Gifts— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, and limit to 3–4 clear sentences. Use one or two specific reasons and a brief example or feeling. Use linking words (for example, because) appropriately and check grammar (e.g., 'helps others feel special' not 'helps others to feel special for us').

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts because it strengthens my relationships. I often make handmade presents since they show effort and feel more personal. For example, I once knitted a scarf for my sister and she was really touched.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and reduce redundancy. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating typical occasions, then add one short reason or personal feeling. Avoid awkward phrases (e.g., 'Talk in Turkey' and 'enhance the respect of me').

Exemplo: I usually give gifts on special occasions like birthdays and weddings. These moments create lasting memories, and I feel very happy when my gifts are appreciated.

Sugestão: Good structure and relevant example; improve tense consistency, phrasing and remove small errors. Start with present simple ('I usually consider'), keep linking words concise, and correct 'feel the appreciated' to 'feel appreciated'.

Exemplo: I usually consider the recipient's tastes and hobbies when choosing a gift. For example, I buy books for avid readers and kitchen gadgets for people who love cooking, so the present feels personal and useful.

Sugestão: Be concise and correct grammar. Use singular/plural correctly and avoid repetition ('liked by others because it is made by love and respect' is redundant). Provide one specific example with clearer wording and correct article use ('on my best friend's birthday').

Exemplo: Yes. I prefer handmade gifts because they show effort and personal care. For example, every year I make a paper bouquet for my best friend's birthday, and she always appreciates it.

Sugestão: State your opinion clearly and support it with a brief reason and example. Fix grammar (singular/plural and article usage) and avoid awkward phrasing like 'according to my perspective'—use 'I believe' instead.

Exemplo: I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better. I believe thoughtful presents, regardless of price, show care—for instance, a heartfelt letter or a homemade meal can be more meaningful than an expensive item.

× I am quite fond of giving gifts to others because it helps to strengthen the bond with our loved ones.

✓ I am quite fond of giving gifts to others because it helps to strengthen the bond with my loved ones.

The student used the possessive determiner 'our' which is vague in a personal response; 'my loved ones' is more appropriate and consistent. Use the correct possessive pronoun to match the speaker's perspective.

× Moreover, I mostly give handmade gifts to others, which shows my efforts and hard work for them, and it also helps others to feel special for us.

✓ Moreover, I mostly give handmade gifts to others, which shows my effort and hard work for them, and it also helps others to feel special.

Use 'effort' (uncountable) rather than 'efforts' in this context and remove 'for us' because it is unnecessary and causes pronoun mismatch. Also 'feel special' is complete without 'for us.' Keep pronouns consistent with the speaker's viewpoint.

× Talk in Turkey, I usually give gifts to others on some special occasions such as birthday parties and weddings which helps to make memories and it also helps me to feel over the moon whenever I give gifts to other because it enhance the respect of me in the eyes of others.

✓ Back in Turkey, I usually give gifts to others on special occasions such as birthday parties and weddings, which helps to make memories, and it also makes me feel over the moon whenever I give gifts to others because it enhances my respect in the eyes of others.

'Talk in Turkey' is incorrect; use 'Back in Turkey' or 'In Turkey.' 'on some special occasions' -> 'on special occasions' is more natural. 'give gifts to other' -> 'give gifts to others' plural. 'enhance' needs third-person singular 'enhances' to agree with singular subject and 'the respect of me' should be 'my respect.' Also punctuation needed to separate clauses.

× I usually considered a recipient's taste and hobbies when choosing a gift because people prefer different things.

✓ I usually consider a recipient's taste and hobbies when choosing a gift because people prefer different things.

The adverb 'usually' indicates a habitual present action, so the verb should be present simple 'consider' not past 'considered.' Maintain consistent tense for habits.

× For example, I will buy books for an avid reader or kitchen gadgets for someone who enjoys cooking.

✓ For example, I buy books for an avid reader or kitchen gadgets for someone who enjoys cooking.

The previous sentence discusses general habits, so use present simple 'I buy' rather than future 'I will buy.' No article error; however change tense to match context.

× So the gift feels personal and useful, and it also helps me to feel the appreciated by others.

✓ So the gift feels personal and useful, and it also helps me to feel appreciated by others.

'the appreciated' is incorrect; remove the definite article. 'Feel appreciated' is the correct collocation. Also 'helps me to feel appreciated' is concise.

× Yes definitely. I mostly give handmade gifts to others because it shows our efforts and hard works to other and it is also liked by others because it is made by love and respect.

✓ Yes, definitely. I mostly give handmade gifts to others because they show my effort and hard work, and they are also liked by others because they are made with love and respect.

Pronoun and agreement issues: 'it shows' should be 'they show' to match plural 'gifts.' Use singular 'effort' and 'hard work' (uncountable). 'to other' -> 'by others' or removed; better 'they are liked by others.' Use 'made with love and respect' (correct preposition).

× For example on my best friend birthday every year I give her a bouquet which is a handmade.

✓ For example, on my best friend's birthday every year I give her a bouquet that is handmade.

Missing possessive apostrophe: 'my best friend birthday' -> 'my best friend's birthday.' Use 'a bouquet that is handmade' or 'a handmade bouquet.' Include commas for clarity.

× According to my perspective, any luxury gifts does not express our feelings for others because gifts are given with love and respect.

✓ From my perspective, luxury gifts do not express our feelings for others because gifts are given with love and respect.

Subject-verb agreement: 'gifts' is plural so use 'do not' not 'does not.' 'Any luxury gifts' is awkward; 'luxury gifts' is sufficient. 'According to my perspective' -> 'From my perspective' is more natural.

× Money does not matter in the in choosing the gift because it depends upon person to person and it is based on care and love, not with money.

✓ Money does not matter in choosing a gift because it depends from person to person and it is based on care and love, not on money.

Remove duplicated 'the in.' Use 'depends from person to person' or better 'varies from person to person.' Use preposition 'on' with 'based on' and 'not on money.'