. It keeps very busy.

✓ It's an Indian restaurant. It stays very busy.

The phrase 'keeps very busy' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'stays very busy' or 'is very busy'.

× Even then we are able to have a.

✓ Even then, we are able to manage.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear; it needs completion to convey meaning.

× So by profession I am an accountant.

✓ So by profession, I am an accountant.

A comma after 'profession' improves sentence clarity.

× I have my bachelor degrees in the accountant.

✓ I have my bachelor's degree in accounting.

The phrase 'bachelor degrees' should be singular 'bachelor's degree'. Also, 'in the accountant' is incorrect; it should be 'in accounting'.

× So in future I have decided to go for the CPA.

✓ So in the future, I have decided to go for the CPA.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future'.

× But I am I am planning to pursue that degree after having my Pi because at that time I don't have to have enough funds or financial resources to do so.

✓ But I am planning to pursue that degree after having my PR because at that time I will have enough funds or financial resources to do so.

The phrase 'I don't have to have enough funds' is incorrect; it should be 'I will have enough funds'. Also, 'Pi' likely means 'PR' (Permanent Residency). The tense should be future to match the plan.