Work— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Apni answer e kichu grammar mistake ache, ar sentence gulo onek boro. Apni chesta korun sentence gulo ke chhoto r shothik vabe banate, jate answer ta natural lage. Apni 'and' er jaygay 'also' ba 'as well as' use korte paren, ar 'however' er jaygay 'but' use korben. Apni 'part timer' er bodole 'part-time worker' bolte paren.

Ví dụ: I am a student at John Book National University in Jeonju, South Korea. I also work part-time at a convenience store called 7-Eleven on weekends.

Gợi ý: Apnar answer e kichu repetition ache, ar kichu word use thik na. Apni 'convenient shop' er bodole 'convenience store' bolben. Sentence gulo ke chhoto r clear korte hobe. Apni linking word 'because' bhalo vabe use korte paren.

Ví dụ: I work at a 24-hour convenience store called 7-Eleven, which is a chain store. I like my job because it is easy and close to my home.

Gợi ý: Apni bhalo vabe opinion diyechen, kintu kichu grammar mistake ache. 'Work environment' er age 'the' use korben. 'Which is I found more beneficial' er jaygay 'which I find very beneficial' bolben. Apni linking word 'because' bhalo vabe use korechen.

Ví dụ: Yes, I believe it is a good place to work because the work environment and facilities are excellent. Also, I can study during my free time at work, which I find very beneficial.

Gợi ý: Apnar answer e kichu grammar r sentence structure problem ache. 'Actually depends' er por subject dite hobe, jemon 'it depends'. 'So many tourists came this place' er jaygay 'many tourists come to this place' bolben. Apni linking word 'because' bhalo vabe use korte paren. Apni sentence gulo ke chhoto r clear korte paren.

Ví dụ: It depends. The place is more crowded on weekends because many tourists come here. This area is historically popular for its variety of food and attractions.

Gợi ý: Apnar answer e kichu repetition ache, ar kichu sentence clear na. Apni 'part time job beside my study' er bodole 'part-time job alongside my studies' bolte paren. 'Any official job which is my programming related subject' er jaygay 'a professional job related to programming' bolben. Apni linking word 'after' bhalo vabe use korte paren.

Ví dụ: I am currently doing a part-time job alongside my studies. After graduation, I plan to work in a professional job related to programming, as I am studying Computer Science.

× I'm student and currently studying at John Book National University which is located in Jeonju, South Korea and however in the weekend I work as a part timer in a convenience shop which is called 711 so I'm doing both.

✓ I'm a student and currently studying at John Book National University which is located in Jeonju, South Korea and however on the weekend I work as a part-timer in a convenience shop called 711 so I'm doing both.

The word 'student' is a singular countable noun and requires an article 'a' before it. Also, 'part timer' should be hyphenated as 'part-timer' to correctly form the compound noun. Additionally, 'in the weekend' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on the weekend'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness.

× I'm student and currently studying at John Book National University which is located in Jeonju, South Korea and however in the weekend I work as a part timer in a convenience shop which is called 711 so I'm doing both.

✓ I'm a student and currently studying at John Book National University which is located in Jeonju, South Korea and however on the weekend I work as a part-timer in a convenience shop called 711 so I'm doing both.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'the weekend'. The correct preposition is 'on' when referring to days or parts of days such as 'the weekend'. This correction makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Well, I work in a convenient shop which is actually a chain shop named 711 which is which is 24 hours open shop.

✓ Well, I work in a convenience shop which is actually a chain shop named 711 which is a 24-hour open shop.

The noun 'convenient shop' is incorrect; the correct term is 'convenience shop'. Also, '24 hours open shop' should be '24-hour open shop' because '24-hour' is a compound adjective describing the shop. These corrections fix noun form and adjective usage.

× Well, I work in a convenient shop which is actually a chain shop named 711 which is which is 24 hours open shop.

✓ Well, I work in a convenience shop which is actually a chain shop named 711 which is a 24-hour open shop.

The phrase '24 hours open' is incorrect; the correct form is '24-hour open' because '24-hour' functions as a compound adjective modifying 'shop'. This correction improves adjective usage.

× And actually I, I like my work because it's very easy to very not far away from my home.

✓ And actually, I like my work because it's very easy and not very far away from my home.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and missing conjunctions. Adding 'and' connects the ideas properly. Also, 'very not far away' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'not very far away'. This correction improves sentence clarity and preposition use.

× Yes, I do believe it's a good place to work because work environment and other facilities are top notch.

✓ Yes, I do believe it's a good place to work because the work environment and other facilities are top notch.

The phrase 'work environment' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific environment related to the workplace. Adding 'the' clarifies the meaning and corrects article usage.

× You can study in your free time during work which is I found more beneficial to work here.

✓ You can study in your free time during work which I found more beneficial for working here.

The phrase 'which is I found' is incorrect; it should be 'which I found'. Also, 'to work here' should be 'for working here' to correctly express the benefit related to the activity. These corrections improve sentence structure and preposition use.

× Actually depends, during the weekend the place is more crowded and then weekdays because so many tourists came this place.

✓ Actually, it depends. During the weekend, the place is more crowded than on weekdays because many tourists come to this place.

The original sentence lacks a subject in the first clause and has incorrect conjunction and verb tense usage. Adding 'it' as the subject and splitting into two sentences improves clarity. Also, 'then weekdays' should be 'than on weekdays' for comparison, and 'came' should be 'come' to match present tense. These corrections fix sentence structure and tense.

× Actually depends, during the weekend the place is more crowded and then weekdays because so many tourists came this place.

✓ Actually, it depends. During the weekend, the place is more crowded than on weekdays because many tourists come to this place.

The phrase 'came this place' is incorrect; the correct form is 'come to this place' with the preposition 'to' indicating direction. This correction fixes preposition usage.

× Historically this place is very popular for its variety kind of food and other places.

✓ Historically, this place is very popular for its variety of kinds of food and other attractions.

The phrase 'variety kind of food' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'variety of kinds of food' to express multiple types. Also, 'other places' is vague; 'other attractions' is more appropriate. These corrections fix pluralization and clarity.

× Well I'm doing a part time job beside my study here.

✓ Well, I'm doing a part-time job alongside my studies here.

The phrase 'beside my study' is incorrect; 'alongside my studies' is the correct expression to indicate simultaneous activities. Also, 'part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time'. These corrections improve sentence structure and word form.

× So actually I have a plan after my graduation.

✓ So actually, I have a plan for after my graduation.

Adding 'for' before 'after my graduation' clarifies the timing of the plan. This correction improves prepositional phrase usage related to future plans.

× I have a plan that I will do any official job which is my programming related subject.

✓ I have a plan that I will do an official job related to my programming subject.

The phrase 'any official job' is vague; 'an official job' is more appropriate. Also, 'which is my programming related subject' should be 'related to my programming subject' for clarity. These corrections improve article use and sentence clarity.

× I'm doing CSC right now.

✓ I'm studying CSC right now.

The verb 'doing' is informal and less precise here; 'studying' is more appropriate when referring to academic subjects. This correction improves verb choice and clarity.