Party— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: In English (Ethiopia), try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and unclear phrases. For example, instead of 'like putting myself in very over stimulating, like confining objects and places,' you can say 'because party places are often noisy and crowded, which I find overwhelming.' Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and use linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: I don't consider myself a party person because I prefer quiet environments. Party places are often noisy and crowded, which I find overwhelming. Therefore, I usually enjoy spending time alone or with close friends rather than attending big parties.

Sugestão: In English (Ethiopia), try to improve your answer by using clearer linking words and more specific details. For example, use 'usually' instead of 'most of the time' and connect ideas with 'however' to show contrast. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'and nothing more.'

Exemplo: When I was a kid, my parents usually hosted a party for my birthday, and I enjoyed it a lot. However, as I grew older, I preferred spending time alone rather than attending parties.

Sugestão: In English (Ethiopia), try to make your answer more fluent and clear by avoiding filler words like 'like' and by using linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'I organized a surprise birthday party for my younger brother and invited all his friends.' This makes your answer more direct and effective.

Exemplo: Yes, I organized a surprise birthday party for my younger brother and invited all his friends. It was a memorable event that he really enjoyed.

× I enjoy my own company because being outside in party places is like putting myself in very over stimulating, like confining objects and places and I don't like that very much.

✓ I enjoy my own company because being outside in party places is like putting myself in very overstimulating, confining objects and places, and I don't like that very much.

The word 'over stimulating' should be combined into one word 'overstimulating' as it is a compound adjective describing 'objects and places'. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' to separate the clauses clearly.

× How often did you have a party when you were a kid?

✓ How often did you have parties when you were a kid?

The question uses 'a party' which is singular, but generally, children have multiple parties over time. Using the plural 'parties' fits better with the question about frequency.

× When I was a kid, most of the time my parents used to host a party for my birthday and maybe because I was a kid I used to enjoy it.

✓ When I was a kid, most of the time my parents used to host parties for my birthday and maybe because I was a kid I used to enjoy them.

Since birthdays occur annually, 'parties' should be plural. Also, 'it' should be changed to 'them' to refer back to the plural 'parties'.

× I hosted a birthday party for my younger brother once, calling all his friends, but it was like more of a surprise party.

✓ I hosted a birthday party for my younger brother once, inviting all his friends, but it was more like a surprise party.

'Calling all his friends' is awkward; 'inviting all his friends' is more appropriate. Also, 'like more of a surprise party' should be reordered to 'more like a surprise party' for correct idiomatic expression.