Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you work or are you a student?
Thí sinh
Currently I'm a four year student at NEU on source for National Economic University. My major is Human Resources.
Giám khảo
Where do you work?>
Thí sinh
Now I work as a intern at the game company which is a dynamic environment. This experience have allowed me improve myself, my skill and improve my knowledge serve for my future work.
Giám khảo
Is it a good place to work?
Thí sinh
Yes, this company is creative and dynamic environment. Moreover everyone in there very friendly and helped me a lot of not only about work but also in my UMM but also have about daily life issue.
Giám khảo
Would you like the place where you work?
Thí sinh
Yes, definitely. I work in glass tall building, the view of the tall building very very amazing. Moreover, in their uh has quiet atmosphere and I can concentrate uh finish my work.
Giám khảo
What are your future work plans?
Thí sinh
In the future I wish I will become a good manager because it's in my major and I work to do now. I love this measure because I can learn how to manage people and operation of company.
Do you work or are you a student?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt chính xác hơn, ví dụ như nói "I am currently a fourth-year student at the National Economics University, majoring in Human Resources." Ngoài ra, nên thêm một câu bổ sung để làm phong phú câu trả lời.
Ví dụ: I am currently a fourth-year student at the National Economics University, majoring in Human Resources. I have been enjoying my studies and learning a lot about managing people and organizations.
Where do you work?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ cho chính xác hơn, ví dụ "I am currently working as an intern at a game company, which is a dynamic environment." Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và nên dùng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.
Ví dụ: I am currently working as an intern at a game company, which is a dynamic environment. This experience has helped me improve my skills and gain knowledge that will benefit my future career.
Is it a good place to work?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Câu trả lời cần được diễn đạt rõ ràng và chính xác hơn. Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ "Yes, the company has a creative and dynamic environment. Moreover, everyone there is very friendly and has helped me a lot, not only with work but also with daily life issues."
Ví dụ: Yes, the company has a creative and dynamic environment. Moreover, everyone there is very friendly and has helped me a lot, not only with work but also with daily life issues.
Would you like the place where you work?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, "Yes, definitely. I work in a tall glass building, and the view from there is amazing. Moreover, the atmosphere is quiet, so I can concentrate and finish my work."
Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. I work in a tall glass building, and the view from there is amazing. Moreover, the atmosphere is quiet, so I can concentrate and finish my work efficiently.
What are your future work plans?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và chính xác hơn về ngữ pháp và từ vựng. Ví dụ, "In the future, I hope to become a good manager because it relates to my major and current work. I love this field because I can learn how to manage people and company operations."
Ví dụ: In the future, I hope to become a good manager because it relates to my major and current work. I love this field because I can learn how to manage people and company operations effectively.
× Currently I'm a four year student at NEU on source for National Economic University.
✓ Currently I'm a four-year student at NEU, short for National Economic University.
The phrase 'four year student' should be hyphenated as 'four-year student' to correctly form a compound adjective. Also, 'on source for' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'short for' when referring to an abbreviation or nickname of an institution.
× My major is Human Resources.
✓ My major is Human Resources.
No article is needed before 'Human Resources' when referring to a field of study, so this sentence is correct.
× Now I work as a intern at the game company which is a dynamic environment.
✓ Now I work as an intern at a game company which is a dynamic environment.
The article 'a' should be 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'intern'. Also, 'the game company' is too specific without prior context; 'a game company' is more appropriate here.
× This experience have allowed me improve myself, my skill and improve my knowledge serve for my future work.
✓ This experience has allowed me to improve myself, my skills, and my knowledge to serve my future work.
The singular noun 'experience' requires the singular verb 'has' not 'have'. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills' to match the context. Also, 'improve' needs 'to' before it, and 'serve for' should be 'to serve'.
× Yes, this company is creative and dynamic environment.
✓ Yes, this company is a creative and dynamic environment.
The singular countable noun 'environment' requires the article 'a' before it.
× Moreover everyone in there very friendly and helped me a lot of not only about work but also in my UMM but also have about daily life issue.
✓ Moreover, everyone there is very friendly and has helped me a lot, not only with work but also with my university life and daily life issues.
The phrase 'in there' should be 'there'. The verb 'is' is missing after 'everyone'. 'Helped' should be 'has helped' to indicate present perfect. 'A lot of' is incorrect here; it should be 'a lot'. 'Not only about work but also in my UMM but also have about daily life issue' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'not only with work but also with my university life and daily life issues'.
× I work in glass tall building, the view of the tall building very very amazing.
✓ I work in a tall glass building; the view from the tall building is very, very amazing.
The phrase 'glass tall building' should be 'tall glass building' to follow correct adjective order. The article 'a' is needed before 'tall glass building'. The sentence needs a verb 'is' in 'the view ... is very amazing'.
× Moreover, in their uh has quiet atmosphere and I can concentrate uh finish my work.
✓ Moreover, there is a quiet atmosphere and I can concentrate and finish my work.
The word 'their' is incorrect here; it should be 'there'. The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'there'. The conjunction 'and' is needed between 'concentrate' and 'finish'.
× In the future I wish I will become a good manager because it's in my major and I work to do now.
✓ In the future, I wish to become a good manager because it's my major and the work I am doing now.
The phrase 'I wish I will become' is incorrect; 'wish' is followed by the infinitive 'to become' or a past tense verb. 'I work to do now' is incorrect; it should be 'the work I am doing now'.
× I love this measure because I can learn how to manage people and operation of company.
✓ I love this major because I can learn how to manage people and the operations of a company.
The word 'measure' is incorrect; it should be 'major'. 'Operation' should be plural 'operations' and needs the article 'the' before it. 'Of company' should be 'of a company'.