Websites— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct collocations (e.g., “social websites” or “social media”), avoid repetition, and correct noun phrases (e.g., “different cultures” not “cult countries cultures”). Use one or two supporting details and a linking word.

Exemplo: I often visit entertainment and social media sites like YouTube and blogs. For example, I watch travel videos to see beautiful scenery and follow creators to keep in touch with friends and discover different cultures.

Sugestão: Correct verb forms and word choice, be specific about content, and avoid unrelated or unclear phrases. Use linking words (e.g., “for example,” “also”) and keep to 2–3 supporting points. Replace incorrect verbs (“wash”) with “watch” and unclear references (“their daughter's daily life”) with precise descriptions.

Exemplo: My favourite website is Bilibili because it offers a wide range of videos. For example, I watch skiing tutorials to improve my technique, and I also enjoy well-made documentaries about everyday life because they are informative and engaging.

Sugestão: Clarify the idea and use correct nouns and expressions. Start with a clear topic sentence about recent changes, explain one or two specific feature changes, and use linking words like “because” or “so”. Avoid invented terms like “egg attack” unless clarified; use accurate vocabulary (e.g., “comments,” “translation features,” “migration from TikTok”).

Exemplo: Yes. Recently many sites added translation features and better comment moderation because many users migrated from TikTok. As a result, platforms now make it easier for people worldwide to understand and interact with content.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer and avoid asking the examiner a question. Use correct grammar (singular/plural, articles) and clearer linking phrases (“because,” “so,” “therefore”). Give one or two specific reasons and correct awkward phrases.

Exemplo: Short-video platforms like TikTok are very popular in my country, especially among teenagers. They are popular because they cover many topics, so users can quickly find videos they like and follow current trends.

Sugestão: Use correct collocations and smoother examples. Start directly with preference, give one clear reason, and support with a concise, accurate example. Avoid awkward phrasing like “the reason the outbreaks Ebola in Africa's.”

Exemplo: I prefer getting information from websites because they are more up-to-date and can provide real-time updates. For example, during disease outbreaks, online news and official health websites publish updates much faster than printed books.

Sugestão: Give a clear, concise reason and correct grammar. State the purpose of the website and one or two benefits. Avoid filler words and unclear fragments (“POS,” “publish to my or recent daily lives”).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to have my own website to share my daily life and projects. It would also help me learn web design skills and try new ideas for presenting content.

Sugestão: Organize the answer: start with a topic sentence, then give a specific example and result. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “astronomy,” “courses,” “explanations,” “master”) and avoid long disfluent phrasing. Use linking words like “for example” and “after.”

Exemplo: Websites have helped me study difficult subjects like astronomy. For example, I watched clear video lessons and saw photographs that explained concepts visually, and after studying those materials I found the topics much easier to understand.

× I often visit the entertainment and social websites like YouTube and various blogs.

✓ I often visit entertainment and social websites like YouTube and various blogs.

The article 'the' before plural 'entertainment and social websites' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Removing 'the' makes the phrase natural. Suggestion: omit 'the' when referring to categories in general.

× I enjoy them because I can connect with friends and content creators around the world, browse photos and videos of beautiful sceneries, and learn about different cult countries cultures.

✓ I enjoy them because I can connect with friends and content creators around the world, browse photos and videos of beautiful scenery, and learn about different cultures and countries.

Use 'scenery' as an uncountable noun rather than 'sceneries'. The phrase 'cult countries cultures' is incorrect word order and word choice: 'different cultures and countries' or 'cultures of different countries' is appropriate. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and proper word order for clarity.

× One of my favorite websites is Bilibili because it offer a wide range of videos including the tutorials and documentaries.

✓ One of my favorite websites is Bilibili because it offers a wide range of videos, including tutorials and documentaries.

With singular subject 'it' the verb should be 'offers' (third person singular). Also 'including the tutorials' needs no definite article; use plural noun 'tutorials'. Suggestion: match verb form to subject and remove unnecessary articles.

× I often wash the skiing tutorials to improve my techniques and I enjoyed watching documentaries about their daughter's daily life because they are informative and interesting.

✓ I often watch skiing tutorials to improve my technique, and I enjoy watching documentaries about people's daily lives because they are informative and interesting.

'Wash' is incorrect; should be 'watch' (spelling error). 'Techniques' can be singular 'technique' for general skill, though plural is also possible—use singular for naturalness. 'I enjoyed' is past tense inconsistent with general preference; use present 'I enjoy'. 'their daughter's daily life' is unclear and likely should be plural 'people's daily lives'. Suggestion: correct verb, align tense, and clarify reference.

× Yes, recently read books changed some features, for example the egg attack and the translation functions because there are so many Tiktok refugees migrated into these websites.

✓ Yes, recently reading apps or platforms changed some features, for example the 'egg attack' and the translation functions, because so many TikTok users migrated to these websites.

Sentence has tense and word-choice issues. 'read books changed' is incorrect; likely intended 'reading apps/platforms' or 'platforms changed'. 'Tiktok refugees migrated' is awkward; use 'users migrated'. Use present perfect or simple past as appropriate; here 'migrated' is fine but 'because so many TikTok users migrated' is clearer. Suggestion: use precise nouns and natural expressions.

× So these features were developed to create to let the users all over the world to understand the content easily.

✓ So these features were developed to let users all over the world understand the content more easily.

Unnecessary verbs 'create to' and extra 'to' before 'understand' create redundancy. Use 'let users understand' and adverb 'more easily' for clarity. Suggestion: eliminate redundant words and use correct infinitive structure.

× Are you my country? Short video platform such as Tiktok are extremely popular among both and younger teenagers.

✓ In my country, short video platforms such as TikTok are extremely popular among both younger people and teenagers.

'Are you my country?' is wrong pronoun use; likely meant 'In my country'. 'Short video platform' should be plural 'platforms' to match 'are'. 'both and younger teenagers' is incorrect ordering; use 'both younger people and teenagers' or simply 'young people and teenagers'. Suggestion: use correct phrase 'In my country' and ensure noun-pronoun agreement.

× They attract users because they should come Videos coverage a wide range of topics, which make everyone can find their own favorites through browsing it and also follow the, uh, trends.

✓ They attract users because videos cover a wide range of topics, which means everyone can find their own favorites by browsing and can also follow trends.

Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure errors: 'Videos coverage' is wrong—use 'videos cover'. 'which make everyone can' should be 'which means everyone can'. Remove extraneous words like 'should come' and 'the, uh,'. Suggestion: simplify clauses and ensure verbs agree with subjects.

× I prefer getting information from websites because they provide a real time feedback and a more up to date information than books.

✓ I prefer getting information from websites because they provide real-time feedback and more up-to-date information than books.

Use hyphenated compound adjectives 'real-time' and 'up-to-date'. Also 'a ... information' is incorrect; 'information' is uncountable so drop 'a' and use plural adjectives without article. Suggestion: treat 'information' as uncountable and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× For example, the reason the outbreaks Ebola in Africa's online news reports and official health reports published much faster than the, uh, official books of WHO.

✓ For example, during the Ebola outbreaks in Africa, online news reports and official health reports were published much faster than the official WHO reports or books.

Word order and tense: 'the outbreaks Ebola in Africa's' is incorrect; use 'the Ebola outbreaks in Africa'. Use passive 'were published' to indicate reports being released. 'official books of WHO' is awkward; use 'official WHO reports'. Suggestion: reorder noun phrases, use passive appropriately, and choose correct noun.

× Yes, I want to have my own special design websites to POS uh, to publish to my or recent uh daily lives and also is a good way to learn new techniques and explore new kind of knowledge in the website designs.

✓ Yes, I want to have my own specially designed website to post my recent daily life updates; it is also a good way to learn new techniques and explore new kinds of knowledge in website design.

Use 'specially designed' (adverb + participle) rather than 'special design websites'. 'POS' likely 'post'. 'publish to my or recent daily lives' is unclear; use 'post my recent daily life updates'. 'is a good way' needs subject 'it'. 'new kind of knowledge' should be 'new kinds of knowledge' or 'new knowledge'. Suggestion: choose correct adjective/adverb forms, correct verb, and ensure sentence has subject and verb.

× Umm, recently I used ability to learn some lessons, umm, such as the astronomies in my new schools which I found looks really difficult at first, but later on after learning curriculums in abilities, I uh, through this uh, vividly demonstrates and all the photographs I found those easy to masters.

✓ Recently I used online resources to learn lessons, such as astronomy at my new school, which I found very difficult at first, but after following the curriculum and studying with demonstrations and photographs, I found these topics easy to master.

The original sentence has multiple structure and word-choice errors: 'used ability to learn' should be 'used online resources to learn' or 'used websites to learn'. 'astronomies' should be 'astronomy'. 'my new schools' should be 'my new school'. 'learning curriculums in abilities' is unclear; use 'following the curriculum'. 'vividly demonstrates' should be 'vivid demonstrations'. 'found those easy to masters' should be 'found these topics easy to master'. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses, use correct noun forms, and ensure verb phrases are consistent.