Shopping— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers like “Uh” and unnecessary repetition. Add one brief supporting detail with a linking word to explain why you feel that way.

Exemplo: No, I don't. I treat shopping as a chore rather than a hobby because I prefer to buy only what I need to save time and money.

Sugestão: Improve fluency and coherence: remove fragmented phrases and filler words (e.g., “Come on”). Use a clear linking word to explain reason and give a specific example of how you compare prices.

Exemplo: Yes, I always compare prices online because it helps me find the best deals; for example, I check at least three websites and read customer reviews before buying.

Sugestão: Good structure and relevant details. Make the answer slightly more concise and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly (e.g., “because” and “so”). Mention one concrete example to make it specific.

Exemplo: No, it's not difficult because I shop online; I can compare prices and read reviews easily, and if I'm not satisfied I often return items the next day thanks to fast refund policies.

Sugestão: Organize ideas more clearly: start with a clear topic sentence (“Not necessarily.”), then use linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “however”) and give one clear, specific example. Avoid sentence fragments and repetitive adjectives.

Exemplo: Not necessarily. Price can reflect better materials or technology, but many mid-range products offer similar features at lower cost; for example, several affordable smartphones now match flagship features like fast processors and good cameras.

× No, I don't. Uh, actually, I see the shopping mall as a task rather than a hobby, so I buy only what I really need.

✓ No, I don't. Actually, I see shopping as a task rather than a hobby, so I buy only what I really need.

Use of 'the shopping mall' is unnatural when speaking generally about shopping; 'shopping' (uncountable) is more appropriate. Also remove filler 'Uh' for clarity. Keep present simple tense to express habitual action.

× Yes, when I have to do shopping I always compare the prices by Internet.

✓ Yes, when I have to shop, I always compare prices on the Internet.

Use 'shop' instead of 'do shopping' to sound natural and concise. Use 'compare prices' (no article) and the correct preposition 'on the Internet'.

× Back in Korea, online shopping is really. Come on. It can save my money.

✓ Back in Korea, online shopping is really popular because it can save me money.

Original sentence fragments 'online shopping is really. Come on.' are incomplete. Combine into one complete sentence and use 'popular' to complete 'is really'. Use 'save me money' (not 'save my money') for natural phrasing.

× No, I don't think so. I usually shop online so it is very easy to compare prices and quality also in Korea.

✓ No, I don't think so. I usually shop online, so it is very easy to compare prices and quality in Korea as well.

Place adverbial phrase 'in Korea' and 'as well' in natural position. Add a comma before 'so'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× Next day delivery is very common so I buy something and if I don't like it I easily refund it.

✓ Next-day delivery is very common, so I buy things and, if I don't like them, I easily return them for a refund.

Use hyphenated adjective 'next-day delivery'. 'Buy something' should be plural 'buy things' when speaking generally. 'Refund' is usually a noun or a verb 'return for a refund'; use 'return them for a refund'. Match plural pronouns with plural nouns.

× Not necessarily why price of products often use high higher quality materials or advanced technology.

✓ Not necessarily, because the price of a product often reflects the use of higher-quality materials or advanced technology.

Original is a fragment and ungrammatical. Add 'because' to connect ideas. Use singular 'a product' or 'products' consistently; 'reflects the use of' clarifies meaning. Use 'higher-quality' as a hyphenated compound adjective.

× Price alone doesn't guarantee superior performance.

✓ Price alone doesn't guarantee superior performance.

This sentence is correct; kept as is. It expresses a general truth in present simple.

× In many cases mid range or budget items offer excellent value because of efficiency, efficient design or brand competition.

✓ In many cases, mid-range or budget items offer excellent value because of efficiency, efficient design, or brand competition.

Add comma after 'In many cases'. Hyphenate 'mid-range'. Include Oxford comma for clarity. Maintain parallel structure: 'efficiency' and 'efficient design' are acceptable but consider using 'efficient design' and 'manufacturing efficiency' for parallelism.

× For example. Affordable, smart.

✓ For example, affordable models can be very smart.

Original fragments 'For example.' and 'Affordable, smart.' are incomplete. Combine into a full sentence with subject and verb: 'affordable models can be very smart.'

× Once there match many features of flagship models.

✓ Often they match many features of flagship models.

'Once there match' is ungrammatical. Use 'Often they match' to state frequency and correct subject-verb structure. Ensure plural 'they' refers to 'affordable models'.

× Moreover, expensive goods can reflect brand prestige.

✓ Moreover, expensive goods can reflect brand prestige.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. 'Reflect brand prestige' is natural. Kept as is.