Shopping— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (give → gives), and replace vague phrases ("kitchen activities") with precise nouns. Limit to 2–4 sentences and add one specific detail using a linking word.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it helps me relax. For example, I often go with my mother and we buy kitchen gadgets and clothes, which makes our weekends more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Use present tense and more natural phrasing. Provide a clear reason and one specific example, using a linking word to connect ideas. Avoid filler words like "uh".

Exemplo: Yes, I usually compare prices because some stores mark items up a lot. For instance, I always check online reviews and a few other shops before buying to make sure I'm getting a fair price.

Sugestão: Reduce fillers and clarify your meaning. Start with a topic sentence, explain why choices are hard, and give a specific example. Use linking words (for example, because) and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I sometimes find it hard to choose because I like many different styles of shoes. For example, I often hesitate between comfort and style, so I compare features like cushioning and price before deciding.

Sugestão: Avoid unclear phrases and grammar errors. Give a balanced opinion and a specific reason with an example, using linking words like "however" or "sometimes" to show nuance.

Exemplo: I think expensive products are often more durable and maintain their color longer. However, cheaper items can still be good value for basic uses; for example, I buy an expensive winter coat but cheaper T-shirts for everyday wear.

× It's give me like feels of relaxations.

✓ It gives me a feeling of relaxation.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'It's give' is incorrect because the subject 'it' with present simple requires 'gives' (third person singular). 'Feels of relaxations' is unnatural; use 'a feeling of relaxation' (singular, uncountable). Suggestion: use 'gives me a feeling of relaxation' or 'relaxes me.'

× I go to shopping with my mother and we buy kitchen activities and clothes for us.

✓ I go shopping with my mother, and we buy kitchen items and clothes for ourselves.

Preposition and word choice: 'go to shopping' should be 'go shopping.' 'Kitchen activities' is incorrect for objects; use 'kitchen items' or 'kitchenware.' Pronoun use: 'for us' is better as the reflexive 'for ourselves' to indicate we buy for ourselves. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses.

× Yes, I compared those price because nowadays many stores are like uh scamming like putting the high price tags and I have seen those many frauds.

✓ Yes, I compare prices because nowadays many stores scam customers by putting high price tags, and I have seen many such frauds.

Tense and number: The question asks about a habitual action ('Do you compare prices?'), so use present simple 'compare' not past 'compared.' 'Those price' is incorrect number; use plural 'those prices' or simply 'prices.' Word form and clarity: 'are like uh scamming like putting the high price tags' is awkward; use 'scam customers by putting high price tags.' 'I have seen those many frauds' -> 'I have seen many such frauds.' Suggest practicing present simple for routines and plural agreement.

× Uh, yes, uh, sometimes, uh, I feel very difficult to make choices, uh, because I've seen like, uh, different kinds of shoes, uh, I love, but I cannot offer them.

✓ Yes, sometimes I find it very difficult to make choices because I see many different kinds of shoes that I love but cannot afford.

Verb choice and sentence structure: 'I feel very difficult' is incorrect; use 'I find it very difficult.' Tense consistency: use present simple for habitual/ongoing feelings ('find', 'see'). 'I cannot offer them' is incorrect for lacking money; use 'cannot afford them.' Remove filler words and reorder relative clause: 'shoes that I love.'

× So also it's very nice. I can, I can even do anything.

✓ Also, it's very nice; I can even do anything I want there.

Clarity and sentence completeness: The original is fragmented and vague. 'So also it's very nice' is awkward—start with 'Also, it's very nice.' 'I can, I can even do anything' needs completion: specify 'do anything I want there.' This makes the sentence grammatically complete and clear.

× Yes I definitely think expensive products can be a long lasting and can be less like less color changing products and cheaper ones like cheaper ones.

✓ Yes, I definitely think expensive products can be more long-lasting and less likely to change color than cheaper ones.

Form and comparison: 'can be a long lasting' should be 'can be more long-lasting' or 'longer lasting.' 'Less like less color changing products' is ungrammatical; use 'less likely to change color.' Comparison with 'cheaper ones' should be concise: 'than cheaper ones.' Use comparative structure 'more ... than ...' and correct adjective form 'long-lasting.'

× Get chalky and get dressed.

✓ They tend to become chalky and wear out.

Sentence fragment and verb choice: 'Get chalky and get dressed' is unclear and lacks subject. For products, use 'they tend to become chalky and wear out' to describe deterioration. 'Get dressed' is wrong meaning; 'wear out' or 'fade' is appropriate. Ensure subject is present and verbs match meaning.